Perennials of War
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Comment from jppoet
luckily, and at the suggestion of a fan of yours, this is my first read of your story and will now look forward to previous and future chapters.
You are blessed with literary talent. Blessings, john
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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luckily, and at the suggestion of a fan of yours, this is my first read of your story and will now look forward to previous and future chapters.
You are blessed with literary talent. Blessings, john
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ella Gott
Wow this is thrilling! Please keep writing! 5 stars for sure, and I will be looking for sequels. I would be honored if you reviewed some of my work and gave some feedback!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Wow this is thrilling! Please keep writing! 5 stars for sure, and I will be looking for sequels. I would be honored if you reviewed some of my work and gave some feedback!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Hueing away the Jewish culture for this fellow is going to be hard but miracles still happen. I'm sure we will see the results pretty soon. You have a knack for keeping things rolling that way. LOL.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Hueing away the Jewish culture for this fellow is going to be hard but miracles still happen. I'm sure we will see the results pretty soon. You have a knack for keeping things rolling that way. LOL.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Rasmine
Barbara,
Thank you, for this chapter. I need a coffee so I will finish making it now. This chapter reminded me of that. Thank you, :D
Nome :)))))
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Barbara,
Thank you, for this chapter. I need a coffee so I will finish making it now. This chapter reminded me of that. Thank you, :D
Nome :)))))
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mbroyles2
Drew definitely has his hands full winning Shana's love.
Battling an obsessive father will do that to you.
As far as details.
One rule I try to incorporate and have not always been good at is: do the details advance or tell something about the characters, story, setting, etc...
If not, I tend to eliminate them and then read the story over again.
I caught myself adding too much detail in my last book in some chapters, and not enough in others.
It's a fine line, but ultimately the details rest with the writer.
I, for one, as a reader don't mind details at all.
Michael
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Drew definitely has his hands full winning Shana's love.
Battling an obsessive father will do that to you.
As far as details.
One rule I try to incorporate and have not always been good at is: do the details advance or tell something about the characters, story, setting, etc...
If not, I tend to eliminate them and then read the story over again.
I caught myself adding too much detail in my last book in some chapters, and not enough in others.
It's a fine line, but ultimately the details rest with the writer.
I, for one, as a reader don't mind details at all.
Michael
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review and the thoughts on writing.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
This chapter flowed beautifully. Your dialogue was right on point and gives the reader plenty of information. Being the excellent and experienced writer you are, you develop a perplexing conflict for the potential lovers, and one not easily overcome.
I'm very much looking forward to reading more. Very well done!
:) Bev
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Hi, Barbara
This chapter flowed beautifully. Your dialogue was right on point and gives the reader plenty of information. Being the excellent and experienced writer you are, you develop a perplexing conflict for the potential lovers, and one not easily overcome.
I'm very much looking forward to reading more. Very well done!
:) Bev
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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You're very welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think you have the detail perfectly, not too much and not too little. Just keep on doing what you do, Barbara, I love you writing. Now, this part reveals what we'd all begun to suspect, Drew is in love with Shana. But, there will be consequences. Shana is too much a devout Jew, how will they overcome that? I'm sure something will be resolved. It's nice that he can help the family with Sarah and I hope they can cure her. Wonderful part, Barbara, and I am now looking forward to the next part! Sandra xx
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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I think you have the detail perfectly, not too much and not too little. Just keep on doing what you do, Barbara, I love you writing. Now, this part reveals what we'd all begun to suspect, Drew is in love with Shana. But, there will be consequences. Shana is too much a devout Jew, how will they overcome that? I'm sure something will be resolved. It's nice that he can help the family with Sarah and I hope they can cure her. Wonderful part, Barbara, and I am now looking forward to the next part! Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ulla
So Shana is not going to be an easy catch. Drew is in for the long haul. Let's see if he has the stamina. For some reason I think he does. I certainly hope so. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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So Shana is not going to be an easy catch. Drew is in for the long haul. Let's see if he has the stamina. For some reason I think he does. I certainly hope so. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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I bet Drew does too. He usually gets what he wants, but his money won't do it. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"I haven't seen the stubborn side of Shana. Are you saying it may be impossible." "I didn't say that. I haven't missed the way she looks at you. I doubt it's been unnoticed by Uncle Benjamin either." AMAZING writing as always Barbara. I always enjoy your writing so much and look forward to reading more. Excellent loved this chapter bring on the next! Kindest regards and warmest wishes Meia x
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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"I haven't seen the stubborn side of Shana. Are you saying it may be impossible." "I didn't say that. I haven't missed the way she looks at you. I doubt it's been unnoticed by Uncle Benjamin either." AMAZING writing as always Barbara. I always enjoy your writing so much and look forward to reading more. Excellent loved this chapter bring on the next! Kindest regards and warmest wishes Meia x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from giraffmang
So Anderson comes clean at last. not that it is a surprise. lol
I'm guessing Shana knows she feels the same given the awkward floor glances...
Are you saying it may be impossible." - probably need a question mark in here.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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So Anderson comes clean at last. not that it is a surprise. lol
I'm guessing Shana knows she feels the same given the awkward floor glances...
Are you saying it may be impossible." - probably need a question mark in here.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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I will get that question mark in place. Thank you.