Between Friends (Part-6 of 6)
The dinner date finale.28 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Wish I had a six star****** you fooled me. I never ever saw that coming. I am glad I had not taken a drink of something, I would have spread it across the room. Very good anding place. Or, you could have gone further. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Wish I had a six star****** you fooled me. I never ever saw that coming. I am glad I had not taken a drink of something, I would have spread it across the room. Very good anding place. Or, you could have gone further. Karen
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Thanks for the generous review and kind words. I'm glad I could surprise you. I thought about taking things further, but decided I was tired of the story and was sure readers were too. I appreciate YOU!
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Yea, sometimes I get tired of a story and quickly end it.
And, sometimes I am ready to keep going and the story will not move. Who is in charge anyway? hahahaha Karen
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Some say the muse is in charge. But for me, I don't think I have one. But I don't get writer's block either. :-)
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Sometimes I wanna write, sometimes I don't just like anything else. Karen
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, then everything is okay after that? I was about to review #5 and realized I reviewed it out of order because it was a good candidate for an ATB at 25 reviews. And so with this episode, everything goes back to normal for poor Brad, who was mercilessly used by Olivia. And then we can imagine that Olivia and Aaron deserve each other. But since Leslie and Brad expect more from a relationship, it sounds like all will be well with them. An entertaining story from beginning to end! Congrats on the Story of the Month!!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Ah, then everything is okay after that? I was about to review #5 and realized I reviewed it out of order because it was a good candidate for an ATB at 25 reviews. And so with this episode, everything goes back to normal for poor Brad, who was mercilessly used by Olivia. And then we can imagine that Olivia and Aaron deserve each other. But since Leslie and Brad expect more from a relationship, it sounds like all will be well with them. An entertaining story from beginning to end! Congrats on the Story of the Month!!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Helen, for hanging with this silly story all the way through. Yes, I'm a goof, and like to play with all types of personalities with my characters. LOL. I can't thank you enough for all the encouragement you offer. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Bill Schott
Bop on the head for Brad. The lives of friendships dissolve quickly sometimes. I'm afraid this is the only chapter of the story I've seen, but I like the dialogue and the progression of this scene. It kept me interested in a story I was entering nat the conclusion.
This is a great description: Brad's ... a sneaky-twerp kid ... straining not to poop his pants... accentuates his frayed hysteria.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Bop on the head for Brad. The lives of friendships dissolve quickly sometimes. I'm afraid this is the only chapter of the story I've seen, but I like the dialogue and the progression of this scene. It kept me interested in a story I was entering nat the conclusion.
This is a great description: Brad's ... a sneaky-twerp kid ... straining not to poop his pants... accentuates his frayed hysteria.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Hello, Bill Schott, Happy Holidays! Well, this story is an overexaggerated farce that really needs to be read in sequence chapters 1 through 6. All six are up, but I understand that's a lot of reading. And, besides, you've already read the ending now (LOL). I appreciate your kind words and generous review!
Comment from amada
Your review to my own short story touched me, it touched so much that I wanted to know your own style of writing. Definitively I like this chapter, the first I read. I think you have a great dominion of the language. Your There is lots of action, and thy go so fast...It takes me about a week to compose the "what is next line..."Oh dear, this thing about being young...
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Your review to my own short story touched me, it touched so much that I wanted to know your own style of writing. Definitively I like this chapter, the first I read. I think you have a great dominion of the language. Your There is lots of action, and thy go so fast...It takes me about a week to compose the "what is next line..."Oh dear, this thing about being young...
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Oh, Amada, thank you so much for taking time to read the last chapter of my six-part story. My intentionally over-described farce isn't for everyone, which makes your generous six-star review all the more special to me. Your kind words and encouragement are greatly appreciated! Ric
Comment from JennaG
Oh my gosh! That ending totally threw me for a loop! I think I remember suspecting maybe Leslie had some connection to Aaron in the very beginning of the story, but I completely lost focus on that with the whole Brad/Olivia debacle. It ended up coming as a total shock! Well done! Wow! This group really did have some secrets, didn't they?
Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to reviewing this. It truly was an excellent story! I loved it! Take care. Looking forward to reading what you write next! :)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Oh my gosh! That ending totally threw me for a loop! I think I remember suspecting maybe Leslie had some connection to Aaron in the very beginning of the story, but I completely lost focus on that with the whole Brad/Olivia debacle. It ended up coming as a total shock! Well done! Wow! This group really did have some secrets, didn't they?
Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to reviewing this. It truly was an excellent story! I loved it! Take care. Looking forward to reading what you write next! :)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, JennaG! I'm glad you liked my wild and crazy story enough to hang in there to the end. The over-exaggerated, simile-laden spoof isn't for everyone, and probably not on either of our preferred reading lists. LOL. Your kind words, comments, and the extra-special six-star review are greatly appreciated!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Ric Myworld,
Nice piece in continuation having impressive wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and depicting the story in an interesting way.
