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Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

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Musings of an old man -2020

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Comment from Susan Larson
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Oh, yes, I remember penny loafers.
"makes for comfortable wheels."
Shouldn't that be MAKE?
"not worn by prigs
certainly not any bigwigs" In high school, the snobs put dimes in their penny loafers like we were supposed to be impressed? Love the poem. Love the memory.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
    Oh yes the country clubber wanna be's!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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wait a minute, i remember i had them too and proudly wore them. This is a cute piece done in rondeau style, and brings back memories of times past and these rate with black and white loafers

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
    Barb, thanks
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear Buddy, outside of having to resort to a line like :
"while hearing the flying pig squealS ," )which kind of throws me for a loop) If you would be willing to change to word to just plain "squeal," it would rhyme better with
"real." ( and I could live with a flying pig. )

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
    Thank you
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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I wore black penny loafers in high school and even went off to college in them. I polished and shined them every night before going to bed. Good old rugged shoes. I put a shiny dime in mine...

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
    Rebecca, you were thinking big bucks at an early age, LOL`
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 16-Jul-2020
    Ha ha. I was thinking a shiny dime contrasted with black so well.
Comment from Cindy Decker
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Bill, I even had penny loafers when I was a young girl. I love that they're soft and comfortable! I like your appropriate photo and your lovely poem. I rsoecially like your use of "prigs," and "big wigs" to make your work really colorful. I noticed one small error: it should read TOO fast a pace, not to in this case.
Otherwise, it's an excellent poem.
Have a really good week.ð???

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
    Cindy thank you, JLR
reply by Cindy Decker on 15-Jul-2020
    😊
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
    Cindy good catch!