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Zegel Poem without the Letter A11 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I really love the title, artwork and subject of your poem. The overall presentation is beautiful.
You met the contest requirements of not using any 'A's'.
Zegel Poem: what is the meaning here? I'm interested. Please forgive my ignorance.
It appears you've written each line in 8 syllables, with the following rhyme scheme: aaa, bbba, ccca, ddda. Is this correct. It read so smoothly and was really beautiful.
This is a great contest entry, and I wish you the very best!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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I really love the title, artwork and subject of your poem. The overall presentation is beautiful.
You met the contest requirements of not using any 'A's'.
Zegel Poem: what is the meaning here? I'm interested. Please forgive my ignorance.
It appears you've written each line in 8 syllables, with the following rhyme scheme: aaa, bbba, ccca, ddda. Is this correct. It read so smoothly and was really beautiful.
This is a great contest entry, and I wish you the very best!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouraging feedback! Here are the guidelines for the zegel format. Try it!
The zejel, pronounced SAY-hell, is a Spanish verse form, and it was made popular by the Andalusian poet Ibn Quzman.
-Thanks to Y.M. Roger for sharing her poem and information about this form.
Her poem is called "Surrender Not the Light" and can be found in her portfolio.
-This is information and criteria from her author notes:
-The zejel is a very old Spanish poetic form that is also likely an even older Arabic poetic form with an origination date somewhere between the ninth and eleventh centuries.
-Here are the basic rules for the zejel:
-First verse is a tercet with a 3 line stanza and an AAA rhyme scheme
-All other verses are quatrains of 4 line stanzas with an XXXA rhyme scheme, so the second stanza would be BBBA, third CCCA, fourth DDDA, and so on to the end of the poem...meaning the poem can continue with as many quatrains as you like.
-Lines are usually 8 syllables long .
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is always funny to me that human's when faced with choice have a difficult decision, yet nature makes decisions daily without thinking, fine words here, great flow, loving the sentiments and you get my vote, well done for not using the letter "a" love Dolly s
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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It is always funny to me that human's when faced with choice have a difficult decision, yet nature makes decisions daily without thinking, fine words here, great flow, loving the sentiments and you get my vote, well done for not using the letter "a" love Dolly s
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you for sharing your lovely sentiments and positive feedback!
Comment from LisaMay
This is a lovely poem embracing sunny-side-up of positivity. Isn't it an interesting challenge to choose words without the letter 'a'.. just shows it is possible to sustain lines without it, but quite a task. You have done well with the contest prompt.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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This is a lovely poem embracing sunny-side-up of positivity. Isn't it an interesting challenge to choose words without the letter 'a'.. just shows it is possible to sustain lines without it, but quite a task. You have done well with the contest prompt.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you fir your positive comments!
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a very encouraging poem of perseverance and not giving up or giving in. It flows and rhymes nicely. The only problem is that you used an "a" in the last line of the third verse. You can fix that easily by changing "high and low" to "high then low." Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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This is a very encouraging poem of perseverance and not giving up or giving in. It flows and rhymes nicely. The only problem is that you used an "a" in the last line of the third verse. You can fix that easily by changing "high and low" to "high then low." Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for noticing the a. I copied and pasted the wrong draft! I appreciate your review and heads up.
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I'm happy to help. Somebody did the same for me on my entry, and I'm just paying it forward. There are actually several poems that used the letter "a," so I guess you and I are just not that original. (LOL) Good luck in the contest.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your Zegel poem is outstanding. I like the form. Your poem makes sense and is worded perfectly for theme. A fine entry for the contest. Yes, going with the flow is the best way to go. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Your Zegel poem is outstanding. I like the form. Your poem makes sense and is worded perfectly for theme. A fine entry for the contest. Yes, going with the flow is the best way to go. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you your lovely sentiments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Maintain the flow of life through committed spirit, life's journey is enlightening when you ignore the frightening to see it ever brightening; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Maintain the flow of life through committed spirit, life's journey is enlightening when you ignore the frightening to see it ever brightening; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from shaffer40
Wow. I looked at that prompt and thought, "How can one create a writing without the letter "A"? Well, you have done so, and the result is concise, makes sense, and is a lovely poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Wow. I looked at that prompt and thought, "How can one create a writing without the letter "A"? Well, you have done so, and the result is concise, makes sense, and is a lovely poem. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I appreciate your stopping by to read and share your sentiments!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Such a challenge to write a poem without the letter "a"! But you've done it ably. I like the sense of perspective this poem suggests without preaching. I like the lines "The river running through our lives/does not determine who survives." If you re-read your last line, I think you want a period at the end and not a comma. That's the only fix I saw. Nice job.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Such a challenge to write a poem without the letter "a"! But you've done it ably. I like the sense of perspective this poem suggests without preaching. I like the lines "The river running through our lives/does not determine who survives." If you re-read your last line, I think you want a period at the end and not a comma. That's the only fix I saw. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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These old eyes and fingers sometimes can't tell the difference between a comma and a period! thanks for the kind review and heads up!
Comment from kahpot
Very clever, you have nailed the prompt with an excellent Zegel poem, love the artwork, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Very clever, you have nailed the prompt with an excellent Zegel poem, love the artwork, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouraging feedback!
Comment from Janetsue
This is a very clever work and a lot of talent is shown through writing something so difficult to construct. The rhyme is very good and the message is supportive of those seeking to understand more about themselves in order to develop a positive sense of self, be productive, and move ahead.
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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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This is a very clever work and a lot of talent is shown through writing something so difficult to construct. The rhyme is very good and the message is supportive of those seeking to understand more about themselves in order to develop a positive sense of self, be productive, and move ahead.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insightful comments!
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You're very welcome!