Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Dreams Unfold"Musings of an old man -2020
39 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
I like how you took me on an expansive and vivid journey through the constellations, but my soul had to settle somewhere. A future? My soul, my Eden someday. It always amazes me how such clever poetry can be done with rules or various types of poetry. Bravo.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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I like how you took me on an expansive and vivid journey through the constellations, but my soul had to settle somewhere. A future? My soul, my Eden someday. It always amazes me how such clever poetry can be done with rules or various types of poetry. Bravo.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Forest, my sincere thank you!
Comment from Benny Beeharry
HI I wish I could be contained within the four walls of measured poetry. I am a free verse writer. I still dreams and mind combine to produce a lively write.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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HI I wish I could be contained within the four walls of measured poetry. I am a free verse writer. I still dreams and mind combine to produce a lively write.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Benny, I prefer free verse, without the boundaries. But I do like to test my mettle from time to time.
Comment from Kaneh Bosem
Great Poem! This must have really been challenging. To write with such a limited amount of syllables and have to repeat particular lines. Then on top of that, to have it rhyme and make sense! Well done and Thank you.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Great Poem! This must have really been challenging. To write with such a limited amount of syllables and have to repeat particular lines. Then on top of that, to have it rhyme and make sense! Well done and Thank you.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Kaneh, thank you for your review and comments
Comment from Patty Palmer
The magical belief as children we wish upon a star hoping our dreams will come true. Or star light, star bright, first star I see tonight, I wish I may I wish I might have the wish I wish tonight.
I enjoyed your poem!
Patty
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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The magical belief as children we wish upon a star hoping our dreams will come true. Or star light, star bright, first star I see tonight, I wish I may I wish I might have the wish I wish tonight.
I enjoyed your poem!
Patty
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Patty, thank you for your review and comments
Comment from Therese Caron
You did a great job on this new style of poem. I absolutely love the line. A sprinkling of stardust healing life's scars. Outstanding. The entire poem is beautiful but that one line really resonated with me. You also picked a beautiful image to complement your words. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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You did a great job on this new style of poem. I absolutely love the line. A sprinkling of stardust healing life's scars. Outstanding. The entire poem is beautiful but that one line really resonated with me. You also picked a beautiful image to complement your words. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I can not thank you enough for your validating my work,
Comment from flylikeaneagle
JLR: I like the triolet format and the harvest of hopes and dreams.
I think we could all use some healing star dust. I can see us walking
together in Eden's Garden (my garden is covered with snow.)
Great control on the rhymes and alliteration. I love walking and looking
up at the stars. Congrats on #4 poet stats. ***************
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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JLR: I like the triolet format and the harvest of hopes and dreams.
I think we could all use some healing star dust. I can see us walking
together in Eden's Garden (my garden is covered with snow.)
Great control on the rhymes and alliteration. I love walking and looking
up at the stars. Congrats on #4 poet stats. ***************
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I am so full of gratitude for your reviews and comments. The extra bonus of your six-star review is so validating, thank you!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a striking write in adherence to the form, but I found that the presentation was more memorable for its inference linking science and theology, even briefly, because I believe the two corroborate each other, always- a winning write indeed...
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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In my opinion, a striking write in adherence to the form, but I found that the presentation was more memorable for its inference linking science and theology, even briefly, because I believe the two corroborate each other, always- a winning write indeed...
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Eve, I do appreciate your connection with my dream poem. Your six-star review is does make me smile!
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You are very welcome, JLR, my pleasure...Eve
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I liked your poem a lot and the sentiment of it. Where I'm going to be a poor reviewer, is that I don't know tetrameter from pentameter. I don't know what any of it means. I only know whether I like a poem or not. And I liked yours. It had great imagery. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Hi there, I liked your poem a lot and the sentiment of it. Where I'm going to be a poor reviewer, is that I don't know tetrameter from pentameter. I don't know what any of it means. I only know whether I like a poem or not. And I liked yours. It had great imagery. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Ulla, thank you! I believe that poetry, while in its truest form has all these rules and restrictions, if a peom is read and it speaks to someone then the poet truly was guided by deep sources to deliver the words. So, I am then pleased that you did like this!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The first repeating line is really lovely. Dreams unfold casting nets at distant stars, is a wonderful visual. Following that with your second line, it really works well. A sprinkling of stardust healing life's scars, another beautiful visual. In fact your whole poem is a treat to read. Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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The first repeating line is really lovely. Dreams unfold casting nets at distant stars, is a wonderful visual. Following that with your second line, it really works well. A sprinkling of stardust healing life's scars, another beautiful visual. In fact your whole poem is a treat to read. Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Sandra, I do value your review and comments, thank you!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi JLR, this is a lovely triolet with good use of metaphor in every line. Your repeated lines fall seamlessly into place and the whole is a well written piece of work with a lovely picture and overall display. Well done on your first triolet. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Hi JLR, this is a lovely triolet with good use of metaphor in every line. Your repeated lines fall seamlessly into place and the whole is a well written piece of work with a lovely picture and overall display. Well done on your first triolet. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Dorothy, I can not express my gratitude enough for your validation and kind comments.