A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "The Escape"A collection of poems showcasing unusual words
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Comment from --Turtle.
Hey, Craig, read through this word of the day.
Strong message, composed with neat imagery and power verbs..
I read and contemplated some concepts I read about people being mentally hardwired for certain beliefs... which allows this conundrum of why it's so difficult to change a belief with provable facts... as the hardwired circuitry of the brain does not compute what it isn't hardwired to receive.
So the chains I see in this are wire chains... short circuits...
Only minor thing I paused to wonder on for the writing of this...
The chains of guilt, by means of which we're bound, ensuring the entrapment of our souls.
(feels incomplete as a sentence? ensuring = ensures? but then I don't know if the syllables line up.)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Hey, Craig, read through this word of the day.
Strong message, composed with neat imagery and power verbs..
I read and contemplated some concepts I read about people being mentally hardwired for certain beliefs... which allows this conundrum of why it's so difficult to change a belief with provable facts... as the hardwired circuitry of the brain does not compute what it isn't hardwired to receive.
So the chains I see in this are wire chains... short circuits...
Only minor thing I paused to wonder on for the writing of this...
The chains of guilt, by means of which we're bound, ensuring the entrapment of our souls.
(feels incomplete as a sentence? ensuring = ensures? but then I don't know if the syllables line up.)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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I think I've read similar things, Turtle, and been a bit skeptical of the extent to which this "hard-wiring" might occur. Certain instincts, I can understand, but beliefs? Hmmm... not so sure. But I don't really remember too much of it, to be honest.
What I think many people don't get is the extent to which certain beliefs (for example religious ones, attitudes towards other species, etc) are programmed into us from the time we are tiny, by our parents and society at large. Given such indoctrination from birth, altering our viewpoint could be almost as hard as if such beliefs were "hard-wired".
Thanks for a thoughtful and excellent review.
Craig
Comment from dragonpoet
This sounds like you are trying not only to escape from the fortresses you set up in your mind but also from fake preachers that try to keep you from your true path.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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This sounds like you are trying not only to escape from the fortresses you set up in your mind but also from fake preachers that try to keep you from your true path.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Well, it's autobiographical only in the sense that I think it's something nearly all of us go through. Thanks for the kind review - Craig.
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Yes it is, Craig. You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The chains of guilt ....ensuring the entrapment of our souls
great lines Craig and a powerfully put message using this day's word about the prison we sometimes find ourselves in, one only we can dismantle. Super write,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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The chains of guilt ....ensuring the entrapment of our souls
great lines Craig and a powerfully put message using this day's word about the prison we sometimes find ourselves in, one only we can dismantle. Super write,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for the lovely compliments, Valda. Also for the generous rating! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Cheers, Craig
Comment from LIJ Red
You must be talking about today's so-called teachers...but at least they are dumping history and cursive writing from their curriculum...I like those uncommon words you find in the book. Fivers.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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You must be talking about today's so-called teachers...but at least they are dumping history and cursive writing from their curriculum...I like those uncommon words you find in the book. Fivers.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Thanks for reviewing - plenty more weird words to come :) Cheers, Craig
Comment from rama devi
Very fine work! I love that closing couplet. What a great word and potent closing note! Speaking of the closing note, the opening note is pretty powerful as well - and superbly alliterated (loved reading that aloud!) In fact, these two are my favorite lines:
In tax-free citadels, they claim high ground,
and haul our spirits, cowed, across the coals.
Eloquent sonnet, superb composition style, inventive rhymes, flawless meter, fantastic phonetics, and a very effective presentation as well. A six!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Very fine work! I love that closing couplet. What a great word and potent closing note! Speaking of the closing note, the opening note is pretty powerful as well - and superbly alliterated (loved reading that aloud!) In fact, these two are my favorite lines:
In tax-free citadels, they claim high ground,
and haul our spirits, cowed, across the coals.
Eloquent sonnet, superb composition style, inventive rhymes, flawless meter, fantastic phonetics, and a very effective presentation as well. A six!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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OK, but try saying something positive!
Haha - I'm JOKING, of course. Many thanks for the wonderful compliments, RD. Coming from someone I know doesn't offer high praise lightly, I consider that VERY uplifting.
Your generous comments and rating have brightened my afternoon.
Many thanks,
Craig
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Yay! Thanks, dear Craig. I am deeply pleased you grok that the praise is both genuine and deserved...
