It Hurts
The World is feeling pain today.2 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem speaks to all the optimism in good people's hearts that the insanity of injustice and hate can be overcome to live in peace and freedom. (While your poem is about violence, I see no need for the warning about it and language.)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Your poem speaks to all the optimism in good people's hearts that the insanity of injustice and hate can be overcome to live in peace and freedom. (While your poem is about violence, I see no need for the warning about it and language.)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! Okay, I will take the warnings off. Thanks!
Comment from Gloria ....
Author, your syllable count per the etheree is spot on, your presentation is good and your theme current and appropriate.
My only suggestion is to aim for a perfect triangle shape by finding different words, synonyms to aim for that perfect shape. Play with the sound and shape of words.
Great job and I wish you much luck in the booth. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Author, your syllable count per the etheree is spot on, your presentation is good and your theme current and appropriate.
My only suggestion is to aim for a perfect triangle shape by finding different words, synonyms to aim for that perfect shape. Play with the sound and shape of words.
Great job and I wish you much luck in the booth. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Thanks! I hope I win. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
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I made the poem a triangle shape. Thanks for the help!