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Comment from livelylinda
Michael: Over the years, I have discovered that I do so much better without a Valentine. I've been acquainted with many throughout my time and they all disappointed . . . my problem or theirs or probably a mixture thereof . . . I will buy myself a box of chocolates tomorrow, eat them all by myself and appreciate the me I have become and argue with no one. I was meant to be alone. Be true to your Valentine. Soft Thunder
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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Michael: Over the years, I have discovered that I do so much better without a Valentine. I've been acquainted with many throughout my time and they all disappointed . . . my problem or theirs or probably a mixture thereof . . . I will buy myself a box of chocolates tomorrow, eat them all by myself and appreciate the me I have become and argue with no one. I was meant to be alone. Be true to your Valentine. Soft Thunder
Comment Written 13-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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When I was in fourth grade...I ah I held ah the teacher hostage. Well...I did...and didn't. I was in a sort of confrontation with Mrs. Shultz...when I "knew" she was about to head for help toward the principals office...so I said...Danny...the door.
and his overgrown frame became barricade.
it didn't last long...she slowly sunk back to sitting position
then sprung forth with plea...Ronnie go out the window....he didn't make it. ah I knew at this point I had gone too far...and so said. Danny,...let her go. and ah boy she sure did. when I think back in my life...Danny was my Valentine...ah you know not in the "normal" sense....obviously...-smile-....but he would have done anything for me....anything I asked him too. He loved me more than himself. I dont know why...and no one has like that ever sense. with such dependable conviction....I knew he had my back. I knew he would hurt himself before he'd hurt me. we wait for our box of chocolate instead of being. My younger life experience was unusual I hope...but point is who is our valentine...? whoever loves you like Danny loved me. Happy V Day Thunder...love you Michael
Comment from Leineco
Sounds like someone is missing
a special poetry lady. . .
perhaps a little Mo' than usual
the lady of the lake
who walked on midnight's shores
and danced in Calliope's sandals
leaving a trail of savoir-faire
churning in her wake
unebel esprit absentee
whose poetry soothed the savage beast
and enchanted the ladies fair
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Sounds like someone is missing
a special poetry lady. . .
perhaps a little Mo' than usual
the lady of the lake
who walked on midnight's shores
and danced in Calliope's sandals
leaving a trail of savoir-faire
churning in her wake
unebel esprit absentee
whose poetry soothed the savage beast
and enchanted the ladies fair
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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-smile-...yes I miss her. ...and would write for her the best of me. and I sure hope she knows that. She is very special and I fell in love from afar...and forever will be. but .....there is only one love that I've ever had that wakes and sleeps with me ever since. I married her. thanks...-smile- love Michael
Comment from Ricky1024
as I read this some pizza from riding Pegasus 2 deciphering the word of David it's a poetic definite form the creator put the fork down there and then let you think about see if you can figure it out for like a little bit of putting the pieces of the puzzle the beginning the puzzle was the beginning of sentences and in the end of the puzzle is basic to the last corner piece which is supposed to be the ending and then it supposed to fit the deeper it is the harder it is the more pieces putting the puzzle of course my largest puzzle I've ever created was 16800 which is a resurrection to st. Anthony by HMS harmonious Bosch that took me 3 months between the characters a shins and everything going on which was about maybe 20 different things from a naked woman who was only one puzzle piece getting ready to jump off commit suicide to the evil demons figuring out what to do to St Anthony flying above in the dark blue night sky on the back of a big bird it's all quite interesting and if you follow each of the funniest bosses artwork and go online on a site to look at it you could probably get some great thoughts and ideas and bring that imagery reading to your words you know an example be seen Anthony flying on the back of the bird you know you could utilize that one day I'm perming it through and see how is absorbed contemplated I don't think there's too many of you about to go understand you Michael just like there's not too many to understand me and not too many out there they can even decipher my words that I make up like other words back to logically spectra logic logical or illogical depending on whether or not you know what the word logic is you understand of course and if you don't then you then you must not even know what the word illogical is it watch it because basically your an idiot you know that how that would work so well I made up another cool work or beautification which is basically not to justify something is to basically denounce the seven deadly sins so its called the seven laws beautification that's been posted on fans throughout North you are ready cuz I'm going to be reviewing lock it starts with the addictions to the many ills of course injection heroin and alcohol is and then it goes to the back of the industry where they post on the pack of cigarettes cigarette smoking can cause cancer work since a cigarette cancer not only will cause cancer but it will call emphysema and other gasoline lung problems were eventually you will not be able to breathe cough up phlegm and then die and then I go across to the back in and redo the industry with Robert everyday with overdraft charges I'll bounce fees and higher interest rates then we go across to the auto industry where they're sucking up where God left below not meant to be up here in work and they're putting orders and error with it with the creations of