Too young to know
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Comment from Blue Hendrix
Wonderfully written poem. I loved the easy flow to this story in a poem which by the way I know is really difficult to accomplish as I started and have not finished as of yet. Lol. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Wonderfully written poem. I loved the easy flow to this story in a poem which by the way I know is really difficult to accomplish as I started and have not finished as of yet. Lol. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and it is great fun to have a go****kahpot
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You are very welcome
Comment from Kim Sealock
Again very well written. I like how your voice shows through this poem and creates the tone you were going for. I also love how you were able to create the voice in the poem and still be able to keep the rhyme scheme.
Good Luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Again very well written. I like how your voice shows through this poem and creates the tone you were going for. I also love how you were able to create the voice in the poem and still be able to keep the rhyme scheme.
Good Luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Wow! thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is yet again another well written poem. I like the story that you've shared of toiling and spinning, loss, and finding a better life. Thanks for sharing this personal story with us. Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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This is yet again another well written poem. I like the story that you've shared of toiling and spinning, loss, and finding a better life. Thanks for sharing this personal story with us. Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from donette1914
very sad and my heart truly went out to you. this touch my heart.
it was a honor to read your work!!!
thank you for sharing this well penned work donette1914 july 15 2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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very sad and my heart truly went out to you. this touch my heart.
it was a honor to read your work!!!
thank you for sharing this well penned work donette1914 july 15 2018
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for this excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Pantygynt
I knew excessive drinking could cause liver problems. i was not aware it could also damage the kidneys. Just as well we have two of these, but of course once you are one down there is only one to go. Sheep shearing is very tough on the back -- having to maintain that bent over position for hours on end and wrestlewith the recalcitrant ewes at the same time. That liquid anaesthetic comes at an expensive price. An excellent cautionary tale.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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I knew excessive drinking could cause liver problems. i was not aware it could also damage the kidneys. Just as well we have two of these, but of course once you are one down there is only one to go. Sheep shearing is very tough on the back -- having to maintain that bent over position for hours on end and wrestlewith the recalcitrant ewes at the same time. That liquid anaesthetic comes at an expensive price. An excellent cautionary tale.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Air Spirit
This is an interesting and personal poem, that tells of a story that I can relate to -- not the part about shearing sheep, but of drinking my life away --- that is some story about you trying to drink away your pain, and how it was literally taking away your life, bit by bit, piece by piece.. thank God that you found a healthier and happier path for you to travel... and still have a kidney left to spare... albeit one in which you are compromised, but one where you have gained knowledge and experience that get your through your days and now you have the precious gift of awareness... that kidney turned out to be your life-saver, and taught you lessons that will stay with you for the rest of your life... My favorite lines were "...to stand in life not bending down
viewing dreams so close to ground ..." which speaks to how you wanted to raise your sights, literally and figuratively to seek higher aspirations and goals -- and not keep your body and sights on lowly places... I was able to save my life too - , and stopped drinking 30 years ago, and never regret it for a minute.. even though my nights or days sometimes are pain-filled for several reasons and causes, at least I can actually remember what happened that day - regardless of what transpired in it --- but I lost so man years through black out drinking, all the time thinking it was saving me from pain, when it was just dousing me with a double-dose of it... but each day I am sober, I celebrate my life and sobriety -- for I am now an active participant, rather than a lonely spectator... Congratulations!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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This is an interesting and personal poem, that tells of a story that I can relate to -- not the part about shearing sheep, but of drinking my life away --- that is some story about you trying to drink away your pain, and how it was literally taking away your life, bit by bit, piece by piece.. thank God that you found a healthier and happier path for you to travel... and still have a kidney left to spare... albeit one in which you are compromised, but one where you have gained knowledge and experience that get your through your days and now you have the precious gift of awareness... that kidney turned out to be your life-saver, and taught you lessons that will stay with you for the rest of your life... My favorite lines were "...to stand in life not bending down
viewing dreams so close to ground ..." which speaks to how you wanted to raise your sights, literally and figuratively to seek higher aspirations and goals -- and not keep your body and sights on lowly places... I was able to save my life too - , and stopped drinking 30 years ago, and never regret it for a minute.. even though my nights or days sometimes are pain-filled for several reasons and causes, at least I can actually remember what happened that day - regardless of what transpired in it --- but I lost so man years through black out drinking, all the time thinking it was saving me from pain, when it was just dousing me with a double-dose of it... but each day I am sober, I celebrate my life and sobriety -- for I am now an active participant, rather than a lonely spectator... Congratulations!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review and for sharing that part of you, this is wonderfully encouraging and lets me know that all will be and is OK, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from AprilViolet
This is a very powerful poem. I am no stranger to addiction, it comes in so many forms. Food, alcohol, pills, etc but we all over indulge for the same reason. To kill a pain physical or mental. Of course this leads to more harm than good. I am glad you are doing better, it is a hard thing to overcome. Thank you so much for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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This is a very powerful poem. I am no stranger to addiction, it comes in so many forms. Food, alcohol, pills, etc but we all over indulge for the same reason. To kill a pain physical or mental. Of course this leads to more harm than good. I am glad you are doing better, it is a hard thing to overcome. Thank you so much for sharing
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much, this was some years ago and with help and some willpower I am very fine, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent. I enjoyed reading your well composed poem. Rhyming and story telling are super. Interesting and has a good message. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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This is excellent. I enjoyed reading your well composed poem. Rhyming and story telling are super. Interesting and has a good message. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your excellent review****kahpot
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"To young to know", is an exceptionally well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. At times we do some truly regrettable things. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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"To young to know", is an exceptionally well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. At times we do some truly regrettable things. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpoy
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*****Kahpot, as always, you're more than welcome.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good story in a poem. We all do foolish things like this and live to regret them. What we don't know can and will hurt us. I have diseases affecting many organs and body parts because I just didn't know what certain habits could do to the body. That should be taught in schools, I think.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Good story in a poem. We all do foolish things like this and live to regret them. What we don't know can and will hurt us. I have diseases affecting many organs and body parts because I just didn't know what certain habits could do to the body. That should be taught in schools, I think.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and yes a bit more education in schools would help many****kahpot