Your brightness radiates into my evening! (oh, well, actually, it's almost 1 a.m. here!)
Warmly, rd
Comment from Gloria ....
A perfectly rhymed and metred sonnet, Craig and on an important subject, that is blind acceptance of things we don't understand that can cause great damage to other people when used to scapegoat them.
Excellent new word and powerful voicing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A perfectly rhymed and metred sonnet, Craig and on an important subject, that is blind acceptance of things we don't understand that can cause great damage to other people when used to scapegoat them.
Excellent new word and powerful voicing.
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Gloria. Always appreciated - Craig
Comment from strandregs
this is a hot potato
most people won't admit they are slaves to
their own happy ignorance
I was just pondering why basic training
teaches to obey without question.
(through reward and punishment)
just like lab rats... :-))Z.
When you finish doing this book, read the bond.
I am so enjoying sprinting through quantum knowledge.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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this is a hot potato
most people won't admit they are slaves to
their own happy ignorance
I was just pondering why basic training
teaches to obey without question.
(through reward and punishment)
just like lab rats... :-))Z.
When you finish doing this book, read the bond.
I am so enjoying sprinting through quantum knowledge.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Cheers for the kind comments. Is the "the bond" you refer to the one about the Alaskan mountain climbers?
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No it's about our quantum world
by Lynne Taggart.
it opens a door to some awesome thinking.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the self imprisonment we often find ourselves in. The funny thing is we lock ourselves in and we are keeping the key to release ourselves but seldom does.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A very well-written poem about the self imprisonment we often find ourselves in. The funny thing is we lock ourselves in and we are keeping the key to release ourselves but seldom does.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much, Sandra. Yes, we all have the key. Finding and using it is the hard bit, I think; because we are taught not to. Much appreciated - Craig
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an excellent poem and many will identify with your theme. Most devotees can see the folly of the humans behind the cloth, not set any of them on a pedestal for those are prone to sin just like everyone else. What's most important isn't the messenger, but the message, and that's what I think most seekers cling to. Great job in expressing your new word for the day. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This is an excellent poem and many will identify with your theme. Most devotees can see the folly of the humans behind the cloth, not set any of them on a pedestal for those are prone to sin just like everyone else. What's most important isn't the messenger, but the message, and that's what I think most seekers cling to. Great job in expressing your new word for the day. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much, Marilyn, most appreciated. Craig
Comment from karenina
Lexicon is stimulating....to find a new word and see it used and embraced within a poem just makes my day. I love Crosswords as well and so often these rare words
are very helpful in that arena. Your poem is heavy...deep...daring even. Who dares deny the wizards?! I grew up in a family of strict devout Catholics....God Bless Them! When I hit adolescence, (shocker) I started to question all the "isms" inherent...and decided to set off on a journey of various religions to perceive what I could of similarities and differences. I was practically disowned...and my Grandmother wore her fingers to the bone saying the rosary for my soul. Ironically I discovered my salvation and relationship to God sitting on massive rocks in (shocking) Rockport, MA...gazing at the ocean and dwelling in the cleansing briny breeze unimpeded by any church walls at all. To each their own, I say. First, as you so aptly pointed out, we have to learn no one holds the keys to our mind...we are free to think outside the boxes people put us in!--Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Lexicon is stimulating....to find a new word and see it used and embraced within a poem just makes my day. I love Crosswords as well and so often these rare words
are very helpful in that arena. Your poem is heavy...deep...daring even. Who dares deny the wizards?! I grew up in a family of strict devout Catholics....God Bless Them! When I hit adolescence, (shocker) I started to question all the "isms" inherent...and decided to set off on a journey of various religions to perceive what I could of similarities and differences. I was practically disowned...and my Grandmother wore her fingers to the bone saying the rosary for my soul. Ironically I discovered my salvation and relationship to God sitting on massive rocks in (shocking) Rockport, MA...gazing at the ocean and dwelling in the cleansing briny breeze unimpeded by any church walls at all. To each their own, I say. First, as you so aptly pointed out, we have to learn no one holds the keys to our mind...we are free to think outside the boxes people put us in!--Karenina
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the very thoughtful response, Karenina. Yes, the key is that, whatever we believe, it should be something we rationally have arrived at, not what someone has dictated to us. Most appreciated - Craig
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I agree....heart and soul are good...but your mind has to "buy it" for sure!--Karenina