cars & vehicles we're too far advanced to quick on destroying the Earth and said they should be drilling for water and saving these people dying from dysentry in 13 genius countries and then of course we're going to go to the telecommunication industry that charges an arm and a leg just for a Wi-Fi service which should be free since it is in the air ways you know if you're stupid enough to pay for it in your house when you can go and tap it from various places display free like McDonalds and then pay for you know what I've been asked for the TV service and phone service are atrocious and then we'll go to the either the 6th or the 7th which is this is 6 of a complete loss of Appalachian lost so we have to make damn Walmart f****** ass try pretending that they are the cheapest in the land when they buy everything so damn sheets are actually making an arm and a leg cuz i buy some mass quantities and tractor trailer loads of one item you know mm stores all over then we're going to go to last one which is the lack of religion which is my personal favorite of people don't go topeople don't go to church anymore this Sunday is not only found a Sunday again but it's also Valentine's Day to go to the church and taking the sacrament and in final of the most important being on this planet and what instead of when things go bad pray to God that everything will get better when the going gets tough the tough get going but in that case when the going gets tough to the non religious so atheists get Bagon in a row so that's about all I have to say and have a happy Valentine's Day 24 24 ou
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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as I read this some pizza from riding Pegasus 2 deciphering the word of David it's a poetic definite form the creator put the fork down there and then let you think about see if you can figure it out for like a little bit of putting the pieces of the puzzle the beginning the puzzle was the beginning of sentences and in the end of the puzzle is basic to the last corner piece which is supposed to be the ending and then it supposed to fit the deeper it is the harder it is the more pieces putting the puzzle of course my largest puzzle I've ever created was 16800 which is a resurrection to st. Anthony by HMS harmonious Bosch that took me 3 months between the characters a shins and everything going on which was about maybe 20 different things from a naked woman who was only one puzzle piece getting ready to jump off commit suicide to the evil demons figuring out what to do to St Anthony flying above in the dark blue night sky on the back of a big bird it's all quite interesting and if you follow each of the funniest bosses artwork and go online on a site to look at it you could probably get some great thoughts and ideas and bring that imagery reading to your words you know an example be seen Anthony flying on the back of the bird you know you could utilize that one day I'm perming it through and see how is absorbed contemplated I don't think there's too many of you about to go understand you Michael just like there's not too many to understand me and not too many out there they can even decipher my words that I make up like other words back to logically spectra logic logical or illogical depending on whether or not you know what the word logic is you understand of course and if you don't then you then you must not even know what the word illogical is it watch it because basically your an idiot you know that how that would work so well I made up another cool work or beautification which is basically not to justify something is to basically denounce the seven deadly sins so its called the seven laws beautification that's been posted on fans throughout North you are ready cuz I'm going to be reviewing lock it starts with the addictions to the many ills of course injection heroin and alcohol is and then it goes to the back of the industry where they post on the pack of cigarettes cigarette smoking can cause cancer work since a cigarette cancer not only will cause cancer but it will call emphysema and other gasoline lung problems were eventually you will not be able to breathe cough up phlegm and then die and then I go across to the back in and redo the industry with Robert everyday with overdraft charges I'll bounce fees and higher interest rates then we go across to the auto industry where they're sucking up where God left below not meant to be up here in work and they're putting orders and error with it with the creations of cars & vehicles we're too far advanced to quick on destroying the Earth and said they should be drilling for water and saving these people dying from dysentry in 13 genius countries and then of course we're going to go to the telecommunication industry that charges an arm and a leg just for a Wi-Fi service which should be free since it is in the air ways you know if you're stupid enough to pay for it in your house when you can go and tap it from various places display free like McDonalds and then pay for you know what I've been asked for the TV service and phone service are atrocious and then we'll go to the either the 6th or the 7th which is this is 6 of a complete loss of Appalachian lost so we have to make damn Walmart f****** ass try pretending that they are the cheapest in the land when they buy everything so damn sheets are actually making an arm and a leg cuz i buy some mass quantities and tractor trailer loads of one item you know mm stores all over then we're going to go to last one which is the lack of religion which is my personal favorite of people don't go topeople don't go to church anymore this Sunday is not only found a Sunday again but it's also Valentine's Day to go to the church and taking the sacrament and in final of the most important being on this planet and what instead of when things go bad pray to God that everything will get better when the going gets tough the tough get going but in that case when the going gets tough to the non religious so atheists get Bagon in a row so that's about all I have to say and have a happy Valentine's Day 24 24 ou
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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I absolutely agree Ricky...it sucks.
