Comment from fimarie78

Excellent

You tell us a lovely story in this poem. I loved your innovative characters. Major Leduc and Mr G Goose. This would make a fantastic picture book or children's tv series.
best wishes
Fiona

 Comment Written 18-May-2016

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reply by the author on 18-May-2016

Thank you so much for your very encouraging review and rating. It is very much appreciated : )

Comment from Word Junkie

Exceptional

Hi Kazz,

I'm still laughing. This is hysterically funny! I just know your kids loved it.

I'm sure you'll feel better," he said with a laugh,
"If you made your way home and climbed into a bath."

One suggestion here. you'll/make/climb -or- you'd/made

tumbledown, one word

This is so charming. It's just a delight to read.

Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest!
Lana

 Comment Written 18-May-2016

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reply by the author on 18-May-2016

Thank you so very much for the wonderful review and stars. It is very much appreciated and I will look at your suggestions : )

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

I'm not too much for long poems about animals acting as people, or cartoons, though did enjoy Popeye, even though Brutus acted like an animal when he got mad... a long time ago when I was a kid, and for some reason, never liked Bugs Bunny, or Daffy Duck so sarcastic they seemed... though I'm sure your kids enjoy every word, about this gentle duck, and Bunny, and about their adventures, being if mum is reading it do them, makes it even better, if they can sit that long depending on their ages, and saves money too, for buying them books to read to them, if you like doing this a lot.

Your story is very well written with rhyme, and excellent for children to also learn to read for themselves, because the rhyme makes it a fun read.

Best Wishes for your entry...Caressa_08

 Comment Written 18-May-2016

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reply by the author on 18-May-2016

Thank you for reading and for your excellent rating, especially as you are not partial to cartoon characters or lengthy poems. I really appreciate that you took the time to do so : )

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Kazzawin, what a delightful poem for children. I enjoyed
reading it, too. It had such a nice rhythm to it and great
rhyming. I'm glad Major LeDuc made it back home.

 Comment Written 17-May-2016

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reply by the author on 18-May-2016

Thank you so much for your encouraging review and rating. It is much appreciated : )

Comment from Toneyear

Excellent

How to describe the enjoyment I had reading this poem. I can't tell you anything other then it was so fun. I wish I could write like that. I so much loved it. Thank you for sharing, Tina

 Comment Written 17-May-2016

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reply by the author on 17-May-2016

Thank you so much for your lovely, encouraging words and the stars. They are truly appreciated: )

Comment from Douglas Paul

Exceptional

This is just fantastic. What a great adventure you told. Very creative and clever. The rhyme and meter are superb making this read very smoothly. This is one of the best children's poems I have ever read here on the site

 Comment Written 17-May-2016

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reply by the author on 17-May-2016

Oh wow!
Thank you so much for such an encouraging review. I am overwhelmed by your words and six stars too! They are really appreciated : )

reply by Douglas Paul on 17-May-2016

that was really good - you deserved the stars

Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

Rhyming children stories are a BIG hit with my little granddaughters. I will save this one for their next sleepover and I will read it to them. I can hear their giggles already! Very cute story.

 Comment Written 17-May-2016

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reply by the author on 17-May-2016

Thank you so very much. Not only for the stars and kind words but for the even bigger reward of having it heard by very important people : )

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Kazzawin,

Wow, you are so talented to be able to carry that meter and
unforced rhymes throughout this long piece is impressive.
You also have quite the imagination and it was a pleasure to
read it with your fine wit and nice imagery along with a good
teaching lesson in the end.

I gave this contest a try and ended up with 8 lines...(not yet
posted;) lol Yours looks like a winner to me.

Linda

 Comment Written 17-May-2016

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reply by the author on 17-May-2016

Thank you for such an awesome review.
Apparently this is a very hard contest to win, especially with a long kids poem!
The trouble is I quite enjoy letting go sometimes and writing fun stuff.
So I thought it worth a try : )

Thank you for the stars . . . I really do appreciate it : )

reply by AnnaLinda on 17-May-2016

I'm pretty sure that would be difficult to beat. I'm kind of embarrassed to send mine out...;) It seemed like you enjoyed writing it and I bet your kids loved it too.

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

This is kind of a knight in shining armor story with the duck as the hero who takes a journey and finds characters along his way who need rescuing. The duck is a loveable character whose story is told very well in rhyming quatrains that act somewhat like chapters in a book. I'm sure children will be delighted with the characters and comforted by the safe family ending.

 Comment Written 15-May-2016

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reply by the author on 15-May-2016

Thank you so much. I had so much fun writing it : )

Comment from create4christ

Exceptional

It takes a lot for me to give six stars, but I really like this. I too, write picture books for my children and now grandchildren. I also review children's and young adult books, AND was an elementary school teacher. I love when books capture a child, and I truly believe that this one will. I can almost see the pictures for this book. Major Leduc is a lovable character that likes to help. I like that too. Thank you so much for sharing!! Keep it up!!

Well done. I would definitely recommend this as a great picture book!

 Comment Written 15-May-2016

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reply by the author on 15-May-2016

Wow!
I feel really honoured and overwhelmed by your kind review.
Thank you so much : )

reply by create4christ on 15-May-2016

You are so welcome!