Comment from --Turtle.

Exceptional

Hi, Craig
Super job with this poem, sorry I'm so late to reviewing it, but I'm glad I found it still in my inbox.

The tight condensed imagery of this poem is pretty on the tongue, as well as the eyes and mind. I like that the Ulysses plays nicely off of the rhapsody, with they type of butterfly, the emotion, and the epic poem, as that's where my mind went to as I've never heard of the song, but the song has a fluttery sound to it, so also adds to the flavor of the image.

Pretty neat effect, and gives a lot of angles to enjoy.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019

You'd probably recognise the music if you heard it, Turtle, even if you don't know it by name :) Many thanks for a very generous, kind, and as always, thoughtful review. It's always good to hear from you, even though neither of us are as active here as we were.

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from catch22

Excellent

Hi Craig, I love butterfly gardening and I can truly appreciate the sensual and primal nature of the feeding act between a butterfly and a nectar source. Cool poem with a great end line and nod to the aforementioned themes.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019

Thanks so much for the great review, Pam. Would you believe I had to look up "butterfly gardening" to make sure of what it meant? My guess proved right :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

That is the prettiest butterfly that I have ever seen. Mountain Blue--what a nice name. And the Callistemon is spectacular. I have never seen a bottle brush shrub. The entire post is colorful and well done. I'm glad that I read it.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

Thanks so much for the lovely comments, Debbie. The bottlebrush is, indeed, a lovely bush. Very popular with all manner of insects, too :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

I truly enjoy poems that teach me things I didn't know before. You are quite good at that sort of poem, I've noticed. I was familiar with the bottle brush plant because we had lots of them in Arizona, but never knew they were from Australia or that they were called Callistemon. Then there's that beautiful blue butterfly. I've never seen anything like that! But, back to the poem ... so nicely done because you didn't just divide a sentence into 5-7-5 syllables. It is more true to the haiku form with the concrete images and the "punch line" in the closing. I liked this very much. I hope it gets a prize.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

I'm glad you noticed it was a haiku, MM. I'm hoping just because it isn't a haiku contest, doesn't mean it's not permitted -- otherwise I wasted my time, and would have been better off saving it for that lol
It's still a 5-7-5, so fingers crossed.

Thanks for the generous rating, and the lovely comments. You really are most kind.

Craig

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

I like the clever use of classical references that adds a twist to your butterfly poem.

The satori style third line is also layered. Butterfly jazzed on nectar.

Great entry in the contest. Good luck!

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

You not only got what I was saying, Julia, but the unspoken intent as well. Thanks for a very perceptive and kind review, and the good wishes.

Craig

reply by juliaSjames on 18-Jun-2019

You're welcome, Craig. I love butterflies and bottlebrushes ... and tongue in cheek writes :-))

Julia

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your contest entry, Craig. Your picture choice is beautiful. Good job with the syllable count per line. Your words are precise and create great imagery. I have never seen this super butterfly. But where I live we don't have many--just some Monarchs when they pass through coming or going for Spring or Winter homes. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019

Thanks for the kind wishes and lovely comments, Jan. Monarchs are lovely as well, and I'm sure you have other species equally as wondrous. Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

There is a lot more to this lovely little write than might meet the eye. He gets drunk on the mountains and then starts playing rhapsody in blue.

Very nicely written, Craig and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019

Thanks so much, Gloria. Your good luck wishes mean a lot, as do the lovely comments and, of course, the delightful rating. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

I loved this wee poem. It's well written and have some great images. Wonderful, even. It's a lovely entry for the 5-7-5 poetry contest, and I wish you the best of luck. All best Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019

Thanks so much, Ulla. Lovely to hear from you, and I'm grateful for the delightful comments. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the beautiful mountain blue butterfly also called the Ulysses found in Northern Queensland, Australia. A very beautiful photo to complement your poem.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019

Thanks so much, Sandra. Much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image
and presentation, Craig.
-Your notes are appreciated,
as I learned something about
this particular butterfly.
-The syllable count is good,
and the poem paints a vivid
word picture of the scene.
-The last line is very
satori like, and a good
ending for the poem.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019

Thanks so much, Pam. I appreciate the thoughtful and detailed comments. and the good wishes. Craig

reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Jun-2019

You are very welcome, Craig.