but it aint never gonna change until or unless we all swing with one fist. ...and getting together is ah...ah .....you know like a Wal-Mart trip. So...I dont know if you can swim get the hell out of here.....I hear they love people in Canada enough to help them for free when their hurt......can you image....Alright Bro...I have to quit talking like this or they'll put back on medicine....freakin' trolls. love Michael
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take care son and write well as the year progresses realize your potential collect your slotsfarm book store them in when the time is right release your work don't listen to anybody they have no idea what your gift is talk to you too very few walk the right house and listen to what God tells you 24-hour
Comment from RGstar
Beautiful poetry, my friend. A tone of melancholy and words that are stitched from , Psalms of David, Greek Mythology...Socrates...through to Cupid, makes this an interesting read. Your report style is filled with poetic aura, and it must be read a couple of times to taste its full beauty.
The incredible vision you create with the music video adds that certain quality with the sign language involved.
Bravo.
Well done, Michael.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Beautiful poetry, my friend. A tone of melancholy and words that are stitched from , Psalms of David, Greek Mythology...Socrates...through to Cupid, makes this an interesting read. Your report style is filled with poetic aura, and it must be read a couple of times to taste its full beauty.
The incredible vision you create with the music video adds that certain quality with the sign language involved.
Bravo.
Well done, Michael.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Hey Bro...what does "artsy" mean to you...? do you mind...? ha...yea, I was heading in a different direction when I found that video...and my world fell in the face of Johnny....and I started thinking about artsy....then the tears...lead into ocean of emotion that has now depleted me of most of my living fluids....I'll be alright. love ya man....Michael
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You're the man. M.
Comment from Joyce Long
I'm not certain if you turned away from love because she was artsy or felt not equal to her. Either way would be a tragedy. When love comes there will be a way to work it out together. Interesting ideas about poetry--what will be, will be. Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 02-10-16
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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I'm not certain if you turned away from love because she was artsy or felt not equal to her. Either way would be a tragedy. When love comes there will be a way to work it out together. Interesting ideas about poetry--what will be, will be. Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 02-10-16
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Hi joyce...-smile- ...ah no...it was the other way around when we first met...but I set her in the midst of bad influence.
ah "artsy"....I had "couldn't read" at first...but changed it before I read Lovi tell me how wonderful it was...-shouldershrug-...my definition reads..."one pretending to enjoy art"..."showing a great interest but in a way that is not sincere" Macmillan dictionary...there is a way...but that would require facing somethings she'd rather run from. yes Maam...and what is...is. -smile- love Michael
Comment from DonandVicki
I'm not sure if this is what you intended or not but I think that this poem could be made easily into lyrics for a song. I can almost feel the tune.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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I'm not sure if this is what you intended or not but I think that this poem could be made easily into lyrics for a song. I can almost feel the tune.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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yes...it is...a long song of lonesome love....-smile- playing to an audience unnoticed. I tried to add humor to it...but it aint funny. appreciate you taking the time...love Michael
Comment from I am Cat
OMG, I love this... I wanted so badly to save it for Sunday...
but I actually couldn't wait to tell you how much i loved it.
It's so amazing, Michael...
It's (IMHO) the best (at least for me, personally) piece of poetry I've read of yours.
It touches me in the very heart of who I am.
Unbelievably breathtaking... unbelievably so.
felt the empathy of all the poetry
that ever was or will be
escorted by Calliope's idiosyncrasy
heart desire quilled sensual ocean depths
carved initials in every first loves family tree
recited Greek mythology in muse of Socrates
saddled Pegasus any given Sunday to sight see abstruse
perfected the psalms of David in everyday plea
shared Cupid's secrets of the deeper mystery
learned to turn wishes into truths
even maybe to jubilee
but nobody told him she was artsy
oh jeez... this is like a sweet caress,
with perfect hands on every curve of my body...
lying in the after,
in soft supplication...
warm and moist... in afternoon sun...
or moonlight serenade...
lovely... just lovely
and i was there, in the moment...mmmm and it was me.
THAT'S how powerful it was.
how sweet is that?
poetry.. poetry as it's meant to be!
ah, to be young and oh so surrendering...
oh hell, I'm much more surrendering in my older years. LOL
beautiful, Michael...
just to 'go there' is lovely.
thank you, dear 'boy'... for that.
