Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Will my legacy be undone?"Musings of an old man -2020
34 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This kyrielle, Will My Legacy Be Undone, has the proper formatting, with repeating lines and notes the souls need to leave something behind that is important and motivates others to emulate its good model.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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This kyrielle, Will My Legacy Be Undone, has the proper formatting, with repeating lines and notes the souls need to leave something behind that is important and motivates others to emulate its good model.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Bill, thank you
Comment from angel123
Your poem is interesting and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well also with an interesting message and a good artwork choice. I like your repeating sentence and I agree that what's said can never be unspoken. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Your poem is interesting and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well also with an interesting message and a good artwork choice. I like your repeating sentence and I agree that what's said can never be unspoken. Best wishes!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is true, once the words are out, they stay out, and whoever heard, cannot un-hear them. This is a good lesson in thinking before speaking, it can save a lot of hurt and anger. Well done, I enjoyed and agreed with your poem. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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That is true, once the words are out, they stay out, and whoever heard, cannot un-hear them. This is a good lesson in thinking before speaking, it can save a lot of hurt and anger. Well done, I enjoyed and agreed with your poem. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Sandra, thank you for reading, reviewing and commenting on my poem!
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well written kyrielle about the importance of watching what you say. Our elders need to read this poem. Your syllable count and meter is correct. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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This is a well written kyrielle about the importance of watching what you say. Our elders need to read this poem. Your syllable count and meter is correct. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thanks for the review and comments!
Comment from Bobby Jo
Isn't this the truth our youngest have no bones yet can kill the heart, our actions we do too can't be undone. Please pray for everyone for healing throughjesus. Amen
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Isn't this the truth our youngest have no bones yet can kill the heart, our actions we do too can't be undone. Please pray for everyone for healing throughjesus. Amen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thanks for the review and comments!
Comment from jenintorre
'What's said can never be unspoke'. I love that, it is so true and thought provoking.
A really great kyrielle poem. I wish you lots of luck in the co petition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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'What's said can never be unspoke'. I love that, it is so true and thought provoking.
A really great kyrielle poem. I wish you lots of luck in the co petition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thanks much, Jen!
Comment from Lulube
Terrific rhyming and great imagery. Like the repetitive last line that has the wisdom but unspoken. Be careful what you say, it can't be undone and go away. good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Terrific rhyming and great imagery. Like the repetitive last line that has the wisdom but unspoken. Be careful what you say, it can't be undone and go away. good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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I can't express my sincere gratitude for your six-star review enough, Thank you will have to suffice.
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Your poem is an excellent contest entry and the picture perfectly illustrates it. A lone speaker at the microphone. You should do very well in the voting booth.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Your poem is an excellent contest entry and the picture perfectly illustrates it. A lone speaker at the microphone. You should do very well in the voting booth.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Thomas your comment are a win in and of them self, thank you!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The start of the poem establishes the mode and rhythm of the entire team: "Pondering values left for them,
the obligations to make good
in trusting the words that were spun.
What said can never be unspoke!" and the end ;"
So, reflecting, one does later
reclaim hope, with strong conviction!
One led them with an open heart,
what's said can never be unspoke! " Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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The start of the poem establishes the mode and rhythm of the entire team: "Pondering values left for them,
the obligations to make good
in trusting the words that were spun.
What said can never be unspoke!" and the end ;"
So, reflecting, one does later
reclaim hope, with strong conviction!
One led them with an open heart,
what's said can never be unspoke! " Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Iza, yes! You summarized it with precision!
Comment from J.T. Blossom
You need a space between never and be in the third stanza. Yes, what we write for commercial reasons can cross that line of integrity into regret. Having given up trying to make a living through writing, I personally feel free now to write what I will never regret. It's a good feeling.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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You need a space between never and be in the third stanza. Yes, what we write for commercial reasons can cross that line of integrity into regret. Having given up trying to make a living through writing, I personally feel free now to write what I will never regret. It's a good feeling.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Thanks for catching the gremlin.