Framed
A mystery poem with a lesson19 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems she is in jail for a crime she didn't commit. The wife most probably killed him so she could marry the sheriff who put the wrong
person in jail so he could be happy. It seems the jailed innocent has realized revenge isn't worth the loss of her son's soul. She is content
in the fact that she now has a happy son and grandson.
Keep writing
Joan
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It seems she is in jail for a crime she didn't commit. The wife most probably killed him so she could marry the sheriff who put the wrong
person in jail so he could be happy. It seems the jailed innocent has realized revenge isn't worth the loss of her son's soul. She is content
in the fact that she now has a happy son and grandson.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Pam. An interesting poem on crime, being falsely accused, and railroaded into jail. Well done for topic. I do agree that we must enjoy each minute we have. Best to you. Marilyn
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Hi Pam. An interesting poem on crime, being falsely accused, and railroaded into jail. Well done for topic. I do agree that we must enjoy each minute we have. Best to you. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
Comment from Michele Harber
Pam, you know how much I've always admired your longer story poems, and this didn't disappoint. You told a full story with a good deal of detail, from the victim's spittle to the grandson's suntan. You made a good use of metaphor ("poisoned waters," "fermented stew"). I'm glad that, after the venom she'd spewed, the main character took the high road and put her son's freedom and the chance to see her grandson, ahead of her vengeance. Overall, you've told your story very well, using proper meter and rhyme. All I can say is I'm glad I'm not up against this in a Tell a Story in a Poem contest!
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Pam, you know how much I've always admired your longer story poems, and this didn't disappoint. You told a full story with a good deal of detail, from the victim's spittle to the grandson's suntan. You made a good use of metaphor ("poisoned waters," "fermented stew"). I'm glad that, after the venom she'd spewed, the main character took the high road and put her son's freedom and the chance to see her grandson, ahead of her vengeance. Overall, you've told your story very well, using proper meter and rhyme. All I can say is I'm glad I'm not up against this in a Tell a Story in a Poem contest!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
Comment from susand3022
Hi Pam, I really like this a lot. :) It's a great story. It's really harsh for her that she wasn't at fault for the crime that she was pretty much tricked into committing, but it's great that she found a way to forgive the people that she figured set her up to do the deed. Forgiveness really is the key to an easier life. When you carry all that hate in you it takes a terrible toll, not only on you but on those around you as well. A good story in a poem. :)
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Hi Pam, I really like this a lot. :) It's a great story. It's really harsh for her that she wasn't at fault for the crime that she was pretty much tricked into committing, but it's great that she found a way to forgive the people that she figured set her up to do the deed. Forgiveness really is the key to an easier life. When you carry all that hate in you it takes a terrible toll, not only on you but on those around you as well. A good story in a poem. :)
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting story, Pam. It's true that thirst for vengeance would just eat us up and give us no relief even if we got it. But I wondered why the narrator would jeopardize the son's life to execute his revenge. It's good that it all changed in seeing the grandson. Perhaps seeing the resemblance of father and son gave him an idea to have the DNA tested and maybe exonerate this wrongfully incarcerated person?
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Interesting story, Pam. It's true that thirst for vengeance would just eat us up and give us no relief even if we got it. But I wondered why the narrator would jeopardize the son's life to execute his revenge. It's good that it all changed in seeing the grandson. Perhaps seeing the resemblance of father and son gave him an idea to have the DNA tested and maybe exonerate this wrongfully incarcerated person?
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
Comment from kahpot
Wow! there is a very powerful story and message in this wonderful poem, indeed revenge only creates more revenge and suffering for the innocent, an excellent read, very well done****kahpot
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Wow! there is a very powerful story and message in this wonderful poem, indeed revenge only creates more revenge and suffering for the innocent, an excellent read, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
Comment from karenina
Excellent tale of horror and hunger for revenge! This is SO far afield from your usual posts I had to stop and be sure it was indeed YOU I was reading! Your meter and rhyme are excellent and this poem read smoothly as a determined march down the stairs of injustice... Life isn't always fair. Sometimes the innocent pay and the guilty dance away. This (fictional?) tale makes that very clear...and your wisdom...that the hate for the perpetrators, in the end, will eat YOU up...and they won't be affected.
Awesome way to show that other side of your talent!--Karenina
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Excellent tale of horror and hunger for revenge! This is SO far afield from your usual posts I had to stop and be sure it was indeed YOU I was reading! Your meter and rhyme are excellent and this poem read smoothly as a determined march down the stairs of injustice... Life isn't always fair. Sometimes the innocent pay and the guilty dance away. This (fictional?) tale makes that very clear...and your wisdom...that the hate for the perpetrators, in the end, will eat YOU up...and they won't be affected.
Awesome way to show that other side of your talent!--Karenina
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
Comment from Sugarray77
This is very well written, Pam. The gory photo sets this up nicely and the intensity is supported by the dwelling on revenge. I am glad to see that you chose to turn it around and the main character let the vengeance go. Well done!!
Melissa
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This is very well written, Pam. The gory photo sets this up nicely and the intensity is supported by the dwelling on revenge. I am glad to see that you chose to turn it around and the main character let the vengeance go. Well done!!
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a crime that was unintentionally and the one is inprisoned for the rest of her life, to take revenge will ruin another one's life and it is really not worth that.
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A very well-written poem about a crime that was unintentionally and the one is inprisoned for the rest of her life, to take revenge will ruin another one's life and it is really not worth that.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
Comment from Bill Schott
This mystery poem, Framed, follows a crime, a miscarriage of justice, a plan for revenge, a second thought and finally resolve. I thought perhaps she'd employ the grandson #someday to take the Woman Out. ,
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This mystery poem, Framed, follows a crime, a miscarriage of justice, a plan for revenge, a second thought and finally resolve. I thought perhaps she'd employ the grandson #someday to take the Woman Out. ,
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019