Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Craig, This is a very interesting short story about the death of Jesse James. You used very good descriptive words that were very informative. You used good imagery with the art work as well! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks very much, Teri. I appreciate the lovely comments. Craig

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hey, Craig,

I enjoyed this story in a poem, pleasing flow and entertaining. A nice addition to the collection, with an old school betrayal for a potentially old-school word.

he invited them back to his small, cosy[,] shack
(I think you can delete this comma, but only if you want to take cosy from being an interrupt to a second adjective)

a small picture did crookedly hang;
(nice use of the picture to frame the betrayal...

asked a man in his broad, western twang.
(I like your use of itallics for allowing the dialogue to flow in and out of dialogue here in this poem)

once he heard the cash register clang.
(Money makes the world go round. And it's hard to find good honorable, desperate men to go outlawing, even in the old days.)

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks for the suggestion re the comma, Turtle - fixing that now. Thanks also for the other great comments. Much appreciated, Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

You sure manage to incorporate your curious words into the most entertaining stories. So this is celebrate Jesse James Day, huh? I never knew this story. Once again, I am amazed that you know so much American history. Excellent job.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Well, I have to come clean. I knew of Jesse James, but not all of the details described here. They were kindly provided by my little book :) Many thanks, Debbie - Craig

reply by Debbie Pope on 03-Apr-2018

Oh yes, the book of course.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Craig. I DID enjoy reading your Jesse James poem, an outlaw that still continues to fascinate. I'm reading 'traditor' as one who goes against his own from just a plain old traitor, but as you say, it could be just an old spelling of the same word. I like the 'ang' words throughout, especially 'swang.'
Marilyn

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks very much, Marilyn - much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about many people will betray another if it means they can pump their bank account with loads of cash for betraying anyone doesn't matter to their conscience.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Many thanks for reviewing, and the kind comments. Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Wow, CD...that is one interesting story in a poem, not having read up on the demise of Jesse James. The traitor was very mean and very clever...and became very rich. A bold move for an ending that had to come one way or another. Thank you for the share. I enjoyed this informative read. ~DD

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks for the very kind comments, DD. Most grateful - Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well DUH, it's easy to know why traditor is the better word. It has three syllables which means it is a word I will be remembering because I plan to use it forthwith in absolutely every place that I would normally put traitor. Yessssssss. Thank you.

Oh yes great poem too. No honour even among thieves.

Love it!

Gloria

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

You're going to pinch my word? You traditor!

Thanks for the fun review, Gloria :)

Craig

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi, Craig. I had to laugh when I saw your title. My great great great grandfather was Sam Houston. The state of Texas loves any relative of his. And, guess who besides me is the family tree? Their lineage ends with themselves. They never had any children. Their names? Robert and Charles Ford. My maiden name is Ford. My grandfather was Ford. So, that may seem enough for you. But, I was at lunch with some gal friends at the office. We were talking about famous relatives. I listed mine. One of my girlfriends had Jesse James as a relative. My relatives killed hers. Talk about a small world. Well, Craig, it's been fun. See you at the next review. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Well, remind me not to pick a fight with you or your friend, Pam! Thanks for a fun and informative review. Now I guess I have to go rewrite the poem lol Cheers, Craig

reply by Pamusart on 03-Apr-2018

You mean rewrite it so that my relatives get to have progeny? It is already written in the stones. There was a movie made about Jesse?s death. It portrayed Jesse as a mean outlaw who kept threatening to kill the Ford boys. In it, it raises the question about courage. If Jesse was going to kill them AND they can?t possibly beat him in a fair fight, then was it wrong of them? I think I would leave rather than kill first. But, that may just have clinched the early death

Comment from Michael Steinert

Excellent

Love the wanted poster for the photo the rythems very well established and it was educational too! Great poem look forward to reading more of your work.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks for the great review, much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Another interesting would fitted nicely into your fun verse.
Well written, well said.
I don't know why we need another word for traitor either. They seem to be the same thing.
Sharom

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 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks very much for the kind review, Sharon. I guess it keeps people writing books of strange words employed :) Cheers, Craig