Comment from --Turtle.

Exceptional

Great job with this poem. The tension rides the descriptive nature of the scene, painting a war - zone feel, the feedlust, mounting.

It all comes into view at the end, with a shift in understanding the war-zone is a first world war zone... the incivility of purchasing as much crap as one can. Nothing starts off the christmas spirit like trampling your fellow man in then name of 40% off.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Yes, it's crazy how insane people can become in their rush to buy stuff they don't need at half price. Many thanks for the glowing comments and delightful rating, Turtle :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh, I'm sorry that the dreaded American "Black Friday" contaminated your fair land. In fact, some stores have started their "Black Friday" a week earlier and people started Christmas decorating even on Remembrance Day. Commercialism is terrible. This year, they say that there have been more sales online instead of duking it out at the stores. We have gone shopping on Black Friday 36 years ago and never again.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018

We had our own, it's not as if we needed another one! We do a lot of our shopping online now. Not clothes or food, generally, but other things. Many thanks, Helen :)

Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

Another fantastic word, like the way you made it an acrostic (is that the right term?). I thought this might be about the riots in France, until I reached the end, and yes it's very applicable to the Black Friday madness. Well done again.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

Hi Emma, yes acrostic is the correct term. Many thanks for the great comments, I'm glad the end came as a bit of a surprise. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Vandemonianism is just one word so to break this up into stanzas would disrupt the acrostic flow of the poem.
Now, if this were three separate words then, yes, it should be broken up into three separate stanzas.
Not necessary here.
~Dean

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

Hi Dean,

Yes, that was my point exactly. Shakespeare also wrote Shakespearean sonnets in one contiguous block of 14 lines, but apparently that's not enough reason for some people to downgrade their rating if it isn't split up into chunks of 4 lines maximum. Thanks for reviewing.

reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Nov-2018

That's ridiculous, Craig.
I would ream someone's ass if they were to do that to me.
~Dean

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great acrostic for Black Friday, Craig. It sums up the whole mess perfectly. You are right. When these large groups congregate, they can, and many times do, start trouble over little things. Those 'things' to buy are not worth others losing their lives or getting hurt. I agree about your notes, too. I didn't go shopping then. Anything I want to buy, the store will have it later or I don't need it. Good job on the rhymes the presentation of the word that the acrostic is built from, and the overall message. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

Thanks so much, Jan. I appreciate the detailed and kind comments. Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Holy crow that's a heckuv a word, (it's got demon in it) but it certainly does describe a kind of behaviour folks are normally more inclined to hide on days where sales won't cause them to grab the device out of dear old granny's hands.

Excellent acrostic friend, Craig and sometimes it's the only thing that will do the job. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

Well, at least I didn't do an acrostic sonnet; unless trochaic meter counts. What's that? It does now? Yippee :)

Thanks so much, Gloria. Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Crazy isn't it? Black Friday is not something I participate in. I'm not a shopper anyway. Practically takes dynamite to get me to the store--LOL--when my pets need food is a valid excuse to go shopping. Your acrostic is well written about the fiasco of black Friday. Marilyn

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

I'm not much of a shopper either, to be honest. Thanks so much, Marilyn. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

Oh, you clever dog, you! Wooooo-ooooo-f! (I'm tired of writing the haha's, so...) *BIG GRIN* -- I really did think this was going to be a serious poem. (But then, I guess for those who get trampled on Black Friday, it IS!)

Superior in every way! You're amazing! This is NOT an easy form to rhyme and have it make sense, flow well, and entertain, but your does it in spades!

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

You mistook me for someone serious? Shame on you! lol

I hate shopping at the best of times. The "monster sale" crowds (very aptly named) would do me in.

Thanks so much for the wonderful encouragement and delightful rating, Dawn :)

Craig

reply by Dawn Munro on 25-Nov-2018

Most welcome. Always a pleasure!

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Wow! I am thoroughly impressed with your acrostic sonnet here, sir ... and I didn't even have trouble following the fourteen lines (hey, and I'm a blonde, so that's saying something!). :) ;) And you are right (if a bit 'over-the-top' -- lol!!), Black Friday shopping sux unless you do it online...too many rude jerks out! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

Online shopping has much to recommend it. As a former owner of a "bricks and mortar" retail store, it pretty much killed my business, but that's the way it goes; we can't turn back the hands on the clock of progress as they say (or if they don't I just did ;-) ). Many thanks for the lovely review, Yvette.

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Great job on this acrostic poem, Craig! Black Friday ... you're right! ... did we really need another day of shopping madness? "Infamous mayhem" ... luv this! Your title "Conduct Unbecoming" says it all. I never could understand how people can suffer the crowds or even line up for hours on end. I just wouldn't have the patience for it.

Your acrostic poem conveys the essence of 'vandemonianism' very well.

Cheers,
Connie

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018

Thanks for the wonderful comments, Connie. We need it like a hole in the head. Still, the retailers live for these days. But you won't catch me braving the hordes lol

Most grateful,
Craig