Description of persons, scenes, and of course the last line in the end is particularly noteworthy.
Please see this sentence: "... but let's don't exaggerate."
I think 'not' in place of 'don't' is better.
"We never lose friends...real ones are." + The whole series, ACTUALLY worth enjoying!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Hello Ric Myworld,
Nice piece in continuation having impressive wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and depicting the story in an interesting way.
Description of persons, scenes, and of course the last line in the end is particularly noteworthy.
Please see this sentence: "... but let's don't exaggerate."
I think 'not' in place of 'don't' is better.
"We never lose friends...real ones are." + The whole series, ACTUALLY worth enjoying!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Hello, RPSaxena,
It's always a pleasure, my friend! Thank you so much for hanging in there from start to finish with my wild and crazy story. Knowing the over-exaggerated, simile-laden farce wouldn't be on either of our preferred reading lists. LOL. But, I had fun writing it, and hope it put a smile or two on your face. I immediately changed "don't'' to "not," per your suggestion, and it reads much better. I appreciate your comments, suggestions, and your exceptional review. Although, they are nice and great encouragement, it's your kindness that always touches me most!
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Ric Myworld, Most Welcome!
Dear Friend, Your modesty is worth following.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Steven Hicks
Ric, Just a really good finish. Although we may have differences in opinion about some writing techniques, I cannot fault the direction you took this and how you have done it. It has turned out so well with a fabulous ( that might not be appropriate) ending. Thank you for the opportunity to read this.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Ric, Just a really good finish. Although we may have differences in opinion about some writing techniques, I cannot fault the direction you took this and how you have done it. It has turned out so well with a fabulous ( that might not be appropriate) ending. Thank you for the opportunity to read this.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Steven, for hanging in there with my crazy, off-the-wall story that I'm sure would never be on your preferred reading list, which makes me appreciate you reading it all the more. Thanks for another outstanding and generous review!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, playing the rushing rule here:) each of them having a taste of each other. I like this passage here: "Olivia would most likely be considered the dazzling black Ferrari or Lamborghini that demands attention and flashes danger signals at every curve, and she sure has plenty of curves. While, Leslie more resembles the white S-series Mercedes built for luxury, comfort, and reliable dependability" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Wow, playing the rushing rule here:) each of them having a taste of each other. I like this passage here: "Olivia would most likely be considered the dazzling black Ferrari or Lamborghini that demands attention and flashes danger signals at every curve, and she sure has plenty of curves. While, Leslie more resembles the white S-series Mercedes built for luxury, comfort, and reliable dependability" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Iza Deleanu, for checking out part-6 of my wild and crazy story. This is an over-exaggerated, simile-laden, twisted context farce that needs all six parts to separate the jest from reality. Each fit together to complete the puzzle. I appreciate you comments and generous review! But most of all, I appreciate you spending your time to read my foolishness! :-)
Comment from Ben B.
Oh my, you're story is getting twisted with all kind of love triangles here. I guess Leslie still has feelings for Aaron if she feels bringing this up was important.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Oh my, you're story is getting twisted with all kind of love triangles here. I guess Leslie still has feelings for Aaron if she feels bringing this up was important.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Ben, for hanging in there with my wild and crazy story. I hope you enjoyed it. I like happily-ever-after endings, but with this one, how could I have not left it up to the readers to decide where they want to take it . I appreciate you kind and generous review!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Twisted endings usually add another dimension to a story.
The Hollywood feel I honed in on panned out as these four remind of youngsters lost in the real world, kind of like a Ted and Carol, or Bob's big adventure.
Perhaps they should become a foursome, the naive, orange juice-drinking Brad, and the three intertwined star-crossed lovers who think they have the world by the tail but do not even know the questions of real life.
Interesting six-part story.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Twisted endings usually add another dimension to a story.
The Hollywood feel I honed in on panned out as these four remind of youngsters lost in the real world, kind of like a Ted and Carol, or Bob's big adventure.
Perhaps they should become a foursome, the naive, orange juice-drinking Brad, and the three intertwined star-crossed lovers who think they have the world by the tail but do not even know the questions of real life.
Interesting six-part story.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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LOL. You aren't the first person to say I should make it a foursome. Of course, this whole story is way outside my comfort zone already, so I'm not interested in taking it any farther. LOL. Bob, Carol, Ted, and Alice, embarrassed me when I watched it, about like writing chapter five of this did. And to think, I intentionally left out any erotic or graphic-sex stuff. And the strangest part of this long sprawling fiasco is that there is more truth than I would care to admit.