Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Very clever Craig using 'quatorzain' to write a non sonnet. I'llhave to write this word in my memory bank for the free versers club sonnet challenge and pull it out if mine doesn't come up to scratch.
Glad I read this one, LOL
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 26-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Many thanks for the lovely review, Valda. I'll keep my eye out for your entry. Cheers, Craig

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Now that is a good word to know, "quatorzain (n.) a poem of fourteen lines which does not meet the form requirements of a sonnet." I think I have probably written a few of those. Never had a name for them. I believe they were written in Heptameter. LOL Very well done my friend. I do love the word and will try to use it when I write a heptameter or tetrameter sonnet. Nancy

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 20-May-2018

LOL Nancy. It sounds like a very potent prescription medication to me. Many thanks, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is a perfect sonnot, Craig as its metre's off a little, you have a wandering rhyme scheme, which is quite delightful as a bit of variety. The same old, same old gets really boring wouldn't you agree?

Excellent word and I can't wait to see what you come up with tonight.

Gloria

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 20-May-2018

Thanks, Gloria. That description could well apply to most of the poems I produce :) Much appreciated, as always.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written sonnot. Thank you, now I will know what to call my supposed to be sonnet. I will simply call them a quatorzain and no one can criticize my wannabe sonnet.

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 20-May-2018

LOL Sandra. That's the idea! I think quatorzain is French for "I messed up" :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Whimsical and entertaining wit here. I enjoyed it. Clever rhymes and fine flow too (except for one line, noted below). I enjoyed the satire in this. Fine presentation too.



NOTES *it's simple really, who declared it hard?

it's simple, really; who declared it hard?


This line has forced scansion:

I found my rhymes heading the other way,


Example fix:


I found my rhymes would head the other way,


*spag suggestion:
I found my rhymes heading the other way,(;)

my sonnet now no longer met the norm.



Love the clever rhyme and shift in scheme here:

Instead of rhyming in lines one and three,

my pattern soon became AABB;


*fun word play here:

and echoing the rule for two and four,

was simply found "to be" too hard a chore.


Clever closing:

A quatorzain it is, but it is not

a sonnet now; too bad, I've lost the plot!


Thanks for the chuckles,
rd


PS Great word!

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 20-May-2018

Thanks for the great review, RD. I have made the correction you suggested - much better :) Cheers, Craig

reply by rama devi on 21-May-2018

:-)))

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Hey, why can't you do AABB rhyming in sonnets? I thought that was a "thing" but maybe I've done a few quatorzains without realizing it. Nice job, Craig, I enjoyed this one :))
Carol

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

LOL maybe, Carol :) Thanks for the lovely review, glad you enjoyed it - Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig;

Your title tipped me off to the surprise I had in store. I laughed at the whole thing. The special touch was the picture of Shakespeare.

Well done,

patty

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

Thanks very much, Patty. It was fun to write :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I prefer the name you made up - the sonNOT. What a great way to explain it using an almost perfect sonnet and changing it purposefully to describe the quartorzain.

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

Thanks very much, Helen. Heck, making up new words seems to have been the flavour of the month for a while now - so why not? Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Good poem. You write Sonnots and I write Not-haibuns. I remember that 14 is quatorze in French so that is how the Quatorzain must have got its name. Amusing poem and a fun read. Marilyn

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

Thanks very much, Marilyn. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Cheers, Craig

Comment from F Scott Hafner

Excellent

Writing restricted by form hundreds of years old. How would Shakespeare have faired is he was restricted to such ancient form. But anything new happens only once in a very long while with no better convert than writing - But I enjoyed your work,

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

I enjoy making up my own forms, and do so fairly regularly; more often by accident than conscious effort. That said, I don't feel compelled to abandon established ones altogether. There's an old saying something along the lines of babies and bathwater. Thanks for the kind review - Craig