Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I like the flow of your poem,you capture my attention from the The first line to the last,I thought it was a cute poem.
I found it to be very interesting traveling that way.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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I like the flow of your poem,you capture my attention from the The first line to the last,I thought it was a cute poem.
I found it to be very interesting traveling that way.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Cookie, Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.
Comment from Sugarray77
I so enjoyed reading this excellently written free verse, Jim. The idea of stepping into a cosmic circle to begin a journey is exciting and the subsequent ideas that support it are very well chosen. I would mention that in the second stanza, fifth line, you have two words bumping into each other... agolden.... Well done!!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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I so enjoyed reading this excellently written free verse, Jim. The idea of stepping into a cosmic circle to begin a journey is exciting and the subsequent ideas that support it are very well chosen. I would mention that in the second stanza, fifth line, you have two words bumping into each other... agolden.... Well done!!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hi friend, thank you so seeing the spag.. Jim
Comment from Eternal Muse
Great creative imagery in this free verse. You've really risen to the club's challenge. I like the descriptive imagery, the visuals, the great use of vocabulary; and your award winning presentation. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Great creative imagery in this free verse. You've really risen to the club's challenge. I like the descriptive imagery, the visuals, the great use of vocabulary; and your award winning presentation. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Eternal Muse, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Raul1
Most of the time a life cycle is a great experience. You get to remember the good old memories. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! I like it. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Most of the time a life cycle is a great experience. You get to remember the good old memories. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! I like it. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Raul, thank you!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a fine thought for the Circles entry. Sometime short thoughts can really hit the spot, touch our heart, and even be encouraging. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This is a fine thought for the Circles entry. Sometime short thoughts can really hit the spot, touch our heart, and even be encouraging. Well done!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Rebecca, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mastery
Outstanding imagery in here, Jim. Very well constructed and your imagination gives us the readers then feeling you are describing so well:
"Then, just lightly exhale
as taking the next step
inside this circle,
your breath is like a
tiny jet stream of energy
that creates the motion of a spiral...."
Bravo, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Outstanding imagery in here, Jim. Very well constructed and your imagination gives us the readers then feeling you are describing so well:
"Then, just lightly exhale
as taking the next step
inside this circle,
your breath is like a
tiny jet stream of energy
that creates the motion of a spiral...."
Bravo, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Smiling back with great appreciation. I do thank you Bob!
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:) Thanks, Jim. . Bob
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello JLR,
I pray you are doing well. This is an interesting poem on infinite circles. I love Free Verse of just writing and you did a great job with your message. A circle in space travels around the stars. How cool? The visual affects are great, especially the green, my favorite color. I can't imagine just floating in space. Well done message. Thanks. Happy future writing:-)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello JLR,
I pray you are doing well. This is an interesting poem on infinite circles. I love Free Verse of just writing and you did a great job with your message. A circle in space travels around the stars. How cool? The visual affects are great, especially the green, my favorite color. I can't imagine just floating in space. Well done message. Thanks. Happy future writing:-)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Joyce, your kind words are a soothing balm. I do appreciate your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
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You are so welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Infinite, give a few instructions which take the reader into a cosmos of experiences which must include all places and all alternate places within one chosen sphere. Whew!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This free verse, Infinite, give a few instructions which take the reader into a cosmos of experiences which must include all places and all alternate places within one chosen sphere. Whew!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Bill, thanks... did you like the invitation aspect of the poem?
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It is compelling if one wishes to have this type of experience.
Comment from estory
I thought you had a great musical and rhythmic sense of the language as you worked it into these circles and loops twisted around itself in an image of the infinite. Of course the circle is a great metaphor for the infinite. Nice job with the format here and I liked the visual effects of these empty spaces opening out into unfolding galaxies and clusters of galaxies into ever greater distances. estory
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I thought you had a great musical and rhythmic sense of the language as you worked it into these circles and loops twisted around itself in an image of the infinite. Of course the circle is a great metaphor for the infinite. Nice job with the format here and I liked the visual effects of these empty spaces opening out into unfolding galaxies and clusters of galaxies into ever greater distances. estory
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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estyory, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Colin John
Hi This is a wonderful cosmic poem that puts you right in the centre and then you can let your imagination go, with your help. love the concept and have written similar pieces, so I can relate. Cheers Colin
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hi This is a wonderful cosmic poem that puts you right in the centre and then you can let your imagination go, with your help. love the concept and have written similar pieces, so I can relate. Cheers Colin
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Colin, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.