Mister, O Mister
Some times you just have to reach out and touch somebody27 total reviews
Comment from joannakruk
An exploration of the mindset of someone who questions her personal strength, so much so that she cannot seem to find comfort in her own company. Unfortunately, this is a reflection of the mindset of many woman. A lack of confidence leads to a search for comfort in a man, the initiation of the domestic violence cycle. A very well flowing piece.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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An exploration of the mindset of someone who questions her personal strength, so much so that she cannot seem to find comfort in her own company. Unfortunately, this is a reflection of the mindset of many woman. A lack of confidence leads to a search for comfort in a man, the initiation of the domestic violence cycle. A very well flowing piece.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Comment from Kelly2
Brett,
I really like your poem...a salve for loss and pain. One path I have never chosen, but effective for a short period of time most likely.
My favorite stanza is:
"Mister, O Mister, tell me more about your gentle hand
and where it's said love is hard to understand
Listen to the music play soft and sweet
And for a dance you can sweep me off my feet"
Your chosen artwork is wonderful. I just realized these are song lyrics...I would love to hear the song. It also explains the repetition of lines, although this is common is some types of poetry.
Why do you only have two complimentary reviews for each person? I've never seen that before. I really don't understand the theory behind this. I have my own reasons for fanning people and they are people who can handle and appreciate constructive criticism and those who read my writing and give the same back.
I guess I should say thank you for allowing me to read your poem/song lyrics. I should consider my #1 as an honor.
Kelly
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Brett,
I really like your poem...a salve for loss and pain. One path I have never chosen, but effective for a short period of time most likely.
My favorite stanza is:
"Mister, O Mister, tell me more about your gentle hand
and where it's said love is hard to understand
Listen to the music play soft and sweet
And for a dance you can sweep me off my feet"
Your chosen artwork is wonderful. I just realized these are song lyrics...I would love to hear the song. It also explains the repetition of lines, although this is common is some types of poetry.
Why do you only have two complimentary reviews for each person? I've never seen that before. I really don't understand the theory behind this. I have my own reasons for fanning people and they are people who can handle and appreciate constructive criticism and those who read my writing and give the same back.
I guess I should say thank you for allowing me to read your poem/song lyrics. I should consider my #1 as an honor.
Kelly
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from sanejane
These lines are excellent:
Let me feel your warm touch all over me
And these broken chains of love will set me free
Great lyrics with a country and western feel. "Broken chains of love" is a catchy phrase worthy of repetition.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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These lines are excellent:
Let me feel your warm touch all over me
And these broken chains of love will set me free
Great lyrics with a country and western feel. "Broken chains of love" is a catchy phrase worthy of repetition.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
She's quite a temptress. It looks like someone's headed for trouble. Nice lyrics for a song - thanks for sharing these fine lines. Cheers and the best to you my friend.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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She's quite a temptress. It looks like someone's headed for trouble. Nice lyrics for a song - thanks for sharing these fine lines. Cheers and the best to you my friend.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem is a brazen quest for prompt replacement of a lover lost by a promiscuous woman.
A vacuum is created by the absence of her lover and she wants it filled up by a total stranger who appears hesitant to afford her the request.
The work earns its texture through the use of metaphor, onomatopoeia and alliteration. Excellent work! Bravo !
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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The objective correlative of the poem is a brazen quest for prompt replacement of a lover lost by a promiscuous woman.
A vacuum is created by the absence of her lover and she wants it filled up by a total stranger who appears hesitant to afford her the request.
The work earns its texture through the use of metaphor, onomatopoeia and alliteration. Excellent work! Bravo !
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from rjuselius
this is a passionate piece of poetry and i think it it really does need a warning for sexual language. but otherwise it is rather steamy and vividly thought of.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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this is a passionate piece of poetry and i think it it really does need a warning for sexual language. but otherwise it is rather steamy and vividly thought of.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hello Brett,
These are excellent song lyrics! I can easily envision them being sung by a female country singer.. I love the title "Mister, O Mister" and the repetition of that throughout your lyrics.
Being betrayed by the one she loves is certainly enough to make her want to get out there and get some lovin' ... something that many people can relate to.
I also love the repetition at the end of three of the stanzas with "and these broken chains of love will set me free".
Maybe send these lyrics in to Paramount Song in Nashville?
Well done!
Connie
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Hello Brett,
These are excellent song lyrics! I can easily envision them being sung by a female country singer.. I love the title "Mister, O Mister" and the repetition of that throughout your lyrics.
Being betrayed by the one she loves is certainly enough to make her want to get out there and get some lovin' ... something that many people can relate to.
I also love the repetition at the end of three of the stanzas with "and these broken chains of love will set me free".
Maybe send these lyrics in to Paramount Song in Nashville?
Well done!
Connie
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from foxangie123
We need to get this on the radio right now. You are so talented and amazing. Send it to Paramount Song and see if they pick it up. They are in Nashville and looking now. You Rock?
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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We need to get this on the radio right now. You are so talented and amazing. Send it to Paramount Song and see if they pick it up. They are in Nashville and looking now. You Rock?
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks.
Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Comment from Ricky1024
I love writing songs also Brett.
My style is a little different.
Though...
The Review...
"Adjective as well ad Objective Vontent was wonderfull.
Theme as well as Imagery...
Worked and presented a smooth approach.
On a scale of one to one hundred based on lost love...
100.
Ricky by the Bay.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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I love writing songs also Brett.
My style is a little different.
Though...
The Review...
"Adjective as well ad Objective Vontent was wonderfull.
Theme as well as Imagery...
Worked and presented a smooth approach.
On a scale of one to one hundred based on lost love...
100.
Ricky by the Bay.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Irish Rain
Yes, I can see this as a country music song. The title is absolutely wonderful, and I love how you used, 'when the cats away'...great song!!! Blessings....
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Yes, I can see this as a country music song. The title is absolutely wonderful, and I love how you used, 'when the cats away'...great song!!! Blessings....
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.