Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Spinning, Twisting, Turning"Musings of an old man -2020
25 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This abstract art poem, Spinning Twisting Turning, captures the essence above, around, beside, beneath, and inside the of the artist's concept.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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This abstract art poem, Spinning Twisting Turning, captures the essence above, around, beside, beneath, and inside the of the artist's concept.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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Bill, thank you!
Comment from zanya
Yes it's interesting - the questions posed here in this Abstract Art poem - we are social beings essentially and having quite similar experiences on life's journey - though we can so often feel isolated and alone
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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Yes it's interesting - the questions posed here in this Abstract Art poem - we are social beings essentially and having quite similar experiences on life's journey - though we can so often feel isolated and alone
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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Zanya, thank you fro your review and comments
Comment from Alchera
This humans enigmatic dolorous subject treated has been well written, set and counted within its three questioning rhymed stanzaic structural format throughout its daily polluted questioning and unanswerable narrative storylined content. A good work and I liked it but the answer, my friend, is still blowing in the wind.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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This humans enigmatic dolorous subject treated has been well written, set and counted within its three questioning rhymed stanzaic structural format throughout its daily polluted questioning and unanswerable narrative storylined content. A good work and I liked it but the answer, my friend, is still blowing in the wind.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
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Alchera, and yes the mystery is that is still blowing in the wind...and sometime we are downwind of the dung heap more than not.
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You are always welcomed and blessing from Italy!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, I think what you say is correct. In our lowest moments we all do feel that way. But we are all individuals and all of the things you mention are unique to each of us. We think, feel and see the same things but differently. Your poem is well written and makes the reader think which is good. I enjoyed your work and wish you Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Hello anon, I think what you say is correct. In our lowest moments we all do feel that way. But we are all individuals and all of the things you mention are unique to each of us. We think, feel and see the same things but differently. Your poem is well written and makes the reader think which is good. I enjoyed your work and wish you Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Dorothy, thank you for the validation and good wishes.
Comment from rjuselius
This is a fine piece of poetry dear anonymous! I love the juxtaposition between elements.
Bravo my friend!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a humongous hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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This is a fine piece of poetry dear anonymous! I love the juxtaposition between elements.
Bravo my friend!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a humongous hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Rebekka, I delight in your validation, thank you!
Comment from Darlene Franklin
What form is t his? (is it a form?) I like it very much, the changes you make between each stanza, until at least you're inside the globe and things are different. I love the word usage in that last stanza. swirl/twirl. wobble/hobble. and the asonance of spinning, twisting, which leaves the tongue feeling the twist.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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What form is t his? (is it a form?) I like it very much, the changes you make between each stanza, until at least you're inside the globe and things are different. I love the word usage in that last stanza. swirl/twirl. wobble/hobble. and the asonance of spinning, twisting, which leaves the tongue feeling the twist.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Hi Darlene, this is a poetic style my own design,
A modifying refrain, following by a repeated refrain, coupled with a/a/a/a/ stanza
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Those self-designed ones can be the best!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like the carousel of life, the merry-go-round that keeps on moving and we never get off if until we die, the battle continues and we call it life. There is fun in between though, I enjoyed your description of this fine art, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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This sounds like the carousel of life, the merry-go-round that keeps on moving and we never get off if until we die, the battle continues and we call it life. There is fun in between though, I enjoyed your description of this fine art, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Dolly I am very appreciative of your review and comments.
Comment from estory
I think this poem has above average musical and rhythmic elements and that's why i'm giving it a six. I love that 'Spinning, twisting, turning globe' line, and the repetitions, with slight alterations, create this great minimalistic effect of gradual change or a of a top spinning in one place. I loved the last stanza too; that was the most musical one of them all. the top spins on and on and on. There's a good theme here too; that none of us is really that special, that we all have to deal with these struggle of life on this spinning globe of ours. estory
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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I think this poem has above average musical and rhythmic elements and that's why i'm giving it a six. I love that 'Spinning, twisting, turning globe' line, and the repetitions, with slight alterations, create this great minimalistic effect of gradual change or a of a top spinning in one place. I loved the last stanza too; that was the most musical one of them all. the top spins on and on and on. There's a good theme here too; that none of us is really that special, that we all have to deal with these struggle of life on this spinning globe of ours. estory
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Estory, I am truly honored by your validation and six-star review.
Comment from Gail Denham
Good one for the twirling art work. I didn't know where to find these abstract pieces to write to - I guess just from fanstory art - but how to make them come alone - oh well - you did a great job. I like the repetition of the first line.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Good one for the twirling art work. I didn't know where to find these abstract pieces to write to - I guess just from fanstory art - but how to make them come alone - oh well - you did a great job. I like the repetition of the first line.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Gail, I am very appreciative of your comments and validation on the repeating lines.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I very much liked the way you wrote this poem, taking us through all sides of the spinning, twisting, turning, globe. Thinking we are the only one who is going through all that. Well done, this is an excellent abstract art poem. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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I very much liked the way you wrote this poem, taking us through all sides of the spinning, twisting, turning, globe. Thinking we are the only one who is going through all that. Well done, this is an excellent abstract art poem. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Sandra, I value your review and comments. FanArt offers such content rich selections. It is always a pleasure to explore an offering to marry with words.