Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

A very nice free verse based on the original love story of all times. Nicely done in keeping the content and displaying a true love content. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018

Thank you so much for the kind review and the wonderful stars.

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

Interesting twist on the beginning creation love story. Rhyme was good, pace and voice were steady, and presentation was good. I found no errors to note. Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Janelle

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018

Thank you. I am both honored and humbled by the rating as well as the review.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a nice contest entry, fm. You rhyme scheme is good and maintained well. Your words flow smoothly. I believe this could be current for many. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018

Thank you. I am blessed by the rating and your kind review.