A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "The end of the world"A collection of poems showcasing unusual words
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Comment from Gloria ....
Absolutely superb sonnet, Craig. You establish a strong iambic pentameter in line one and carry through to the very end. Rhymes fresh and in no way contrived further the story with great finesse. Isn't it something though. With all the alleged checks and balances in place, it seems human error still conquers all. The new word raven-messenger (a story in itself) worked in seamlessly.
Terrific sonnet AND story in a poem. I wish you all the best in the contest with this beauty.
Gloria
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Absolutely superb sonnet, Craig. You establish a strong iambic pentameter in line one and carry through to the very end. Rhymes fresh and in no way contrived further the story with great finesse. Isn't it something though. With all the alleged checks and balances in place, it seems human error still conquers all. The new word raven-messenger (a story in itself) worked in seamlessly.
Terrific sonnet AND story in a poem. I wish you all the best in the contest with this beauty.
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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I was reading something yesterday, and was astonished at how easy it actually would be for some infantile megalomaniac to push the button that ends it all. According to this piece, there are no checks and balances - it boils down to the decision of one person, no "consensus" required, and that decision cannot be overridden - by anyone. No, that's not a scary thought at all.
Thanks so much for the complimentary remarks, Gloria. Very much appreciated :) Craig
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow. What does one say about such a story-in-a-poem except that you have used the form masterfully, and created something that can only be called immensely powerful. What frightens me is that final couplet - does anyone realize that you are saying it's over, that there's no false alarm - pray God it never happens...
Outstanding poetry!
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Wow. What does one say about such a story-in-a-poem except that you have used the form masterfully, and created something that can only be called immensely powerful. What frightens me is that final couplet - does anyone realize that you are saying it's over, that there's no false alarm - pray God it never happens...
Outstanding poetry!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely review, Dawn. Indeed, let's hope it never comes to that. Cheers, Craig
Comment from --Turtle.
A solid conceptual evaluation in poetic form, touching on current events. The image hits close to home, and how potent the consequences could have been, if the wrong mixed messages get to the wrong hands. The story presented was clear and dire, based in reality, and thankfully fictional for now.
informed the Final Chapter has begun.
(This first set of the poem, which uses strong story imagery of what it might look like, the raining down type situation. Retaliation that ... uhg. Everyone loses.)
The raven-messenger has struck again:
(nice use of raven-messenger, here. With such a huge consequence, of massive life and death, the term seems appropriate, on a biblical scale.)
The flow of the story to conclusion here does a lot of work.
(I'm garbling what I'm trying to say... so I'll start again.
This poem, utilizing strong rhymes, a pleasing pace, and a tense topic... captures a current event and highlights it using your daily word theme. The theme- word... raven-messenger, has a biblical roots, very 'fate of all earthkind' and the potential consequences of a warning in error, to the wrong ears, could have resulted in a 'fate of all earthkind' catastrophe. Add on top of all that, you laid it down in a story arc. Incident situation, gets out of hand, conclusion... and sad ending with irony about it.)
Nice job with this.
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A solid conceptual evaluation in poetic form, touching on current events. The image hits close to home, and how potent the consequences could have been, if the wrong mixed messages get to the wrong hands. The story presented was clear and dire, based in reality, and thankfully fictional for now.
informed the Final Chapter has begun.
(This first set of the poem, which uses strong story imagery of what it might look like, the raining down type situation. Retaliation that ... uhg. Everyone loses.)
The raven-messenger has struck again:
(nice use of raven-messenger, here. With such a huge consequence, of massive life and death, the term seems appropriate, on a biblical scale.)
The flow of the story to conclusion here does a lot of work.
(I'm garbling what I'm trying to say... so I'll start again.
This poem, utilizing strong rhymes, a pleasing pace, and a tense topic... captures a current event and highlights it using your daily word theme. The theme- word... raven-messenger, has a biblical roots, very 'fate of all earthkind' and the potential consequences of a warning in error, to the wrong ears, could have resulted in a 'fate of all earthkind' catastrophe. Add on top of all that, you laid it down in a story arc. Incident situation, gets out of hand, conclusion... and sad ending with irony about it.)
Nice job with this.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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I can't thank you enough for the time you take to digest what each poem is trying to say, Turtle. And I'm really grateful for the lovely feedback, and the sparkly stars. They mean a lot to me. Cheers, Craig.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Share A Story In A Poem writing prompt.
Well said, well written, and a scary possibility.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Share A Story In A Poem writing prompt.
Well said, well written, and a scary possibility.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the kind comments, Sharon, and the good wishes as well. Much appreciated - Craig
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Tis true, tis true, what a false alarm to have us run for cover for but then again, where do we hide? lol Very well done in thought, rhyme and flow
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Tis true, tis true, what a false alarm to have us run for cover for but then again, where do we hide? lol Very well done in thought, rhyme and flow
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Barb. Where indeed? I remember seeing clips showing under school desks was the best place to be to survive a nuclear explosion... "duck and cover, duck and cover..." :) Craig
Comment from Joy Graham
That Hawaii false alarm will provide chatter for quite a while. Frightening for those that were there. When we lived on the base in Comox, B,C. they would test their alarm siren once a week. My parents came for a visit and I was out when it was tested, but my mom scolded me when I got home. She lived in London during the second world war bombings, and the sound of the siren made her dive for cover. I felt so bad.
Good sonnet today. Good use of your word of the day.
Joy xx
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That Hawaii false alarm will provide chatter for quite a while. Frightening for those that were there. When we lived on the base in Comox, B,C. they would test their alarm siren once a week. My parents came for a visit and I was out when it was tested, but my mom scolded me when I got home. She lived in London during the second world war bombings, and the sound of the siren made her dive for cover. I felt so bad.
Good sonnet today. Good use of your word of the day.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much, Joy. I like the optimism of thinking it's possible to survive a nuclear blast by hiding under a school desk - like the old "duck and cover" ads taught us. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story/poem. Our daily lives become quite interesting. There is not a day going by that brings us something new or shocking over the news.
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A very well-written story/poem. Our daily lives become quite interesting. There is not a day going by that brings us something new or shocking over the news.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Very true, that, Sandra. Many thanks - Craig
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about the incident in Hawaii with the false alert. I am sure it frightened so many people as it would here in the U.S. Very good wording and imagery with the art work. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written poem about the incident in Hawaii with the false alert. I am sure it frightened so many people as it would here in the U.S. Very good wording and imagery with the art work. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
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Indeed, Teri. The mind boggles at what could have happened, even though it was only a mistake. Many thanks, Craig
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Excellent, a very confident use of the form.
Beautifully metered, and effortlessly rhymed, I really enjoyed this poem (nit do much the scenario, obviously :) ).
Very well done.
Take care.
-James
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Excellent, a very confident use of the form.
Beautifully metered, and effortlessly rhymed, I really enjoyed this poem (nit do much the scenario, obviously :) ).
Very well done.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much, James, for the kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a nice poem.
Recent affair at Pyongyang is expressed a sign of end of the world.
A fantastic thought as a story shared in this poem.
Well said, well done.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Good luck with the contest.
Keep writing.
DR ALCREATOR
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This is a nice poem.
Recent affair at Pyongyang is expressed a sign of end of the world.
A fantastic thought as a story shared in this poem.
Well said, well done.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Good luck with the contest.
Keep writing.
DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the kind review - Craig