The Piper
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16 total reviews
Comment from May 1
It's so sad that such a special tree was destroyed in the wars. That's such a beautiful, yet sad story. Wow, the connection they share is so special, I love it.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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It's so sad that such a special tree was destroyed in the wars. That's such a beautiful, yet sad story. Wow, the connection they share is so special, I love it.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Hi May 1,
Yes, war destroys many beautiful things. Sadly, the mage trees no longer exist. The mage flute is all that is left.
Thank you for letting me know your reaction to the connection they share. I appreciate it.
Debi
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Very nice indeed. The section where Piper plays, the feelings and reaction of the flute are very well realised indeed. We get to now more of his heritage. Loved this.
G
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Hi there,
Very nice indeed. The section where Piper plays, the feelings and reaction of the flute are very well realised indeed. We get to now more of his heritage. Loved this.
G
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Wow! Thank you for the nice shiny six stars, G. I appreciate the comments about the section where Piper plays the Mage Flute, and your encouragement.
Debi
Comment from Spitfire
Master Crescendo --LOL perfect name. I love the metaphysical approach of nature communicating with these elves and fairies. Excellent use of detail to make this world come alive.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Master Crescendo --LOL perfect name. I love the metaphysical approach of nature communicating with these elves and fairies. Excellent use of detail to make this world come alive.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Shari. I appreciate you taking the time to read my work and for your encouraging comments. Have a Merry Christmas and the best holidays you can. Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I can't say enough good things about this chapter, Debi.
-It is excellent, and one of your best.
-There is so much heart in this one.
-I have been skeptical of Piper being related to Red-Leiff,
and his motives, but in this chapter, anyway, you have
established the connection with Melodica
and given us some insight into Piper's grandfather.
-I was glad to see him mentioned again; he
was such a kind, peaceful man that Piper loved deeply.
-The description of the whole scene as M.C. examines
the fife and begins to explain about it, and then Melodica
wanting to tell the story is so well written.
-Then, you top it off with Piper's magical, beautiful
playing that has Melodica and M.C. enthralled,
as well as Piper himself.
-He has never heard anything so beautiful,
and feels so connected to his grandfather.
-I loved this chapter; it will be interesting
to see where you take it from here.
-Have a wonderful holiday season, and
a very Happy New Year, my friend.
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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-I can't say enough good things about this chapter, Debi.
-It is excellent, and one of your best.
-There is so much heart in this one.
-I have been skeptical of Piper being related to Red-Leiff,
and his motives, but in this chapter, anyway, you have
established the connection with Melodica
and given us some insight into Piper's grandfather.
-I was glad to see him mentioned again; he
was such a kind, peaceful man that Piper loved deeply.
-The description of the whole scene as M.C. examines
the fife and begins to explain about it, and then Melodica
wanting to tell the story is so well written.
-Then, you top it off with Piper's magical, beautiful
playing that has Melodica and M.C. enthralled,
as well as Piper himself.
-He has never heard anything so beautiful,
and feels so connected to his grandfather.
-I loved this chapter; it will be interesting
to see where you take it from here.
-Have a wonderful holiday season, and
a very Happy New Year, my friend.
[Glitterfy.com - *Glitter Photos*]
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Pam,
Oh, you spoil me with all the kind comments, and the beautiful six stars. I love that you are so into the story that you are skeptical of some characters and happy to see others reappear. I love that you shortened Master Crescendo to MC. It fits so well. I got teary when I was writing this chapter--especially the death of the mage tree--so it good to know some of the emotion came through. I feared it was too long, it is nearly 1400 words, but I couldn't see where to divide it or how to cut it any more.
Thank you, thank you for the encouraging remarks. They mean so much.
Have a Merry Christmas and enjoy the holidays to their fullest.
Debi
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You are very welcome and deserving, Debi. I appreciate your reply very much, and am so glad that my comments are meaningful to you.
I type all of my reviews and replies, so I didn't feel like writing out M.C.'s full name. Glad you liked it:) I don't like to see trees disappear or die, either, and Piper's love of the fife and his grandfather was very touching.
Comment from juliaSjames
Everyone stays seated, except Melodica, when Piper arrives with the Mage Flute. In my mind's eye I pictured the group crowding around Piper. At the very least, I think Lynx would have rushed over - until called away.
I enjoyed the history of the Mage trees and the fact that musical instruments were made from the heart wood of the last tree. Is there a reason that you haven't shared the physical descriptions, except that the Mage Flute is a fife. Is the wood black like ebony, since one of the names is Black Forest fife?
In general, this is a striking chapter. The magical power of the Mage Flute is vividly shown through the tingling effect on Piper as it allows him to channel its music.
Excellent last sentence where he reaches for his own familiar flute for comfort and grounding after the mystical experience.
Now that he has successfully claimed his musical and magical birthright, I am anxious to read what happens next in Piper's new world which is really his home.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Everyone stays seated, except Melodica, when Piper arrives with the Mage Flute. In my mind's eye I pictured the group crowding around Piper. At the very least, I think Lynx would have rushed over - until called away.
I enjoyed the history of the Mage trees and the fact that musical instruments were made from the heart wood of the last tree. Is there a reason that you haven't shared the physical descriptions, except that the Mage Flute is a fife. Is the wood black like ebony, since one of the names is Black Forest fife?
