Kalinka's Last Bloom
A story about love in all its aspects.28 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
LIJJ,
A sweet little story where everything ends well and just at the right time. It was still a pleasure to read and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you so much. I look forward to more!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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LIJJ,
A sweet little story where everything ends well and just at the right time. It was still a pleasure to read and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you so much. I look forward to more!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks Robyn. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from LIJ Red
A jam jar? Good Lord. Don't like this story(kidding) because I am 74 and have a small lame dog I am racing to the pearly gates...I suppose there are good kids out there but I haven't met any lately....excellent post.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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A jam jar? Good Lord. Don't like this story(kidding) because I am 74 and have a small lame dog I am racing to the pearly gates...I suppose there are good kids out there but I haven't met any lately....excellent post.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you Red.
I am Dr Who fan. He is is a Timelord who travels in the Tardis. Bigger on the inside than the outside. I just twisted things a bit.
Comment from dmt1967
'Jack (heard) could hear them chatting excitedly.' (delete)
The first part was very repetitive but I liked the ending and the middle grabbed my attention. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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'Jack (heard) could hear them chatting excitedly.' (delete)
The first part was very repetitive but I liked the ending and the middle grabbed my attention. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks for your feedback DMT.. Much appreciated I deleted the extraneous word.
Comment from AdaJulie
Great story, very well written.
Couple of suggestion, bench is used repetiviely. I wonder if there is another word that you could use as well.
four-legged needs a hyphen.
Great job, I look forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Great story, very well written.
Couple of suggestion, bench is used repetiviely. I wonder if there is another word that you could use as well.
four-legged needs a hyphen.
Great job, I look forward to reading more!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you Ada for pointing these things out. I was really surprised when I found so many references to bench in this piece. It is amazing the things right in front of our faces that we fail to see. I made some changes based on observations. Thank you much.
Comment from meeshu
an absolutely wonderful story, but it makes me cry too much. the way you tell it , it is so full of joy. you are a great storyteller, plain and simple. well done, Lordinajamjar.....................meeshu
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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an absolutely wonderful story, but it makes me cry too much. the way you tell it , it is so full of joy. you are a great storyteller, plain and simple. well done, Lordinajamjar.....................meeshu
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Oh thank you Meeshu. Thats high praise indeed from you. I am very humbled. I am a newbie just signed up a few days ago but I am so impressed by the quality if the writers here. Not just their body of work but their wonderful supporting attitudes. Thank you.
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welcome to you, Lord. I think you will find a great deal of support here and a lot of talent. we all enjoy helping each other improve our "quill skill".
Comment from tfawcus
A fine tale of love on three different levels, beautifully intertwined in your telling. Since other reviewers have already commented on sentence structure and punctuation, I'll not repeat their advice. This truly is a diamond in the rough - a remarkably well-wrought tale. I hope to have the privilege of reading more of your work in due course.
Perhaps you have a tale to explain your interesting pen name?
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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A fine tale of love on three different levels, beautifully intertwined in your telling. Since other reviewers have already commented on sentence structure and punctuation, I'll not repeat their advice. This truly is a diamond in the rough - a remarkably well-wrought tale. I hope to have the privilege of reading more of your work in due course.
Perhaps you have a tale to explain your interesting pen name?
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank tfawvus I really do appreciate your generous comments. I am a Dr Who fan. Lordinajamjar is just a corruption of the Time Lord in his Tardis.
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, it's such a bittersweet tale. Although they find each other they still lose the man that brought them together. I read your story with great interest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Hi there, it's such a bittersweet tale. Although they find each other they still lose the man that brought them together. I read your story with great interest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you Ulla. I am grateful for your review. As a newbie I still have much to learn here. I plan to review the works of as many of these fine writers. Including yourself asap.
Comment from Artasylum
LORDINAJAMJAR
I love the sensibilities of the words you seem to pluck carefully from your interesting slant on life... you have a style that sticks out and I look forward to more from you... yours, diana
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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LORDINAJAMJAR
I love the sensibilities of the words you seem to pluck carefully from your interesting slant on life... you have a style that sticks out and I look forward to more from you... yours, diana
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you Diana. Your words are very gracious and mean a lot. I do plan to write much more but before that I shall be making time to review other writers work including yourself. I cannot believe how many review I have received and I want to respond to each and everyone before setting out on what is going to be beautiful journey reviewing prose.
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a beautiful and sad story you wrote. I gave you a 6 because it touched me and I didn't find one thing out of place. Your characters and dialogue are excellent. Needless to say, I love the storyline even if it is sad. Have a blessed evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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What a beautiful and sad story you wrote. I gave you a 6 because it touched me and I didn't find one thing out of place. Your characters and dialogue are excellent. Needless to say, I love the storyline even if it is sad. Have a blessed evening. Shirley
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Shirley thank you so much. I am very grateful for your most generous support and delighted that my little story moved you. Sorry it made you cry.
Comment from Sanku
This is a touching story. I have not come across your writing before. But I am glad I found this one. Incorporating the lilac bush was a stroke of genius.Symbolic of nature reflecting our emotions or closely associated with our feelings
Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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This is a touching story. I have not come across your writing before. But I am glad I found this one. Incorporating the lilac bush was a stroke of genius.Symbolic of nature reflecting our emotions or closely associated with our feelings
Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Sanku you are very observant. Not many would catch the link to the Lilac. I am a newbie just 4 days now I think. Thank you so much for your support.