Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Okayyyyy. If your goal is to be read or otherwise heard, you must clearly speak a word. A word or thought clearly expressed need not be loud, but should be profoundly expressed. Otherwise it will sound like so much noise.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018

Thanks, nomi.

Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Bill,

I like the your 5-7-5 style. While I use the same, I am aware that more traditional Haiku writers have a nature theme and a satori line with their 17 syllable verse.

Regardless of our preferences, I like your blurring of goals/words imagery in this tight little verse, and a kind of rhyme with 'heard' and 'word(s)' - nicely done!

Mark

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018

Thanks, Mark.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Hi Bill,
Goals keep changing and often the line between needs and wants shifts too.
The fact that you have strung these words together in a coherent manner may
be just the thing someone needs to have a go for themselves.
OR... even to spark another bright idea in your own mind.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018

Thanks, Shirley

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Bill. This is an interesting one by you. It makes me ask what the goal is. To be read or to communicate? Sounds like it was written to be read or heard, but not worth reading. Thank you for sharing. I liked it. It made me ponder

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018

Writing is sometimes the only explanation.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Was this for the contest? I don't see the contest reference. Good job in creating a 5-7-5 monorhyme poem. And you covered the conflicting dilemmas about writing in the poem.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018

Simply not needed.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yeah?
I'm right there with ya, pal.
But, hey, at least you have goals.
That's more than I can claim for myself, lol.
Good stuff!
Have a very Scary Christmas.

~Dean

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018

Thanks, Dean, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well it might not be needed but it certainly is wanted. Rather an interesting little fiveseventyfive, but sometimes brevity is just the thing.

I like this one very much. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018

Thank you, Gloria, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

But, you made us read them anyway, Bill. Good job with your 575. It flows well and makes sense in a weird way. I enjoyed reading it, although I wasn't sure what it would be. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018

Thanks, Jan

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

I'm still trying to fiqure out my goals! I think maybe by the time retirement comes along I'll know what I "want to be" when I grow up. Great short poem, it always makes me smile. :)

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018

Thanks, BN

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very interesting poem with deep thought
very well done and putting words so believable and
you put so much work into this fine piece and it shows

donette1914 dec 5 2018

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018

very interesting review with deep thought
very well done and putting words so believable and
you put so much work into this fine review and it shows 🙂