Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Now see, you are inviting me on a trip that I don't think I really want to go on. My reality as well as my fantasy is already skewed to such a point that I could easily get lost and never find my way back again. If it is all the same to you, I think that I had better stay grounded, holding on the this reality as tightly as I can lest my control slip and I fall into the abyss.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017

Thank you, nomi, for checking this out. Bill

Comment from Stacia Ann

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this, Bill!
I like the short form poems on small topics--even more when the "small" topic is actually huge.
This place in another dimension, or consciousness, and the metaphor of the zipper is very interesting. Also frightening--that one can just slip into another space, as easily as opening a zipper, and perhaps never emerge again.
My only question is the use of a capital "Z" in the fourth line--deliberate? I wonder if it might work better with the metaphor if it were simply lower case? It distracts me, but that may well be the point.
Overall, very strong.
Thanks for sharing.
Stacia

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017

Thank you, Stacia Ann, for giving this a look. You'll notice in the photo that the picture is of a Ferris wheel that has been shutter exposed. It looks like the wheels name is the Zipper.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

I'm not sure how to ranka the pranka
But I thanka you much for the fun post
The faster I go, the behinder I get
I think Lewis Carroll said that
Take a ride on the Zipper
Bill Schott said that
This seems like a whole lotta poetry fun
Well done

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017

Thank you, Robert, for the creative review of this pranka. I am not a quick poet nor a slow one. Most say I'm half-fast.