A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The survivor"A collection of poems showcasing unusual words
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Comment from Dawn Munro
This is an in-your-face, powerful poem I hope you publish widely - it needs to be read (but sadly, those who might agree with the fabulous message are probably not the ones who can do anything about it)!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
This is an in-your-face, powerful poem I hope you publish widely - it needs to be read (but sadly, those who might agree with the fabulous message are probably not the ones who can do anything about it)!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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I don't love all my children (poems) equally, but I was happy with this one in so far as I thought it got across what I was trying to say. So I'm very grateful that you honoured it with such a lovely review, and the award of the shiny stars. Many thanks! Craig
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Very much my pleasure.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your well written poem tells a deep and dark truth.
Unfortunately, in the hands of humans, the world is headed for a bleak place.
Cockroaches may well be the only survivors.
Sharon
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
Your well written poem tells a deep and dark truth.
Unfortunately, in the hands of humans, the world is headed for a bleak place.
Cockroaches may well be the only survivors.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the kind review. your supportive remarks are much appreciated. Craig
Comment from --Turtle.
This poem uses minimal punctuation to highlight the disregarding and destructive nature of humans rampaging through the animal kingdom and planet, including the liklihood of themselves, to contemplate the winner of the leftovers that will thrive in the rubble.
Cockroaches, being hearty and resilient may take over what is left.
A tense, appropriately disapproving tone, that encompases the theme word 'survivor'. Like each animal was taken and evaluated through the poem if they have a chance to survive human existence, even humans, and each found lacking the resources to overcome, save for maybe the cockroach.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
This poem uses minimal punctuation to highlight the disregarding and destructive nature of humans rampaging through the animal kingdom and planet, including the liklihood of themselves, to contemplate the winner of the leftovers that will thrive in the rubble.
Cockroaches, being hearty and resilient may take over what is left.
A tense, appropriately disapproving tone, that encompases the theme word 'survivor'. Like each animal was taken and evaluated through the poem if they have a chance to survive human existence, even humans, and each found lacking the resources to overcome, save for maybe the cockroach.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Yep, that was the idea last critter standing :) Thanks for reviewing, and for the kind comments, Turtle.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Craig;
Yet another piece proclaiming the hardiness of the cockroach!! (I just read a poem by Barb H about the cockroach laughing at the human race.)
I like the structure of this piece and the way you introduced your new word. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
Hi, Craig;
Yet another piece proclaiming the hardiness of the cockroach!! (I just read a poem by Barb H about the cockroach laughing at the human race.)
I like the structure of this piece and the way you introduced your new word. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Hi Patty,
Yes, I reviewed Barb's poem too. Perhaps I provided some small inspiration, since she reviewed mine earlier that day?
Thanks for the complimentary review.
Craig
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
The premise of this poem is a perfect one to showcase the word 'supervivant', Craig! Let's hope that it doesn't ever get to the point where Earth becomes uninhabitable, and "cockroaches" are the only species able to survive. This scenario is all too plausible and scary.
This is well written with very good rhyming and a nice smooth flow. You've created vivid imagery for your reader, and your poem delivers a strong message.
~~ Connie
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
The premise of this poem is a perfect one to showcase the word 'supervivant', Craig! Let's hope that it doesn't ever get to the point where Earth becomes uninhabitable, and "cockroaches" are the only species able to survive. This scenario is all too plausible and scary.
This is well written with very good rhyming and a nice smooth flow. You've created vivid imagery for your reader, and your poem delivers a strong message.
~~ Connie
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much, Connie, for the lovely review. Sadly, the chance of something like that occurring is all too real. We've already wiped out so many species, we don't have to wait for that to become real. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH dear and I gave away my last six, I usually have one left by Sunday morning. This is excellently done in flow and rhyme and especially content
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
OH dear and I gave away my last six, I usually have one left by Sunday morning. This is excellently done in flow and rhyme and especially content
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much, Barb. I think all mine were gone by about Wednesday, so I commend you on being so frugal :) I appreciate the lovely comments. Craig
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about how we damage the planet and destroy everything we lay our hands on. The only supervivants at the end will be the cannot-die cockroaches we live with each day.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
A very well-written poem about how we damage the planet and destroy everything we lay our hands on. The only supervivants at the end will be the cannot-die cockroaches we live with each day.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Thanks for reviewing, and for the kind comments. Craig
Comment from BeasPeas
Excellent. We are the spoilers. Nothing can exist but us and we will be replaced by AI. Will they do better than us. No. Everything has its time and we can't resist annihilating ourselves. Your poem is heartbreaking and unless we really stop and wake up we are doomed--and--I consider myself an optimist. Go figure. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
Excellent. We are the spoilers. Nothing can exist but us and we will be replaced by AI. Will they do better than us. No. Everything has its time and we can't resist annihilating ourselves. Your poem is heartbreaking and unless we really stop and wake up we are doomed--and--I consider myself an optimist. Go figure. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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I feel sorry for the rest of the animal kingdom. They've done nothing to bring this upon themselves. Only one species can take credit for that.. Many thanks, Marilyn - Craig
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I agree.
Comment from Gloria ....
Craig this is written in excellent metre and rhyme and it forecasts mankind's future with what might very well be, (I still hold out hope) our indictment on our own survival.
Cockroaches, eh? Well they were the ones worked in with the new word, supervivant, so I guess they should be the winners.
Excellent post!
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2018
Craig this is written in excellent metre and rhyme and it forecasts mankind's future with what might very well be, (I still hold out hope) our indictment on our own survival.
Cockroaches, eh? Well they were the ones worked in with the new word, supervivant, so I guess they should be the winners.
Excellent post!
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2018
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Many people have suggested they'd be the only survivors of a global nuclear war, Gloria. Many thanks for a lovely review :) Craig
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Why not cockroaches? They may end up being the best guardians of the planet. Humans sure are a waste of brain power. Life will always be painful, so maybe life is not such a good thing. Lions eat gazelles to feed their cubs, etc. A lot of blood and guts make up what we honor as LIFE. Maybe it's a failed experiment.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2018
Why not cockroaches? They may end up being the best guardians of the planet. Humans sure are a waste of brain power. Life will always be painful, so maybe life is not such a good thing. Lions eat gazelles to feed their cubs, etc. A lot of blood and guts make up what we honor as LIFE. Maybe it's a failed experiment.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2018
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Interesting idea. Thanks for reviewing :) Craig