Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Our human condition-suffering"Musings of an old man -2020
31 total reviews
Comment from TPAC
Pound that drum, hoping you clear out all that from yourself, finding the arrows shot direct on target, gushing strikes illustrating the raw facts of reality. The ideal separating the good, the bad and ugly that's life: a super shout. All stated in my given opinion.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Pound that drum, hoping you clear out all that from yourself, finding the arrows shot direct on target, gushing strikes illustrating the raw facts of reality. The ideal separating the good, the bad and ugly that's life: a super shout. All stated in my given opinion.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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TPAC whew I was able to spew forth that which was clogging up the systems. LOL thanks for the sixers.
Comment from Ogden
True, Man is, and always has been, a sinner throughout his evolution. however, I don't share your belief in the inevitability of your predictions.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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True, Man is, and always has been, a sinner throughout his evolution. however, I don't share your belief in the inevitability of your predictions.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Don I questioned even if I do....
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, yes, we are indeed living through a very troubled stage of the history of humanity. We are either bombed out of our beds or we are beaten by an invisible enemy, which struck us when we least expected it.. I loved your poem and good luck. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Hi there, yes, we are indeed living through a very troubled stage of the history of humanity. We are either bombed out of our beds or we are beaten by an invisible enemy, which struck us when we least expected it.. I loved your poem and good luck. Ulla:))
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Ulla, thank you for the review and good wishes.
Comment from Gloria ....
Author, this is a superb free-verse illustrating much of the cause of human suffering, and that is brought on by other people forcing their will upon others. And in those instances it is about power and control the twisted desire to be a leader, when one is not.
Underlying much of it is a toxic love of money that has no wish for peace and goodwill for mankind.
I love your conclusion that hope is the pearl created from pain and irritation within the oyster, and such is hope.
Wishing you much luck in the booth with this gem. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Author, this is a superb free-verse illustrating much of the cause of human suffering, and that is brought on by other people forcing their will upon others. And in those instances it is about power and control the twisted desire to be a leader, when one is not.
Underlying much of it is a toxic love of money that has no wish for peace and goodwill for mankind.
I love your conclusion that hope is the pearl created from pain and irritation within the oyster, and such is hope.
Wishing you much luck in the booth with this gem. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Gloria, thank you for plowing through this rather lengthy free verse and for your good wishes
Comment from lyenochka
Beautifully said! I appreciate how you show us that all these calamities and leaders who care only for their own gain existed since the Fall. Yet those with a "prayer life" have Hope. Best wishes in the contest!
"turbulenance of tornatic winds ripping" (turbulence)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Beautifully said! I appreciate how you show us that all these calamities and leaders who care only for their own gain existed since the Fall. Yet those with a "prayer life" have Hope. Best wishes in the contest!
"turbulenance of tornatic winds ripping" (turbulence)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you I missed this, ugh...
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Well done entry for this contest and I wish you well in the competition. You have done a fine job of describing the pain that we inflict upon each other and brought the words around nicely to an ending that offers hope.
Thank you for sharing this well-written poem.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Well done entry for this contest and I wish you well in the competition. You have done a fine job of describing the pain that we inflict upon each other and brought the words around nicely to an ending that offers hope.
Thank you for sharing this well-written poem.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Louise, thank you
Comment from Sanku
Many of us are living within the containment of our own actions now. May it is the result of not living within the containment God prescribed. I am still looking for the light at the end of the tunnel
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Many of us are living within the containment of our own actions now. May it is the result of not living within the containment God prescribed. I am still looking for the light at the end of the tunnel
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Sanku, yes containment of our own actions is wise.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Spiritual Poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lively imagery, and beautifully depicting its theme.
12th stanza and the last one are particularly noteworthy.
Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Spiritual Poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lively imagery, and beautifully depicting its theme.
12th stanza and the last one are particularly noteworthy.
Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the validation.
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Hi JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from RGstar
This was very strong. One can sense the humanity within the author. Not many poetic devices, but this was not about that, more about the power and message within the delivery...and I agree with what much of the author has said here.
Bravo...good luck.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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This was very strong. One can sense the humanity within the author. Not many poetic devices, but this was not about that, more about the power and message within the delivery...and I agree with what much of the author has said here.
Bravo...good luck.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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RGstar, thank you for the review and comments.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Hope! Thus, that pearl which often stays
hidden in the soft belly of a oyster being
molded into a precious gleaming gem
enabling them to survive can rebound
the hearts of man.' This poem is EXCEPTIONAL! It has a great chance in the competition being that it encompassed all the feelings and emotions so many of us go through in these difficult times and yet it will stand the test of time. Brilliant. Kindest regards and good luck Meia xx
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Hope! Thus, that pearl which often stays
hidden in the soft belly of a oyster being
molded into a precious gleaming gem
enabling them to survive can rebound
the hearts of man.' This poem is EXCEPTIONAL! It has a great chance in the competition being that it encompassed all the feelings and emotions so many of us go through in these difficult times and yet it will stand the test of time. Brilliant. Kindest regards and good luck Meia xx
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Media, I am so very humbled by your six-star review an unexpected validation.