Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a beautiful poem! It appears to have been penned with great feeling and faith. Free verse was written extremely well. Thank you for sharing! God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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This is a beautiful poem! It appears to have been penned with great feeling and faith. Free verse was written extremely well. Thank you for sharing! God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Patty thank you very much for the these six-stars. I am very appreciative of your validation of this work.
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Thank you for sharing this poem. It begins with a sense of desperation " gripping tight-fisted to the handrail of life," but ends with the clarion call from above to "just believe" and, there is the simplicity of Salvation offered to mankind by God in John 3:16 "For God so loved the World that he gave his only begotten son that whosoever believes in him shall not parish but have everlasting life." Just believe. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you for sharing this poem. It begins with a sense of desperation " gripping tight-fisted to the handrail of life," but ends with the clarion call from above to "just believe" and, there is the simplicity of Salvation offered to mankind by God in John 3:16 "For God so loved the World that he gave his only begotten son that whosoever believes in him shall not parish but have everlasting life." Just believe. Well done.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Frank you, the message is then loud and clear, we are never alone, we just, at times, close our hearts to the one and All Almighty. Rest In Peace this Memorial weekend.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
This is a very beautifully crafted free verse poem, that uses skilful metaphor, fabulous phrasing, and excellent presentation. My favourite was your first three lines:
Caught in the ink-black undertow of living
just one wrong step away
from a deepening abyss,
"the ink-black undertow of living" - really paints a sombre picture of how life can bog a person down in the depths.
Thank you for sharing xoxox
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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This is a very beautifully crafted free verse poem, that uses skilful metaphor, fabulous phrasing, and excellent presentation. My favourite was your first three lines:
Caught in the ink-black undertow of living
just one wrong step away
from a deepening abyss,
"the ink-black undertow of living" - really paints a sombre picture of how life can bog a person down in the depths.
Thank you for sharing xoxox
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Gypsycatmoon thank you for your review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, The Whisper of Words, works through the dark images of confusion and searching....
"living just one wrong step away from a deepening abyss,
gripping tight-fisted to the handrail of life"
...to the clearing and brightening of hope and faith.
"before my bleary tear sodden eyes, catching a slowly glowing, whiteness that is near blinding in its intensity,
there"
Nicely worded poem.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This free verse, The Whisper of Words, works through the dark images of confusion and searching....
"living just one wrong step away from a deepening abyss,
gripping tight-fisted to the handrail of life"
...to the clearing and brightening of hope and faith.
"before my bleary tear sodden eyes, catching a slowly glowing, whiteness that is near blinding in its intensity,
there"
Nicely worded poem.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Bill, thank you, I very much appreciate your positive validation on this poem.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so good,Jim. The rolling movement is so well written that it sets the whole piece into motion. I loved it in class and I doubly love this free verse now. So well done!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This is so good,Jim. The rolling movement is so well written that it sets the whole piece into motion. I loved it in class and I doubly love this free verse now. So well done!!
Melissa
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Hi my friend, I am so grateful for your comments but I felt this such a stronger poem with the wonderful input form all. Without any pressure would you be willing to look at a sonnet or two and give me your suggestions I struggle so much....?
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Hi Jim. I would be happy to look over your sonnets. :). Just let me know... or email them to me... your choice.
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You are simply the best... I will push email to you Big Virtual Hug!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a wonderful tribute to your classmates! You must have had such a lot of fun on-line talking and swapping ideas and Jim did a fine job teaching you all. I enjoyed your free-write, this seems to be an area where you excel in poetry and I enjoyed every word here and I loved your conclusion, always believe in yourself, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This is a wonderful tribute to your classmates! You must have had such a lot of fun on-line talking and swapping ideas and Jim did a fine job teaching you all. I enjoyed your free-write, this seems to be an area where you excel in poetry and I enjoyed every word here and I loved your conclusion, always believe in yourself, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Yes, in every aspect of the experience, including many first time zoomers. Yes too, free verse seems very natural too me. Thank you so very however, for your patient support band efforts in my desire to grow.
Comment from lyenochka
This is truly a beautiful free verse poem, JLR. I loved the ethereal feel the one step on earth and the other in the next world feel.
And I'm so glad to see you have made some wonderful friends in your poetry class!
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This is truly a beautiful free verse poem, JLR. I loved the ethereal feel the one step on earth and the other in the next world feel.
And I'm so glad to see you have made some wonderful friends in your poetry class!
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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lyenochka, thank you everyday is a banquet! Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your evocative poem especially during these challenging times. I particularly admired your title and "handrail" metaphor, plus ultimately finding hope in just believing. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you for your evocative poem especially during these challenging times. I particularly admired your title and "handrail" metaphor, plus ultimately finding hope in just believing. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Joan, thank you very much for this very validating review.
Comment from amada
This is a beautiful free verse poem. It gives freedom to the flow of your thoughts, so poeticallyh written, and therefore, so well felt in this heart that things a lot, of things above my comprehension.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This is a beautiful free verse poem. It gives freedom to the flow of your thoughts, so poeticallyh written, and therefore, so well felt in this heart that things a lot, of things above my comprehension.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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amada, thank you so much for your honest reflection.
Comment from qinluo
Brave , remind me the balance tendent to rage flowing or marble in the fossa of heart .Digging into the iron with the rust , the bell of belif ring during the dark , as the root of trees nail into the ground ,strand of light shine into the crack of egg that gloogy color cover the rainbow below .
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Brave , remind me the balance tendent to rage flowing or marble in the fossa of heart .Digging into the iron with the rust , the bell of belif ring during the dark , as the root of trees nail into the ground ,strand of light shine into the crack of egg that gloogy color cover the rainbow below .
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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qinlou, thank you for your reflections on this free verse poem.