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23 total reviews
Comment from Richard J
Mesmerizing and electrifying verse-age, Dear Susan!
You've truly been gifted a treasure trove of thoughts, feelings, creativeness, and imagination few others (if any) possess in such a way that fills the mind, heart, and spirit with wonderment, desire, and all the wishes and fantasies romance and sensuality can bring to a reader's wonderment and warmest, most roused satisfaction.
In sheer, magical metaphor, your tale of two lovers is rendered in such a way there is no doubt, whatsoever, they've found and embraced one another, and are swimming and dancing, sailing and floating in and upon their own blissful ocean of dreams.
No one's pen I know writes of love, romance, and sweet sensuality more purely, openly, alluring, or fascinating in poetic voice, flow, meter, and rhyme, than does Yours.
A hug of sincere warmth and gratitude to you, Dear Lady-Poet, for enthralling us once again with your amazingly beautiful heart and soul ... you are truly a star ð??? ~ Richard
Psst! Wee suggestions: You might consider (for flow) editing "wind's urging implores" and "becomes sheer sensual delight". ; )
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Mesmerizing and electrifying verse-age, Dear Susan!
You've truly been gifted a treasure trove of thoughts, feelings, creativeness, and imagination few others (if any) possess in such a way that fills the mind, heart, and spirit with wonderment, desire, and all the wishes and fantasies romance and sensuality can bring to a reader's wonderment and warmest, most roused satisfaction.
In sheer, magical metaphor, your tale of two lovers is rendered in such a way there is no doubt, whatsoever, they've found and embraced one another, and are swimming and dancing, sailing and floating in and upon their own blissful ocean of dreams.
No one's pen I know writes of love, romance, and sweet sensuality more purely, openly, alluring, or fascinating in poetic voice, flow, meter, and rhyme, than does Yours.
A hug of sincere warmth and gratitude to you, Dear Lady-Poet, for enthralling us once again with your amazingly beautiful heart and soul ... you are truly a star ð??? ~ Richard
Psst! Wee suggestions: You might consider (for flow) editing "wind's urging implores" and "becomes sheer sensual delight". ; )
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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My goodness!!! I don't even know how to reply to such a outstanding review!!! Thank you Richard! :-)
Comment from Zue65
You have created a passionate poem in exquisite lines and with interesting play of colorful words. I enjoyed reading your work. An excellent write.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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You have created a passionate poem in exquisite lines and with interesting play of colorful words. I enjoyed reading your work. An excellent write.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for such a sweet review!! I really do appreciate it!
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a good picture to make it complete. Good rhyming, and word flow as you relate love in life to a ride on a big ship. Good job of telling about this love story in a little different way than usual.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Good poem with a good picture to make it complete. Good rhyming, and word flow as you relate love in life to a ride on a big ship. Good job of telling about this love story in a little different way than usual.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Aw thank you so very much! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review! :-))
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Susan, I wish that I could give you 10+. This is so outstanding as you are getting better with each poem you compose. In my profound estimation, I realize you have less then a year of writing experience, so I am going to run you as a wordsmith. You qualify because of your use of words that many people on this site stumble with. The way you move words around is flawless. I joined FS in '08 and was dubbed a wordsmith in 2009. I could do exactly what you do. Be proud of who you are and what you are becoming. I'm very proud of you, Susan, truly proud!!
Now, for these six stars that your poem certainly deserves. From start to finish you provide a poem which gives us so much imagery on the journey you and lover are taking. On a ship across the sea. Listen Susan, I could go on and on, but seriously you have done a tremendous job with this. It is so exceptional.
Take care my friend,,,,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Susan, I wish that I could give you 10+. This is so outstanding as you are getting better with each poem you compose. In my profound estimation, I realize you have less then a year of writing experience, so I am going to run you as a wordsmith. You qualify because of your use of words that many people on this site stumble with. The way you move words around is flawless. I joined FS in '08 and was dubbed a wordsmith in 2009. I could do exactly what you do. Be proud of who you are and what you are becoming. I'm very proud of you, Susan, truly proud!!
Now, for these six stars that your poem certainly deserves. From start to finish you provide a poem which gives us so much imagery on the journey you and lover are taking. On a ship across the sea. Listen Susan, I could go on and on, but seriously you have done a tremendous job with this. It is so exceptional.
Take care my friend,,,,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Jim, i don't know what to say. thank you
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Lovely artwork.
-Very nice romance poem, Susan.
-You really know the imagery to use
to get across the emotion:
*"We waltz upon waves
where no one else braves"
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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-Lovely artwork.
-Very nice romance poem, Susan.
-You really know the imagery to use
to get across the emotion:
*"We waltz upon waves
where no one else braves"
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Awe thank you so very much for reading and for the review!! I do appreciate it! :-)
Comment from hifein
beautiful photo enhances your lovely poem. i'm not familiar with the rhyming scheme and it it difficult to sustain for me while reading the poem -- but this doesn't take away from your lovely sentiment and the poetic imagery.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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beautiful photo enhances your lovely poem. i'm not familiar with the rhyming scheme and it it difficult to sustain for me while reading the poem -- but this doesn't take away from your lovely sentiment and the poetic imagery.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Well thank you!!...the form is 558558 with a aabccb etc pattern..I'm glad you enjoyed it! :-)
Comment from mvbrooks
I especially liked these first lines:
We waltz upon waves
where no one else braves,
silver moon-drops ease dueling fears.
because they seemed to give the poem a swaying sense of a dance.
The reader comes away with a sense of a journey and a sense of calm, peacefulness as the poem and the dance end.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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I especially liked these first lines:
We waltz upon waves
where no one else braves,
silver moon-drops ease dueling fears.
because they seemed to give the poem a swaying sense of a dance.
The reader comes away with a sense of a journey and a sense of calm, peacefulness as the poem and the dance end.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Thank you so very much!!!! I'm happy you enjoyed this poem of mine!!! hugs
Comment from RGstar
Wanted to come and support, you and this. Lovely merging of fine adjectives and nouns finding a way through for probing verbs.
A lovely manage et trios of the forms.
Such imagery, and calm.
A lovely write...a pleasure to read.
Lost rhythm in a couple of places but not even worth mentioning.
Beautiful.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Wanted to come and support, you and this. Lovely merging of fine adjectives and nouns finding a way through for probing verbs.
A lovely manage et trios of the forms.
Such imagery, and calm.
A lovely write...a pleasure to read.
Lost rhythm in a couple of places but not even worth mentioning.
Beautiful.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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You so sweet!! thank you for checking this poem out! Glad you enjoyed it! Hugs!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem on this ocean of life where two people meet and become one in love. Making ptecioud memories each day of the year.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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A very well-written love poem on this ocean of life where two people meet and become one in love. Making ptecioud memories each day of the year.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Sandra!!! Thank you very much!!! hugs dear
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Just like the painting, a serene calming write with the essence of sensual desires and togetherness, a very enjoyable read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Just like the painting, a serene calming write with the essence of sensual desires and togetherness, a very enjoyable read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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AWE Thank you so very much!!! i do appreciate you taking the time to read and review!! hugs