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Comment from Teresa Alford
If it looks like 6 words, sounds like 6 words and smells like 6 words, then it must be a 6-word poem. Other than a contest, where would a 6-word poem be used? Advertising? Thumbs up to you! TA ":~)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
If it looks like 6 words, sounds like 6 words and smells like 6 words, then it must be a 6-word poem. Other than a contest, where would a 6-word poem be used? Advertising? Thumbs up to you! TA ":~)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Yes to the contest and the ability to make a little say a lot. The exercise, I believe, is about word choice. Finding a word that replaces a sentence is sometimes important. Nowadays, online readers have a short attention span. Getting something said in five hundred words or less is simply preparing for the readership.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem and its attached artwork show that the letter 'f' has many important words that give our life and world meaning. I like the alliteration.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
This poem and its attached artwork show that the letter 'f' has many important words that give our life and world meaning. I like the alliteration.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Joan
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No problem, Bill.
Joan
Comment from nomi338
To my mind and in harmony with my experience, nothing forms a more lasting bond than shared trauma. Men who experience the threat of death from enemy fire directed in their direction will be forever bonded by surviving that shared experience. That is what I believe.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
To my mind and in harmony with my experience, nothing forms a more lasting bond than shared trauma. Men who experience the threat of death from enemy fire directed in their direction will be forever bonded by surviving that shared experience. That is what I believe.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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We few. We happy few. We band of brothers.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes, Virginia, alliteration is a thing - LOL! :) :) Love that you tied your write into a logo from the USMC -- no, I have no idea what emblem it is, only know that symbol in the middle. :) :) Chosen service - family ties for life. :) :) Wonderful! :) Best of luck in the contest! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
Yes, Virginia, alliteration is a thing - LOL! :) :) Love that you tied your write into a logo from the USMC -- no, I have no idea what emblem it is, only know that symbol in the middle. :) :) Chosen service - family ties for life. :) :) Wonderful! :) Best of luck in the contest! :) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Yvette
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Bill, I liked this six word poem a lot. You say it all in mere six words and you also manage to start all your six words with same letter. I am impressed. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
Wow, Bill, I liked this six word poem a lot. You say it all in mere six words and you also manage to start all your six words with same letter. I am impressed. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Ulla
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, if this isn't an old Marine Corps vets alliterative wet dream then I don't know what is, Bill.
Semper Fidelis, buddy.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
Well, if this isn't an old Marine Corps vets alliterative wet dream then I don't know what is, Bill.
Semper Fidelis, buddy.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Dean
Comment from Mark D. R.
Extra-ordinary! Terrific use of the f-letter starter.
Like the alliteratives for:
formed forge
freely friendships fraternity
Syllable count 2-1-2-1-1-4. It is unfortunate that 'fraternity' is in four syllables, but that is your choice. 'Firm' could be 'firmer' or 'firming' but methinks that does not work the same for this contest entry.
good luck
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
Extra-ordinary! Terrific use of the f-letter starter.
Like the alliteratives for:
formed forge
freely friendships fraternity
Syllable count 2-1-2-1-1-4. It is unfortunate that 'fraternity' is in four syllables, but that is your choice. 'Firm' could be 'firmer' or 'firming' but methinks that does not work the same for this contest entry.
good luck
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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I wasn?t concerned with syllables, Mark, but I see what you mean.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with the prompt, Bill. I like your formatting of the words and the great alliteration. Your words carry much meaning, too. Good job and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
You did a great job with the prompt, Bill. I like your formatting of the words and the great alliteration. Your words carry much meaning, too. Good job and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Jan
Comment from damommy
Quite an accomplishment to say all that in six words, and they all start with the same letter. Very clever. Good luck in the contest. Love the emblem.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
Quite an accomplishment to say all that in six words, and they all start with the same letter. Very clever. Good luck in the contest. Love the emblem.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks, da
Comment from judiverse
Very attractive presentation. I like your use of alliteration. Will the gals consider it sexist that you use the word "fraternity"? In the military, soldiers definitely are thrown together and know they have to stick together. Those friendships may last forever. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
Very attractive presentation. I like your use of alliteration. Will the gals consider it sexist that you use the word "fraternity"? In the military, soldiers definitely are thrown together and know they have to stick together. Those friendships may last forever. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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In my military everyone with a commission is called Sir. No one disputes it or protests it. Fraternity is the sense, not the sex.
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Just wondering. You know how overly sensitive the politically correct crowd can be. judi