The Winter Fishing Fleet
Another Heroic Sonnet59 total reviews
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
Executed perfectly and sets its own pace which the ear and the body must follow in order to not go overboard themselves. Hard, hard life here--nothing safe about it, but as you so aptly put it, there are those at home who need to eat. This is a true love poem in its work clothes! Thanks for posting.
GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
Executed perfectly and sets its own pace which the ear and the body must follow in order to not go overboard themselves. Hard, hard life here--nothing safe about it, but as you so aptly put it, there are those at home who need to eat. This is a true love poem in its work clothes! Thanks for posting.
GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from dragonpoet
This gives a strong image of the setting by the sea. You include all kinds of beings.
I like learning about new names of watercraft. This tells us how dangerous fishing can be. But you are right, we all have to eat.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
This gives a strong image of the setting by the sea. You include all kinds of beings.
I like learning about new names of watercraft. This tells us how dangerous fishing can be. But you are right, we all have to eat.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Dragonpoet. Always good to hear from you! I appreciate the congratulations. Tony
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Any time, Tony. Have a nice weekend.
Joan
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Tony,
I can't believe I missed this wonderful poem when you posted it, and am so very pleased for you that it is in this month's POM contest.
Your sonnet flows like the soft breezes at the shore. Perfect iambics and superb enjambment carry the day. It was so smooth I almost didn't notice line 6's slight metrical dip or are you eliding estuaries into something like estu'ries? Even if there is the pyrrhic in the 3rd foot, I love the art of the line filled with such wonderful visuals.
One of the very daunting things about the heroic sonnet is that it has 9 rhymes in it. And your end rhymes are solid, interesting and in perfect pattern.
A superb poem, Tony. Well done!
Ray
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
Good Morning, Tony,
I can't believe I missed this wonderful poem when you posted it, and am so very pleased for you that it is in this month's POM contest.
Your sonnet flows like the soft breezes at the shore. Perfect iambics and superb enjambment carry the day. It was so smooth I almost didn't notice line 6's slight metrical dip or are you eliding estuaries into something like estu'ries? Even if there is the pyrrhic in the 3rd foot, I love the art of the line filled with such wonderful visuals.
One of the very daunting things about the heroic sonnet is that it has 9 rhymes in it. And your end rhymes are solid, interesting and in perfect pattern.
A superb poem, Tony. Well done!
Ray
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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I'm woefully late in responding to this very kind review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Ray, but thank you for it and for the six stars.
I've been fully engaged in being a father and a grandfather for the last two or three weeks, my daughter having unexpectedly returned home from NY because of the death of her best friend here in tragic circumstances.
Comment from jlsavell
tfawcus, this is truly deserving of a six. I loved the words. Its rhythm superb. A sonnet is daunting to me, so I appreciate anyone who can master this form. Best wishes with the pom. Jimi
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
tfawcus, this is truly deserving of a six. I loved the words. Its rhythm superb. A sonnet is daunting to me, so I appreciate anyone who can master this form. Best wishes with the pom. Jimi
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Thanks, Jimi. As always, I appreciate your review. Your words are so encouraging and supportive. Best wishes, Tony
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you are welcome..
Comment from Joy Graham
It's so nice to see traditional form poetry among the POM nominations :) You have a lovely paintint to accompany your heroic sonnet. Another one would imply you write them often. How wonderful to be nominated for a poem you have a natural ability for :)
I can picture the fisherman and the water activity going on in this lovely scene you have word-painted. Excellent iambic pentameter, Good and solid rhymes, nice turn, and nice closing couplet. I thank you for the glossary of terms in your author notes to help out readers like me that need a little help with some of the terminology. I lived on both coasts of Canada yet never learned much about the fishing life. My only claim to fame is that I love to eat lobster lol!
Best wishes to you in this contest. Your poem is well-deserving to be in this group. I'm sure you'll be in the top group.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
It's so nice to see traditional form poetry among the POM nominations :) You have a lovely paintint to accompany your heroic sonnet. Another one would imply you write them often. How wonderful to be nominated for a poem you have a natural ability for :)
I can picture the fisherman and the water activity going on in this lovely scene you have word-painted. Excellent iambic pentameter, Good and solid rhymes, nice turn, and nice closing couplet. I thank you for the glossary of terms in your author notes to help out readers like me that need a little help with some of the terminology. I lived on both coasts of Canada yet never learned much about the fishing life. My only claim to fame is that I love to eat lobster lol!
