Perennials of War
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Barb
= I love how Emily tried to weasel the red nail polish. But, I don't even see that happening.
= Fun, lighthearted chapter, and with a good end hook. Nice job.
Cheers, J
Have a great day/evening.
(*<*) A Smile Is Just A Frown Turned Upside-down. (*<*)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Hi, Barb
= I love how Emily tried to weasel the red nail polish. But, I don't even see that happening.
= Fun, lighthearted chapter, and with a good end hook. Nice job.
Cheers, J
Have a great day/evening.
(*<*) A Smile Is Just A Frown Turned Upside-down. (*<*)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Sorry it's taken me so long to answer.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Babara, another fine piece is added to the book. I really do like to follow this. I wonder what will happen next. Emily is a wonderful child. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Hi Babara, another fine piece is added to the book. I really do like to follow this. I wonder what will happen next. Emily is a wonderful child. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Most enjoyable read, Barbara - don't you just love little Emily -
A couple of minor things:
"she has an appropriate nail color for a five year old." Jane smiled." - five-year-old
"Drew, I received a voice mail from a Maxwell Gaines." Voice-mail
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Most enjoyable read, Barbara - don't you just love little Emily -
A couple of minor things:
"she has an appropriate nail color for a five year old." Jane smiled." - five-year-old
"Drew, I received a voice mail from a Maxwell Gaines." Voice-mail
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the catches. I'll make the corrections.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Barbara.
"Daddy, I'm not a pumpkin, I'm a little girl." She giggled." (Kids are so funny.)
"she has an appropriate nail color for a five(-)year(-)old." Jane smiled."
"Drew, I received a voice mail(voicemail) from a Maxwell Gaines."
Darn it! Who is it from? Kuznetsov perhaps? Fancy leaving an old bloke like me in suspense like that... meany lol.
Another great chapter and it is moving along at a steady pace.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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G'day Barbara.
"Daddy, I'm not a pumpkin, I'm a little girl." She giggled." (Kids are so funny.)
"she has an appropriate nail color for a five(-)year(-)old." Jane smiled."
"Drew, I received a voice mail(voicemail) from a Maxwell Gaines."
Darn it! Who is it from? Kuznetsov perhaps? Fancy leaving an old bloke like me in suspense like that... meany lol.
Another great chapter and it is moving along at a steady pace.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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LOL Thank you for the catches. I am off to make the corrections.
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Always welcome, mate.
Comment from Janilou
I see this novel is well advanced and it was a little difficult for me to put the pieces together and understand the conversations taking place and the underlying meanings behind them. My fault, not yours. LOL
I read through twice and did not find any errors and I have no suggestions for improvements. I did enjoy Emily's five-year-old innocence and her take on the situation. She sounds like a cutie.
All the best.
Jan
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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I see this novel is well advanced and it was a little difficult for me to put the pieces together and understand the conversations taking place and the underlying meanings behind them. My fault, not yours. LOL
I read through twice and did not find any errors and I have no suggestions for improvements. I did enjoy Emily's five-year-old innocence and her take on the situation. She sounds like a cutie.
All the best.
Jan
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I love how you have a calming ways with little Emily in your story, to me it helps to keep the nerves tension down .
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Hello Barb
I love how you have a calming ways with little Emily in your story, to me it helps to keep the nerves tension down .
Gert
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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You are welcome Barb.
Gert
Comment from royowen
When pondering the upcoming party of Emily, it reminded me of my 6yr old granddaughter's 6th birthday, it was a "pamper party", girls only, I guess they grow up very quickly, where's my little girl gone? Anderson was obviously embarrassed about the question posed about Shana, is love happening? Well done, Barbara, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : I, ah, agr(ee) 2: Why did daddy get (up) in and leave the table...
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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When pondering the upcoming party of Emily, it reminded me of my 6yr old granddaughter's 6th birthday, it was a "pamper party", girls only, I guess they grow up very quickly, where's my little girl gone? Anderson was obviously embarrassed about the question posed about Shana, is love happening? Well done, Barbara, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : I, ah, agr(ee) 2: Why did daddy get (up) in and leave the table...
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Most welcome
Comment from KNim
Coming in the middle of a story line isn't always easy to review...I feel like a fly on the wall - just flown in and trying to catch up.
That being said;
I love the intrigue. What I've read makes me want to read it all! From this excerpt, I feel bad for Shana, who seems to be referred to in third party, as if she's not really sitting there ~ awkward for her.
The one sentence from Emily seemed a little off - "Why did Daddy get and leave without eating breakfast?"...was that meant to be the sentence the way a five-year-old would speak or were words missing?
I look forward to reading more of this story line. Thank you!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Coming in the middle of a story line isn't always easy to review...I feel like a fly on the wall - just flown in and trying to catch up.
That being said;
I love the intrigue. What I've read makes me want to read it all! From this excerpt, I feel bad for Shana, who seems to be referred to in third party, as if she's not really sitting there ~ awkward for her.
The one sentence from Emily seemed a little off - "Why did Daddy get and leave without eating breakfast?"...was that meant to be the sentence the way a five-year-old would speak or were words missing?
I look forward to reading more of this story line. Thank you!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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I messed up and left a word out. I will get that fixed. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I love the scenes with Emily. She adds a lot of warmth to what could be just a mystery/theft story. I also like what Anderson's staff add, almost like a family. Now, what does Jeff have in that envelope?
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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I love the scenes with Emily. She adds a lot of warmth to what could be just a mystery/theft story. I also like what Anderson's staff add, almost like a family. Now, what does Jeff have in that envelope?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sefiros
Interesting. The little girl injects some happiness into a book dealing with multiple problems (the painting; the mother's incessant need for money, etc). I'm not too sure why Drew is shy about Shana's dress. They're both adults. Why can't they be together? Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Interesting. The little girl injects some happiness into a book dealing with multiple problems (the painting; the mother's incessant need for money, etc). I'm not too sure why Drew is shy about Shana's dress. They're both adults. Why can't they be together? Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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There is plenty of reason they can't be together. One reason already discussed is Anderson promised Shana's father. Hmmm, Thank you for the kind review.