Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Falling Jewels"Musings of an old man -2020
37 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Nicely done with this Candlelight poetry form JLR. Lovely descriptions using the jewels as the stars that glow in the night sky. Enjoyed it,
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Nicely done with this Candlelight poetry form JLR. Lovely descriptions using the jewels as the stars that glow in the night sky. Enjoyed it,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Valda, thank you very much!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Jim. This is a really nicely composed poem in the candlelight form. But it's not the form that works so well, it's your word choices that make the piece, especially the last line. Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Hi Jim. This is a really nicely composed poem in the candlelight form. But it's not the form that works so well, it's your word choices that make the piece, especially the last line. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Marilyn, I agree not my favorite style.
Comment from tfawcus
Interesting use of this form. The stem of the candlestick suggests the falling of the star(s). However, there seems to be some confusion in the number as the poem progresses. You start with several stars but in these lines they are reduced to 'each one':
each
one
shine(s)
glow(s)
gleam(s)
flare(s)
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Interesting use of this form. The stem of the candlestick suggests the falling of the star(s). However, there seems to be some confusion in the number as the poem progresses. You start with several stars but in these lines they are reduced to 'each one':
each
one
shine(s)
glow(s)
gleam(s)
flare(s)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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I had it both ways I shouldn?t react to every comment I liked the ?s. Thank you!
Comment from Gloria ....
I've read a couple of these candlelight poems and I bet they are more difficult to write than they appear to be. Short forms are most deceiving that way.
That said, your poem is shaped nicely and just as important filled with vibrant verbs and nouns to create fine imagery.
Very nicely written, J.
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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I've read a couple of these candlelight poems and I bet they are more difficult to write than they appear to be. Short forms are most deceiving that way.
That said, your poem is shaped nicely and just as important filled with vibrant verbs and nouns to create fine imagery.
Very nicely written, J.
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Gloria thank you!
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
This is a most difficult rhyming scheme and syllabic count, but you mastered it well in your verse. The subject matter and photographic image are also well selected. Good luck in the contest... ...ec
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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This is a most difficult rhyming scheme and syllabic count, but you mastered it well in your verse. The subject matter and photographic image are also well selected. Good luck in the contest... ...ec
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Elaine I am in deep gratitude for your six-star review! Merry Christmas...
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You're very welcome... ...ec
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautiful presentation and unique in its formatting. I have seen many falling stars in my almost 82 years of life.
May you have a blessed and joyful Christmas.
Patricia
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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This is a beautiful presentation and unique in its formatting. I have seen many falling stars in my almost 82 years of life.
May you have a blessed and joyful Christmas.
Patricia
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Patricia, thank you reviewing and commenting on my poem, Merry Christmas!
Comment from Janet Foor
Well.....I don't think I can count the falling stars I've seen but most of them have been a long time ago when children were young and we spent evening outside. Now...where we live there are so many neighborhood lights that I doubt many of those around us have ever seen one.
Very nicely done and Merry Christmas
Blessings and thanks for the reminder of simpler times.
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Well.....I don't think I can count the falling stars I've seen but most of them have been a long time ago when children were young and we spent evening outside. Now...where we live there are so many neighborhood lights that I doubt many of those around us have ever seen one.
Very nicely done and Merry Christmas
Blessings and thanks for the reminder of simpler times.
Janet
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Janet, thank you reviewing and commenting on my poem, Merry Christmas!
Comment from Bichon
Such a beautiful poem. I can't say that I've seen many falling stars, but reading your poem makes me want to see some! I loved the ending line too " But the stars that fall go dark."
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Such a beautiful poem. I can't say that I've seen many falling stars, but reading your poem makes me want to see some! I loved the ending line too " But the stars that fall go dark."
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Thank you for reviewing and commenting on my poem. Have a fantastic Christmas week!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought all the gems to our eyes with your candlelight poem here. Stars hold such magical mystery for us because they make us feel part of the universe and this can be euphoric, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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You brought all the gems to our eyes with your candlelight poem here. Stars hold such magical mystery for us because they make us feel part of the universe and this can be euphoric, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Dolly, as always, I delight in your review and comments.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
A wonderfully expressive poem with delightful visuals and fabulous accompanying art choice. I enjoyed the specific gems you named the stars and then the ending was really a nice punch. Made me go: "Wow. Surprise" So well crafted.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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A wonderfully expressive poem with delightful visuals and fabulous accompanying art choice. I enjoyed the specific gems you named the stars and then the ending was really a nice punch. Made me go: "Wow. Surprise" So well crafted.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your review and comments.