;) *smiles*
a virtual galaxy... is yours
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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OMG, I love this... I wanted so badly to save it for Sunday...
but I actually couldn't wait to tell you how much i loved it.
It's so amazing, Michael...
It's (IMHO) the best (at least for me, personally) piece of poetry I've read of yours.
It touches me in the very heart of who I am.
Unbelievably breathtaking... unbelievably so.
felt the empathy of all the poetry
that ever was or will be
escorted by Calliope's idiosyncrasy
heart desire quilled sensual ocean depths
carved initials in every first loves family tree
recited Greek mythology in muse of Socrates
saddled Pegasus any given Sunday to sight see abstruse
perfected the psalms of David in everyday plea
shared Cupid's secrets of the deeper mystery
learned to turn wishes into truths
even maybe to jubilee
but nobody told him she was artsy
oh jeez... this is like a sweet caress,
with perfect hands on every curve of my body...
lying in the after,
in soft supplication...
warm and moist... in afternoon sun...
or moonlight serenade...
lovely... just lovely
and i was there, in the moment...mmmm and it was me.
THAT'S how powerful it was.
how sweet is that?
poetry.. poetry as it's meant to be!
ah, to be young and oh so surrendering...
oh hell, I'm much more surrendering in my older years. LOL
beautiful, Michael...
just to 'go there' is lovely.
thank you, dear 'boy'... for that.
;) *smiles*
a virtual galaxy... is yours
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Hey Purty...-smile-...really...? I thought my other two were better...ya know the one with glass of wine...or the lil' girl angel blowing kisses...right...? -headtilt-....I thought i knew these things Calico...you're freaking me out...ah haha...ah thanks...I was trying to write something pretty....then I met Johnny...Jesus its pretty bad when Johnny Depp is said. -headshake-...I dont know Cat...I dont know anymore....I'm just a man...a simple man...I cant take this...please help me. ...-smile- thank you Sweetheart...love Michael
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Lol, I just love the wonderful feelings the evokes... Better and better... And yummy, Johnny is putty too... The three of us, now you're talking. Lol
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ah...ah I dont like to share like that...i would probably kill him...please dont get me in trouble Kitten...-smile-
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Mwah! ;)
Comment from Joan E.
My, you're on a tear with all these poems. Thank you for the timely Valentine theme. I enjoyed all your "ee" rhymes and your allusions to turning "wishes into truths" especially by some of the greatest tellers like Socrates. Sorry about the one that got away...but the "carved initials" provide fond memories. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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My, you're on a tear with all these poems. Thank you for the timely Valentine theme. I enjoyed all your "ee" rhymes and your allusions to turning "wishes into truths" especially by some of the greatest tellers like Socrates. Sorry about the one that got away...but the "carved initials" provide fond memories. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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I'm racing the rankings this year J....no. one man on a mission....I'm a get Oscar this time...one way another..beg borrow or steel toes...-wink- ah haha...ah I'm ah got a lil' free time on my hands -shuldershrug-...godumbit....love you Michael
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A little free time is good--just not too much. Here's to your Oscar winning performances! Big hugs- Joan
Comment from AnnaLinda
Michael,
What a beautiful poem you have penned! (I had to look up "bel esprit")
Very nice...but >"absentee" :( Interesting line with "carving memories in every first love's family tree" Wishes into truths and maybe jubilee...I also liked your repeating line.
"Socorette" interesting...you may have lost me in that stanza, but that's not
that difficult to do..."saddled Pegasus" mmm
Well, we don't want to overload my mind too early today, do we? Or any time
of day for that matter.
I really enjoyed reading this and I also liked the music. The little video was
cute too! Extraordinary poem and presentation. I'll keep my comments about
Johnny to myself;)
Linda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Michael,
What a beautiful poem you have penned! (I had to look up "bel esprit")
Very nice...but >"absentee" :( Interesting line with "carving memories in every first love's family tree" Wishes into truths and maybe jubilee...I also liked your repeating line.
"Socorette" interesting...you may have lost me in that stanza, but that's not
that difficult to do..."saddled Pegasus" mmm
Well, we don't want to overload my mind too early today, do we? Or any time
of day for that matter.
I really enjoyed reading this and I also liked the music. The little video was
cute too! Extraordinary poem and presentation. I'll keep my comments about
Johnny to myself;)
Linda
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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hey thank you...switched socrates with his imposter...now all I need is a cure for artsy. were getting there...ah haha...thanks Linda...love Michael
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Speaking of "artsy" What I came up with for Johnny D. > Artsy fartsy...to be nice.
