A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
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Comment from --Turtle.
So many poems I didn't get a chance to read and review this year, I went back and selected a few to read this morning.
I could see, when I flew like an owl!"
(Fun poem here, imaginative, creative... A story in a poem. These are the type of poem where I think you could turn the whole thing into a kids book. One poem, five or six pages.
So Pete went to a vet, a kind soul he once met,
Now it happened that day, somewhere not far away,
an eagle flew(crashed?) into a tree;
(I imagined the eagle flying into the tree safely, maybe crashed, instead?)
The vet took his pinions[,] and, helped by her minions,
secured them to Pete's sturdy back.
(why the first comma? the helped by her minions is an interupt... so the first comma, I wasn't sure what it was for and my suggestion is to remove)
and that's how this story unfurled.
(A story with a happy ending, a tale of chasing your dream, and finding the people who can help you make it happen. Nice job here. Entertaining, and one I've marked to test on my daughter for bedtime. )
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
So many poems I didn't get a chance to read and review this year, I went back and selected a few to read this morning.
I could see, when I flew like an owl!"
(Fun poem here, imaginative, creative... A story in a poem. These are the type of poem where I think you could turn the whole thing into a kids book. One poem, five or six pages.
So Pete went to a vet, a kind soul he once met,
Now it happened that day, somewhere not far away,
an eagle flew(crashed?) into a tree;
(I imagined the eagle flying into the tree safely, maybe crashed, instead?)
The vet took his pinions[,] and, helped by her minions,
secured them to Pete's sturdy back.
(why the first comma? the helped by her minions is an interupt... so the first comma, I wasn't sure what it was for and my suggestion is to remove)
and that's how this story unfurled.
(A story with a happy ending, a tale of chasing your dream, and finding the people who can help you make it happen. Nice job here. Entertaining, and one I've marked to test on my daughter for bedtime. )
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Both corrections accepted and implemented. Thanks for your eagle eye, Turtle. Since this is one I chose for the book, I'll have to update both the electronic and paperback versions as well. I'm glad the corrections were spotted before it became a million seller! ;-) Many thanks, once again. Craig
Comment from damommy
Love the internal rhyme and meter of this delightful poem. And the idea that this could happen. Imagine having a sky full of flying pups.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
Love the internal rhyme and meter of this delightful poem. And the idea that this could happen. Imagine having a sky full of flying pups.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Well, I would want to be wearing a hat, I think... just in case! Thanks for the lovely comments :) Craig
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LOL
Comment from Dorinda Palmisano
Again, you've amazed me. This reminds me of a cross between Ogden Nash and Shel Silverstein. It could almost be a lesson in transgender acceptance! You have the gift of an "ear" for poetry. Musical and delightful. Thank you Dorinda
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
Again, you've amazed me. This reminds me of a cross between Ogden Nash and Shel Silverstein. It could almost be a lesson in transgender acceptance! You have the gift of an "ear" for poetry. Musical and delightful. Thank you Dorinda
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Wow, it's certainly some compliment to have a piece compared to those illustrious gents! Thanks for the wonderful comments :) Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw, this is a cute poem, Craig. Pugnozzle, now that's a word that can get a lot of mileage I believe and we're always looking for new words with deeper meaning, yes?
I like the metre too, it's a change from the old iambics and jaunty as it should be.
Very nice indeed.
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
Aw, this is a cute poem, Craig. Pugnozzle, now that's a word that can get a lot of mileage I believe and we're always looking for new words with deeper meaning, yes?
I like the metre too, it's a change from the old iambics and jaunty as it should be.
Very nice indeed.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks very much, Gloria. A change is as good as a holiday, they say. Or maybe it's vacation there? Much appreciated - Craig
Comment from Teri7
Craig, This is a really cute poem you have penned about pug nozzle Pete. You used very cute descriptive words and I love the picture of the dog! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. It had the feel of a limerick type poem to me! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
Craig, This is a really cute poem you have penned about pug nozzle Pete. You used very cute descriptive words and I love the picture of the dog! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. It had the feel of a limerick type poem to me! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Teri. I'm glad you enjoyed, and yes, I love the doggie picture too. Cheers, Craig
Comment from ciliverde
This is really fantastic, Craig. I could see you writing a children's book with poems like this - with the pictures of course - and they would have so much fun with it. I think my favorite line is the one about the vet with her minions. Actually, the whole stanza is great, with her announcement about having a knack for miracles (lol). This brought a big smile to my face, which I needed - thank you. Great job with the meter too, it's not an easy one!
Carol
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
This is really fantastic, Craig. I could see you writing a children's book with poems like this - with the pictures of course - and they would have so much fun with it. I think my favorite line is the one about the vet with her minions. Actually, the whole stanza is great, with her announcement about having a knack for miracles (lol). This brought a big smile to my face, which I needed - thank you. Great job with the meter too, it's not an easy one!
Carol
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much for the delightful comments, Carol, I'm really chuffed by them. I'm glad if this bit of silliness made you smile. Thanks for the wonderful, shiny stars as well. Craig
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Sometimes I call my dogs my minions - you reminded me of that. I have four of them, all rescued Australian cattledogs - lots of personality!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Craig. I would like to return your sixer to you for this charming write, but I can't as I'm out. My daughter had a pug, an adorable creature and funny. Of course, it was a heart breaker when he passed. Your poem, written in limerick series, fits the theme perfectly--amusing and unique, plus tells us a little story about Pugnozzle Pete. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
Hi Craig. I would like to return your sixer to you for this charming write, but I can't as I'm out. My daughter had a pug, an adorable creature and funny. Of course, it was a heart breaker when he passed. Your poem, written in limerick series, fits the theme perfectly--amusing and unique, plus tells us a little story about Pugnozzle Pete. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks for the great review, Marilyn. Glad you enjoyed this silly little poem. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written science fiction story. We all sometimes wish we could fly instead of walking. I once found a bird in the suburban train. I guess he thought it was better to ride by train than to fly that day.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
A very well-written science fiction story. We all sometimes wish we could fly instead of walking. I once found a bird in the suburban train. I guess he thought it was better to ride by train than to fly that day.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Less effort, I guess, or maybe it was raining that day and he didn't want to get wet? Thanks for sharing, Sandra. Craig
Comment from Ogden
That's two in a row, Craig! (Unfortunately, I'm out of sixers.)
My compliments on your clever internal rhymes and excellent job overall (for Pete's sake).
There aren't many birds like Pete, so you're lucky that somebody happened to take a picture of one.
Keep up the good work!
Don
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
That's two in a row, Craig! (Unfortunately, I'm out of sixers.)
My compliments on your clever internal rhymes and excellent job overall (for Pete's sake).
There aren't many birds like Pete, so you're lucky that somebody happened to take a picture of one.
Keep up the good work!
Don
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much, Don. I appreciate the lovely comments - Craig
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You're very welcome, Craig.
Don
Comment from tfawcus
Some of these words are certainly testing your ingenuity! I guess that pugs do sound a bit like pigs, and so from that perspective, they might fly. Interesting how owners and their dogs sometimes look so similar. I'll keep a lookout for pugnozzling passers-by.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
Some of these words are certainly testing your ingenuity! I guess that pugs do sound a bit like pigs, and so from that perspective, they might fly. Interesting how owners and their dogs sometimes look so similar. I'll keep a lookout for pugnozzling passers-by.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Pugs can fly in New Zealand, of course. Thanks so much, Tony - Craig