Best wishes to you in this contest. Your poem is well-deserving to be in this group. I'm sure you'll be in the top group.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Thanks, Joy. It is an honour to be short-listed for this. My knowledge of fishing is largely from the internet. Indeed, I've always regarded a fishing rod as having a worm at both ends. However, i share your liking for lobster!
Comment from RGstar
And how rich this is with the most exquisite language for the theme.
So nice of the tongue, Tony. You certainly are a wordsmith in all proportion.
A lovely write. So good to come back to some good poetry...I was getting a bit worried.
Good luck. Fully deserves its place.
RG
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
And how rich this is with the most exquisite language for the theme.
So nice of the tongue, Tony. You certainly are a wordsmith in all proportion.
A lovely write. So good to come back to some good poetry...I was getting a bit worried.
Good luck. Fully deserves its place.
RG
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your very kind review and six stars, RG. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from humpwhistle
Tony, a fitting sonnet on a (recently) neglected topic.
In truth, I am in admiration of the vocabulary,
and the appropriate vernacular.
the men (and boys) who crewed these fleets
are hard to define. Some adventurers. Many desperate.
Others, dragooned.
You are a poet.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
Tony, a fitting sonnet on a (recently) neglected topic.
In truth, I am in admiration of the vocabulary,
and the appropriate vernacular.
the men (and boys) who crewed these fleets
are hard to define. Some adventurers. Many desperate.
Others, dragooned.
You are a poet.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your very kind review and six stars, Lee. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from BeasPeas
Tony, you have outdone your usual excellence with this wonderful poem. I think of all of them I've read, this is my favorite. You jump right into it with the first eight lines that are so descriptive. Every word counts toward your tale. The remainder of the lines follow as good as the first eight, but switch to the fleet and fishermen themselves. Last couplet reveals the reality of it all. Marilyn
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
Tony, you have outdone your usual excellence with this wonderful poem. I think of all of them I've read, this is my favorite. You jump right into it with the first eight lines that are so descriptive. Every word counts toward your tale. The remainder of the lines follow as good as the first eight, but switch to the fleet and fishermen themselves. Last couplet reveals the reality of it all. Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Marilyn. I'm delighted that you enjoyed it so much and thank you, too, for the six stars!
Comment from Wabigoon
Tony--
Love the lingo in this, all the "local color," fauna, birds, etc.,
slop-wallow, stuff like that. And true enough of course about the storms and the waves. Strangely, despite being a powerful swimmer, I have a fear of big waves which makes owning an island in a big lake a bit difficult at times. I think the sonnet form's almost invisible in this one. I like that. Looks like The Fleet's preformed well for you.
Congrats
Jeff
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
Tony--
Love the lingo in this, all the "local color," fauna, birds, etc.,
slop-wallow, stuff like that. And true enough of course about the storms and the waves. Strangely, despite being a powerful swimmer, I have a fear of big waves which makes owning an island in a big lake a bit difficult at times. I think the sonnet form's almost invisible in this one. I like that. Looks like The Fleet's preformed well for you.
Congrats
Jeff
Comment Written 02-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review and six stars, Jeff, also your comments about the use of language in this.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Exemplary poem! It must be read aloud to get the feel of the fleet in the sea, and I should say, it is a mouthful! Every word, carefully chosen, and descriptive beyond compare. I love the rhyme scheme, with the inner rhymes as well. I want to bookcase this piece to show to my friend who spent many years on different ships. He will be thrilled at your 16th-century sonnet of The Winter Fishing fleet. Thank you for sharing a world I know nothing about. You put me right in there with the fishermen. Your ending lines say it all. The bravest do what they do so that those at home can eat. You are very talented and experienced as well.
Peace, Jesse
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
Exemplary poem! It must be read aloud to get the feel of the fleet in the sea, and I should say, it is a mouthful! Every word, carefully chosen, and descriptive beyond compare. I love the rhyme scheme, with the inner rhymes as well. I want to bookcase this piece to show to my friend who spent many years on different ships. He will be thrilled at your 16th-century sonnet of The Winter Fishing fleet. Thank you for sharing a world I know nothing about. You put me right in there with the fishermen. Your ending lines say it all. The bravest do what they do so that those at home can eat. You are very talented and experienced as well.
Peace, Jesse
Comment Written 02-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review and six stars, Jesse, also your comments about the use of language in this. I hope your friend enjoys it too.
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You are sincerely welcome, and my friend enjoyed it too!
Jesse