Ok on socorette...I almost wrote Socrates by mistake...then I thought you may have come up with a new word for a woman that liked soccer? But I guess it's voet ball or foot ball over there...what am I talking about? lol
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what does that mean to you...artsy...?
I thought it meant ya know...artsy fartsy...pregnant with Vango and so so good at poetic sex....like you...but...lol...I looked it up...and it said it meant a ah lack of any real understanding...just a faked interest. I mean if she were the artsy were now talking about...I'd be screaming yahtzee...right...? I'm mean if she understood how could she possibly resist...right...? Linda...? -smile-...love-
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Correct.
I guess I was using it to describe Johnny D...doing his sign language and trying to look so cool. >to me he looked gay...but that's not politically correct...so I used artsy-fartsy as an after thought...in this way > I guess?
"A frivolous or dismissive description of someone or something that is artistic or pretentiously artistic"...
You mean Yahtzee like the board game?
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So, I stole your "artsy" and added a
Fartsy!
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yes of course I mean the board game...is there someone named Yahtzee...? ah haha...Linda spelling is a pursuit I never discovered...however theres way more to me...-headwag-...-smile- ....did you just say Johnny Depp looks gay.....o my God....yea this just keeps getting better and better. Happy Valentines Day Dear...lol
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You pulled it out of me!
I simply wrote...'artsy fart-see?"
lol
I know, I have no respect...Happy V.D. day too! lol
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-headshake- incorrigible.........lol
Comment from Lovinia
Hi dearest Michael
Lovely to see a post from you of this quality. Beautiful yet so poignant. I almost feel your words may be for Maureen, in absentia. I may be wrong of course. Excellent enjambment, Greek mythology contrasted and merged with a post modern, "muse of Soccerette". A greek tragedy masked with humour.
I'm not sure whether you intended lower-case for 'Pegasus and Sunday". Your rhyme works perfectly and conveys the deep tone of unhappiness, while tending to be as "Happy as I can be". The repeat phrase to begin and end brings full circle to your poem. Your use of in-line rhyme works its magic, creating a sensual and deliberate cadence.
A couple of nits: -
" ... heart desire quilled sensuals ocean depths ..." I think you meant to put 'sensual' singular, delete the 's'. Just a suggestion, if you put 'deep' instead of 'depth' - you continue your near mono-rhyme.
"... perfected the the psalms of David..." - you have doubled up on 'the'.
"but nobody told him she couldn't read" -- Brilliance! Bravo!
I've enjoyed this so much, found it so beautiful I can't even consider taking off a star for the nits. A superb poem dear sweet Michael. I love it. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Hi dearest Michael
Lovely to see a post from you of this quality. Beautiful yet so poignant. I almost feel your words may be for Maureen, in absentia. I may be wrong of course. Excellent enjambment, Greek mythology contrasted and merged with a post modern, "muse of Soccerette". A greek tragedy masked with humour.
I'm not sure whether you intended lower-case for 'Pegasus and Sunday". Your rhyme works perfectly and conveys the deep tone of unhappiness, while tending to be as "Happy as I can be". The repeat phrase to begin and end brings full circle to your poem. Your use of in-line rhyme works its magic, creating a sensual and deliberate cadence.
A couple of nits: -
" ... heart desire quilled sensuals ocean depths ..." I think you meant to put 'sensual' singular, delete the 's'. Just a suggestion, if you put 'deep' instead of 'depth' - you continue your near mono-rhyme.
"... perfected the the psalms of David..." - you have doubled up on 'the'.
"but nobody told him she couldn't read" -- Brilliance! Bravo!
I've enjoyed this so much, found it so beautiful I can't even consider taking off a star for the nits. A superb poem dear sweet Michael. I love it. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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huh...? Noooo....-headshake- no......no I would write a happy ending if it were for Mo. ...-smile-
Hi lovi...-smile-...thank you....I changed it now.....I cant sleep anymore and V-day and all....-shouldershrug-...I was going to write something very pretty...and typed in "valentines day song"....ah I found Johnny and changed my tune...he looked about as happy as I was trying not to be.....he won. Really....I wrote two really great ones couple days ago....I was trying to be funny...it always works better when I dont...-handtwirl-...try...-smile- ...ah ahaha...ah hpw are you...? How is she...?
Ah Lovi...just been in "thing" i guess....I dont know.... mid life crisis or something...I just feel different. Anyway....I hope you feel better...-handtwirl- ya know then me....-smile- well I changed it....do you still think its beautiful...? love you Michael