Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

A cute picture you chose to accompany your poem. You really do a lot with clever word play like 5-heaven-5 and puppy in the title. Nice job. Good luck in the contest. Merry Christmas to you and your family.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018

Thanks, Earl

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Yo Bill, either I've had one shot too many or you just missed me on this one. I have no response to this because I just do not get any part of this. I probably should not be drinking shots of Brandy and trying to read and comprehend your poems, so put the blame on me completely.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018

My point is that these contests are typically won by cutesy poems about love and puppy dogs.

reply by nomi338 on 23-Dec-2018

Yeah, and why do you think that is?

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Okay, so this is a really funny swipe at the polls and such....even heard jokes about 'pulling the puppy card' .... Definitely entertaining! :) Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest, sir! Yvette

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

It?s only a contest if you?ve a chance to win.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yeah, that's about the gist of it, Bill.
Don't forget babbling brooks, rivulets of rain, risque romance and the elderly and aged.
But not I, no sir!
Gimme cemeteries crawling with crusty corpses, ghastly ghouls and gaunt ghosts.
I REFUSE to suck up to the masses and conform to normality.
That's why my funny money account is nearly empty, heh-heh.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

I am being ironic with this, of course, Dean.

reply by Dean Kuch on 22-Dec-2018

And I ain't?
Hahahaha...

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well Bill this is really very clever and particularly the last line that captures the five/seven/five in a rhyme with the missing seven from heaven made up with the too.

Very cool and I wish you much luck with the contest committee.

Gloria

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thanks, Gloria

Comment from Miss Sherry

Good

This is very clever. You have a penchant for variety in your work. Your grandchildren must love this haiku. It is very appealing and would make a great poster.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thanks, OP

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Don't forget current issues in which you take the politically correct position. Those subjects are what makes for success in the contest, that's for sure. Having a picture of a sweet baby or a homeless veteran gets the votes, too. In a contest I entered recently, a dogs and cats poem beat mine. You have the precise 5-7-5 syllables required for the contest. Good luck! judi

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thanks, Judi. I guess the little, old ladies who judge these like to stay close to the sentimental theme. That should be explained in the prompt: cutesy wootsy only

reply by judiverse on 22-Dec-2018

I think you've got it! That would make a good contest. Cutesy-wootsy poems only. judi

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This is very clever. Yes, the short forms--5-7-5's, lunes, and tankas
especially--are often about the topics you listed above. Sometimes
we get all of these in the same poem! :-)

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thanks, Janice.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

But you have to agree they are mostly positive unless you don't count the broken hearts, right? I enjoyed your 575 contest entry. Good job on the syllable count per line. Your picture is perfect for your fun words. I like the use of "Heaven' in line 3 where it should be seven. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thought I?d sneak a subliminal in there for the judges.