Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Run or Walk"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your recognition for this whimsical poem--unusual form--striking presentation! Glad I caught up to this. I quit running recently! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Congrats on your recognition for this whimsical poem--unusual form--striking presentation! Glad I caught up to this. I quit running recently! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you Liz!
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Interesting poem and a very interesting format--one I hadn't heard of before and I love the visual it creates! "Walk,/walk slow,/a snail's pace/would be the trick!/simply slithering, dithering along." One suggestion, the title--should it be separated by a single period or perhaps three ellipses? The two periods does not seem correct. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Interesting poem and a very interesting format--one I hadn't heard of before and I love the visual it creates! "Walk,/walk slow,/a snail's pace/would be the trick!/simply slithering, dithering along." One suggestion, the title--should it be separated by a single period or perhaps three ellipses? The two periods does not seem correct. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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You are so correct! Thank you for your comment and I made a change.
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting and thought-provoking poem, well written in a complex but effective style, the two aspects being perfectly juxtaposed. Good wishes for the 20 Line poem contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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An interesting and thought-provoking poem, well written in a complex but effective style, the two aspects being perfectly juxtaposed. Good wishes for the 20 Line poem contest.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you Wendy, I have learned I see more, do more by walking more often...
Comment from Susan Larson
Wow! Doing the math for all those verses would have me plodding around for years! Very interesting poem and it looks like you took your own advice at the end: take the time...all you need!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Wow! Doing the math for all those verses would have me plodding around for years! Very interesting poem and it looks like you took your own advice at the end: take the time...all you need!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Susan thank you~
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, an unusual twenty lines but well written within the requirements of the contest. The two parts - Run - run hard, and Walk - walk slow are two extremes. There is a happy medium LOL! But room for whatever you want to do - that is if you have all the time in the world. Particularly clever layout - well done. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Hello JLR, an unusual twenty lines but well written within the requirements of the contest. The two parts - Run - run hard, and Walk - walk slow are two extremes. There is a happy medium LOL! But room for whatever you want to do - that is if you have all the time in the world. Particularly clever layout - well done. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thanks a bunch!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This contest entry is unique. I like the way you have formatted your lines based on the requirements of the contest. Your image is a great pairing. Your lines read well with some internal rhyming. Your words create great imagery. I like the message of your poem, too.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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This contest entry is unique. I like the way you have formatted your lines based on the requirements of the contest. Your image is a great pairing. Your lines read well with some internal rhyming. Your words create great imagery. I like the message of your poem, too.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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I appreciate it!
Comment from Ann Market
This was a fun poem to read! It is so true-rushing a snail would do no good! This is a wonderful entry for the 20 line poem contest!
Good luck, and thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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This was a fun poem to read! It is so true-rushing a snail would do no good! This is a wonderful entry for the 20 line poem contest!
Good luck, and thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thanks Ann.
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the message that you put into your poem. It seems that life nowadays is moving way to fast. This form gives an interesting shape to your well thought-out words.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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I like the message that you put into your poem. It seems that life nowadays is moving way to fast. This form gives an interesting shape to your well thought-out words.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thanks!
Comment from E. Denison
What a great entry, with an air of a children's poem. I enjoyed this read! The imagery too, not just the photo, but the lines and shape of the poem are fun. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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What a great entry, with an air of a children's poem. I enjoyed this read! The imagery too, not just the photo, but the lines and shape of the poem are fun. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Boogienights
Interesting, there are merits to both fast and slow but I prefer a slow and steady course. You are able to think things out, making less mistakes. It makes you think. Excellent contest entry, thanks and good luck in the contest.:)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Interesting, there are merits to both fast and slow but I prefer a slow and steady course. You are able to think things out, making less mistakes. It makes you think. Excellent contest entry, thanks and good luck in the contest.:)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Smiles abound abundantly!