Once upon the heart..
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11 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Hello Susan,
Congrats on your Seal!! That is a feat most desired by almost everyone here. Glad I read a bit closer because I thought they just choose us. :P
Nome
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Hello Susan,
Congrats on your Seal!! That is a feat most desired by almost everyone here. Glad I read a bit closer because I thought they just choose us. :P
Nome
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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I'm still in shock!! But, THANK YOU!!! :-)))))))))))))))))))))))))
Comment from MissMerri
So romantic, so loving and so beautifully expressed... this is a true love poem in every sense of the word. I enjoyed its warmth and tenderness, its softness and the musical flow of the words. So sweet! Good luck in this contest. Got my vote. ;p
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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So romantic, so loving and so beautifully expressed... this is a true love poem in every sense of the word. I enjoyed its warmth and tenderness, its softness and the musical flow of the words. So sweet! Good luck in this contest. Got my vote. ;p
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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oh you are so sweet! Thank you for reading and for the wonderful review! I'm smiling! :-)))
Comment from moongirlwriter
Beautifully written but I'm not so sure that I agree. Can we ever belong to someone or they belong to us? Nonetheless, the emotions are there, the passion is present and the thought is beautifully expressed. . . reality? That's another poem. :)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Beautifully written but I'm not so sure that I agree. Can we ever belong to someone or they belong to us? Nonetheless, the emotions are there, the passion is present and the thought is beautifully expressed. . . reality? That's another poem. :)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Dreamers, dream. Lovers, love. Poets write what is felt. Can soulmates belong to one another? of course..as both are held in each others hearts. :-)..thanks for reading and for the review. I do appreciate it!
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I like your response. :)
Comment from pipersfancy
A classically-inspired love poem! The lines are flawless and lyrical, painting vivid images of what we all wish love could feel like... when two hearts truly beat as one.
Best of luck in the contest,
pf
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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A classically-inspired love poem! The lines are flawless and lyrical, painting vivid images of what we all wish love could feel like... when two hearts truly beat as one.
Best of luck in the contest,
pf
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Aw Thank you for such a sweet review! I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review! :-)
Comment from WalkerMan
Whichever form of poetry you choose, whatever you write about love always seems to turn out well. This sweetly dreamy poem reads so smoothly that the form does not even matter. In many of the newer forms, the form intrudes too much on the thought or emotion the writer is trying to convey. That is especially true of the forms requiring frequent repetition of lines. On the other hand, free verse often feels like prose just broken into phrases stacked vertically. Your poem here just flows, even has some well-placed (but unforced) rhyme, and never disturbs the loving daydream mood you create for the reader. Of course, any sensible man who knows he is the inspiration for such delightful thoughts must reciprocate.... Superb, and aptly illustrated -- I like the poem-winged butterflies.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Whichever form of poetry you choose, whatever you write about love always seems to turn out well. This sweetly dreamy poem reads so smoothly that the form does not even matter. In many of the newer forms, the form intrudes too much on the thought or emotion the writer is trying to convey. That is especially true of the forms requiring frequent repetition of lines. On the other hand, free verse often feels like prose just broken into phrases stacked vertically. Your poem here just flows, even has some well-placed (but unforced) rhyme, and never disturbs the loving daydream mood you create for the reader. Of course, any sensible man who knows he is the inspiration for such delightful thoughts must reciprocate.... Superb, and aptly illustrated -- I like the poem-winged butterflies.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Aw Mike, thank you so much. Your reviews are always so sweet and very much appreciated.
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You are most welcome, Susan. You earn it by writing such delightful poems. -- Mike
Comment from robyn corum
Susan,
There's no doubt in my mind that this is based in fact and not just fancy fiction. *smile* The feelings are too intense and from the heart - or so it sure seems! A lovely write!
Some notes:
1.) I (lie) upon a billowed bed,
2.) favorite lines:
Oh,
in this moment,
rises such beauty,
when you float across
my mind;
sweet whispers
of a sigh,
knowing ...
You are mine!
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Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Susan,
There's no doubt in my mind that this is based in fact and not just fancy fiction. *smile* The feelings are too intense and from the heart - or so it sure seems! A lovely write!
Some notes:
1.) I (lie) upon a billowed bed,
2.) favorite lines:
Oh,
in this moment,
rises such beauty,
when you float across
my mind;
sweet whispers
of a sigh,
knowing ...
You are mine!
***
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Good eye! Made the correction..Thanks for the great review, I do appreciate it!
Comment from DR DIP
wow! now THAT'S how you write a love poem. I so love the way you write Susan you are still one of my favourite poets on Fanstory your lines and verses are exquisite.
Thank you for sharing with me for i know its written just for me lol
keep well my sweet
xdip
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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wow! now THAT'S how you write a love poem. I so love the way you write Susan you are still one of my favourite poets on Fanstory your lines and verses are exquisite.
Thank you for sharing with me for i know its written just for me lol
keep well my sweet
xdip
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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So hun, does this mean you like my first attempted little Free Verse? :-p You make me smile.Hope all is well with you and the family. You should get to the beach and throw a rock in the water for me. Thanks for the lovely and heartfelt comments. :-)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice poem you have penned for the Poets Choice II - No disqualifications contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This is a very nice poem you have penned for the Poets Choice II - No disqualifications contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Hi Teri, thanks for reading and for the review! I do appreciate it! :-)
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I am so hooked on your writing and the love descriptions you use to make us feel so good. Excellently done for the contest and I feel the passion in your words making this a strong entry
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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I am so hooked on your writing and the love descriptions you use to make us feel so good. Excellently done for the contest and I feel the passion in your words making this a strong entry
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This review just makes me smile!!! Thank you for such kind words!! hugs
Comment from Poetic Friend
This poem is beautiful in sentiment and form. The love/romance oozes from your smooth flowing stanzas.
Also, the poem has a sense of solace, for some reason.
I love everything about this poem -- the form, the thoughts, the romance, the ending.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem is beautiful in sentiment and form. The love/romance oozes from your smooth flowing stanzas.
Also, the poem has a sense of solace, for some reason.
I love everything about this poem -- the form, the thoughts, the romance, the ending.
Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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i love this sweet review!! thank you for taking the time to read! Glad you enjoyed this:-)