The Ghost of Reader's Mill
A Constanza for Potlatch Poetry24 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a superb job with this challenge, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading your constanza. Great job with the style, the rhymes, the awesome eerie picture, and the story told both in the verses and the first lines of each verse as a story. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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You did a superb job with this challenge, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading your constanza. Great job with the style, the rhymes, the awesome eerie picture, and the story told both in the verses and the first lines of each verse as a story. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 02-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review!
Comment from JP49
I'm still shivering after reading this wonderful poem. So descriptive.
A story within itself.
Would the word 'that' be better than 'the' in befell the night? Just a thought.Super poem. Well done for encapsulating such danger in so few words.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019
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I'm still shivering after reading this wonderful poem. So descriptive.
A story within itself.
Would the word 'that' be better than 'the' in befell the night? Just a thought.Super poem. Well done for encapsulating such danger in so few words.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019
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I'm happy that it gave you the shivers. That was my intention. Thank you so much for reviewing.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Ooh your first lines make for a spinechilling read Yvonne, and the Constanza as a whole read adds to the ghostly thrill. Loved this one, great topic for this Halloween week.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Ooh your first lines make for a spinechilling read Yvonne, and the Constanza as a whole read adds to the ghostly thrill. Loved this one, great topic for this Halloween week.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Thank you. I'm glad you thought it spooky.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, I came in far too late for this but I wanted to comment on your poem. I really liked it. it's beautifully written and I also like the form. Your poem has great imagery. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Hi Yvonne, I came in far too late for this but I wanted to comment on your poem. I really liked it. it's beautifully written and I also like the form. Your poem has great imagery. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, Ulla. I appreciate this.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I really like this form and the poems that have been written with it. I hope to try one soon. A great contribution to the potlatch, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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I really like this form and the poems that have been written with it. I hope to try one soon. A great contribution to the potlatch, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 28-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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Oh, do try it, Debbie. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne. This is another new style for me to consider and you made it look easy. The story held my attention very well. It is a good read. In my opinion, EVERY poem has to tell a story and this one does well. Robert
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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Hello Yvonne. This is another new style for me to consider and you made it look easy. The story held my attention very well. It is a good read. In my opinion, EVERY poem has to tell a story and this one does well. Robert
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Robert. Do try one. It was harder than I thought. At least, for me it was.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Damommy,
I do think these poems are so clever. It is not easy to write two poems in one with a specific rhyme pattern. I think you nailed this one. I like the presentation too.
Well done.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Hi Damommy,
I do think these poems are so clever. It is not easy to write two poems in one with a specific rhyme pattern. I think you nailed this one. I like the presentation too.
Well done.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for saying that. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
The Constanza is a very appealing style, and you have used it well to tell this story. It is a creative piece, spooky but conveying a powerful message
about how things can get out of hand.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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The Constanza is a very appealing style, and you have used it well to tell this story. It is a creative piece, spooky but conveying a powerful message
about how things can get out of hand.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Good job in keeping the stanza and rhyming requirements I must confess I can't write something like this. I think the element that you choose for this task, the old mill, fulfilled your intentions splendidly.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Good job in keeping the stanza and rhyming requirements I must confess I can't write something like this. I think the element that you choose for this task, the old mill, fulfilled your intentions splendidly.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this. I'm sure you can write one, too.
Comment from l.raven
HI Yvonne, I have never heard of this form...
but I do like it...it has a good rhythm to it...
and I love your story told...my husband passed loved walking around cemeteries...in fact that was our first date...thought that would be our last date...but it was truly very interesting...very well written my sweet friend...and I love your picture...love your poem...and love you....Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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HI Yvonne, I have never heard of this form...
but I do like it...it has a good rhythm to it...
and I love your story told...my husband passed loved walking around cemeteries...in fact that was our first date...thought that would be our last date...but it was truly very interesting...very well written my sweet friend...and I love your picture...love your poem...and love you....Linda xxoo
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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I love walking in cemeteries, too. Years ago, my youngest son and I did some tombstone rubbings. Very interesting.
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LOL...we never did that...but I saw some very interesting tomb stones...Al Capone...and a circus train that had crashed...there were a lot of animals and children that died...and they were all there...an area of their own...the tomb stones were
elephants...and balloons of cement...I cried...