A Pyramid Upended
If pharaohs lived Down Under18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem gives a funny image. I would truly be a feat of construction to have a pyramid stand on its point. The poem also describes the nonet.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Keep writing
~Joan
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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This poem gives a funny image. I would truly be a feat of construction to have a pyramid stand on its point. The poem also describes the nonet.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Keep writing
~Joan
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Hi Joan, thanks for your review and good wishes.. Yes, it would truly be a feat of engineering.
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No problem, Lisa
Joan
Comment from JanPerry
This is good and the layout is just like the pyramid.
So either the Australians are so dense the pyramid would be upside down, or because it's on the other side of the planet to Egypt the pyramid would be upside down.
It's very cute but doesn't have a point and the point is not clear.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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This is good and the layout is just like the pyramid.
So either the Australians are so dense the pyramid would be upside down, or because it's on the other side of the planet to Egypt the pyramid would be upside down.
It's very cute but doesn't have a point and the point is not clear.
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Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Thanks for your interesting review. I am an Aussie, and yes we can be a bit dense sometimes. The point is, this is a joke. Of course a pyramid would not be built like that.
I see you are living in Tassie. That must be lovely. I lived there for a while and enjoyed it very much. I hope you like it too! Best wishes.
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I realise it's not real. Just trying to get the reason for it that's all.
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Imagination run amok is all.
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Ok thanks
Comment from Rmocruz
A very clever concept, to turn it topsy turvy.
You have effectively enforced your intended message
with colorful wordplay
Enjoyable and well crafted overall.
Congratulations!
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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A very clever concept, to turn it topsy turvy.
You have effectively enforced your intended message
with colorful wordplay
Enjoyable and well crafted overall.
Congratulations!
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you very much. We stand on our heads a lot down here.
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You're welcome Lisa!
My pleasure.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is very unexpected and clever. Congrats on your well deserved win!
Like the Egyptians, you constructed in a unique way, to make a point. Great writing:)
Tina
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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This is very unexpected and clever. Congrats on your well deserved win!
Like the Egyptians, you constructed in a unique way, to make a point. Great writing:)
Tina
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thanks so much for this complimentary review. Much appreciated!
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You are welcome! :)
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I couldn't help myself, lol.
have a great week!
Tina
Comment from Debra White
Hi LisaMay :)
This is really clever!
I love how it reads and I love how it looks - so creative and striking.
Good luck in the contest.
Sending you my best wishes, as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Hi LisaMay :)
This is really clever!
I love how it reads and I love how it looks - so creative and striking.
Good luck in the contest.
Sending you my best wishes, as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your good wishes Debra. I appreciate your reviews.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Scientists and archeologists world-wide agree that the pyramids could not have possibly be constructed from ground level alone.
Overhead assistance would have been necessary.
Pyramids are symmetrically perfect on all three sides, and no matter how skilled the Egyptian or Mayan stone cutters might have been, without a view from overhead their construction would be an impossibility as they exist.
Which begs the question.
Who and what was doing the flying and how did they accomplish this?
Food for thought...
~Dean
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Scientists and archeologists world-wide agree that the pyramids could not have possibly be constructed from ground level alone.
Overhead assistance would have been necessary.
Pyramids are symmetrically perfect on all three sides, and no matter how skilled the Egyptian or Mayan stone cutters might have been, without a view from overhead their construction would be an impossibility as they exist.
Which begs the question.
Who and what was doing the flying and how did they accomplish this?
Food for thought...
~Dean
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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I have long been intrigued by the accuracy of architecture in ancient civilizations. Thanks for reinforcing that this intrigues others too.
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My pleasure as always, Lisa.
Take care.
~Dean
Comment from Joan E.
What an intriguing title and reinforcing picture! I relished your use of the Nonet shape to parallel the theme. Best wishes in the contest. Brava! -Joan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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What an intriguing title and reinforcing picture! I relished your use of the Nonet shape to parallel the theme. Best wishes in the contest. Brava! -Joan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reviewing and your good wishes Joan. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from poetwatch
Hold on to the sharp tip cause if it tilts it will fall Lisa. :) This is a good Nonet. I don't believe anyone has though to use the pyramids as an upside down poem or Nonet. This is a good entry for the Nonet Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Hold on to the sharp tip cause if it tilts it will fall Lisa. :) This is a good Nonet. I don't believe anyone has though to use the pyramids as an upside down poem or Nonet. This is a good entry for the Nonet Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your positive comments of support and generous review. Let's hope my nonet stays balanced long enough!
Comment from lyenochka
Perfectly formatted, LisaMay! And I love your humor about the pyramids. My friend in New Zealand gave me a cloth map of the world which put the northern hemisphere in the bottom. I liked that perspective!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Perfectly formatted, LisaMay! And I love your humor about the pyramids. My friend in New Zealand gave me a cloth map of the world which put the northern hemisphere in the bottom. I liked that perspective!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your comments Helen. We don't really think of ourselves as Down Under... it's you guys who are Up Over!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I love this clever write with the pyramid turned upside down! A spinning top now instead Lisa! I wish you luck with this nonet, I liked your style here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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He he he, I love this clever write with the pyramid turned upside down! A spinning top now instead Lisa! I wish you luck with this nonet, I liked your style here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thanks Dolly. And I did it without 10,000 slaves and labourers!
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He he he x x x