In general, this is a striking chapter. The magical power of the Mage Flute is vividly shown through the tingling effect on Piper as it allows him to channel its music.
Excellent last sentence where he reaches for his own familiar flute for comfort and grounding after the mystical experience.
Now that he has successfully claimed his musical and magical birthright, I am anxious to read what happens next in Piper's new world which is really his home.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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HI Julia,
Thank you for an excellent review and for your insights. I love how you are into the story and have your ideas on how the characters should behave. Thank you for sharing. I pictured them sitting on the edge of their chairs, but you're right, Lynx might have trouble sitting still. LOL
About the flute and type of wood--I haven't emphasized this, but I am locating this story in thirteenth century Germany in the region of Hanover and Hamelin. The Black Forest is a real forest in Germany and near the location where Piper grows up in the story, so the fife is named for the location not the type of wood that the flute is made of. During this time period the modern flute did not exist as we know it and similar instruments could have been called pipes or flutes. Fife was a term used during this time, also sometimes referred to as a small flute in many cases. I am imagining Piper's main flute was actually a block-flute or what we now know as a recorder, but there were many types during this time. I hope to have him play the double flute at some point as it was popular during this period of time. I did mention in one chapter a while back that Piper's main flute is a rosewood flute. I am imagining the mage tree wood is similar since rosewood is often used for instruments because it produces such a nice sound. I am not certain there was a "Castle Welf", but the Welf family controlled much of the area where this story takes place and had several castles throughout portions of Germany during the Middle Ages. Sometimes they even swapped castles depending on needs and preferences of the family so an uncle might swap with a nephew or cousins might swap regions and relocate, etc.
I plan to share some of this historical background in the notes at the end of the book.
Sorry for the long answer. Maybe it was more background than you wanted to know.
I love that you caught exactly what I was going for in the last sentence! Thank you so much for letting me know.
Debi
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Thank you, Debi. Writing can be a lonely craft, I know how good it feels to share thoughts with a fellow writer.
Blessings Julia
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, how wonderful!! Okay, so I'm more than a little late to the party, but I'm gonna let your summary and my 'fantasy-girl' imagination fill in the details. but I'm in! ;) :) Your description of the connection between the flute and piper really brings home the depth of it... so, then the mind wanders to what strife might ensue if Piper wishes to return... Okay, so I won't go there for now, gonna just enjoy the ride! :) Thanx for sharing and I look forward to the next installment... :) :) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Oh, how wonderful!! Okay, so I'm more than a little late to the party, but I'm gonna let your summary and my 'fantasy-girl' imagination fill in the details. but I'm in! ;) :) Your description of the connection between the flute and piper really brings home the depth of it... so, then the mind wanders to what strife might ensue if Piper wishes to return... Okay, so I won't go there for now, gonna just enjoy the ride! :) Thanx for sharing and I look forward to the next installment... :) :) Yvette :)
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi Yvette,
What a fun review! I really enjoy your personality. I love that the story raised a question or two... guess we'll see.
Thank you so much for taking a chance on this one. I appreciate the encouraging comments.
Debi
Comment from LeannaP
Thank you for posting.
You write well.
I liked the fact that you wrote each character indefinitely.
It was an easy read.
Each character was developed.
It sad how she was an orphan in the beginning.
Excellent work.
I look forward to reading more.
Leanna
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Thank you for posting.
You write well.
I liked the fact that you wrote each character indefinitely.
It was an easy read.
Each character was developed.
It sad how she was an orphan in the beginning.
Excellent work.
I look forward to reading more.
Leanna
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi Leanna,
Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate the kind comments and encouragement.
Debi
Comment from RShipp
This is, by far, the bast chapter to date.
I loved the intensity of the 'speaking' of the flute and I could feel the passions of the
king and Queen as the flute was being played.
Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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This is, by far, the bast chapter to date.
I loved the intensity of the 'speaking' of the flute and I could feel the passions of the
king and Queen as the flute was being played.
Well done.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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What a nice things to say. I am happy to hear you enjoyed this chapter, especially the playing of the flute.
Have a Merry Christmas.
Debi
Comment from JudyE
I really enjoyed reading about Piper and the Mage fife. You've described the scene really well.
Just one small suggestion: I would delete 'of' in the following. 'Off of' sounds a bit clumsy and there is no need for the 'of'.
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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I really enjoyed reading about Piper and the Mage fife. You've described the scene really well.
Just one small suggestion: I would delete 'of' in the following. 'Off of' sounds a bit clumsy and there is no need for the 'of'.
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 19-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Hi Judy,
Thank you for the wonderful six stars and for the suggestion. I'll take a look at it. Thanks so much.
Debi
Comment from dkblack
I liked the part where he played the fife and it was a "note, sweeter than he'd ever heard", and that he was not just hearing it but feeling it. How special that would be! Another great chapter!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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I liked the part where he played the fife and it was a "note, sweeter than he'd ever heard", and that he was not just hearing it but feeling it. How special that would be! Another great chapter!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Hi Dana,
Thank you for the generous six stars, and for the gracious comments. I appreciate you pointing out what you liked. It helps to know what works.
Debi