The Piper
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17 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Greetings again,
Another good continuation. The methodology described here is good and makes sense. It's a finely worked out and written scene.
Crescendo picked another location further away. - generally speaking, its farther for physical distance.
Good stuff
G
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Greetings again,
Another good continuation. The methodology described here is good and makes sense. It's a finely worked out and written scene.
Crescendo picked another location further away. - generally speaking, its farther for physical distance.
Good stuff
G
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hi G,
Thank you for the encouragement. I found a place in another chapter that needed to be changed to farther as well.
Your help is greatly appreciated.
Comment from dkblack
Loved this chapter! I liked that Master Crescendo had him practice on the wasps and not the bees. I think of bees as being more innocent that wasps too. I'm wondering what Piper will be able to do when he realizes his talent! I would want to be on his good side for sure!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Loved this chapter! I liked that Master Crescendo had him practice on the wasps and not the bees. I think of bees as being more innocent that wasps too. I'm wondering what Piper will be able to do when he realizes his talent! I would want to be on his good side for sure!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Hi Dana,
Oh, my goodness, it's been a while since I've been to the site. Thank you so much for the very generous stars and the encouraging review. Yes, we have to protect those bees. We need them.
Sorry for the late response.
Debi
Comment from robyn corum
Debi,
What an intriguing premise and fun story! I know I've only read snippets of this from time to time, but the writing truly is excellent. You have a gift.
Though I don't care toooo much for fantasy, this was a special world that I could easily see and readily experience. It was delightful! Thank you!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Debi,
What an intriguing premise and fun story! I know I've only read snippets of this from time to time, but the writing truly is excellent. You have a gift.
Though I don't care toooo much for fantasy, this was a special world that I could easily see and readily experience. It was delightful! Thank you!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Hi Robyn,
What nice comments. You really brightened my day. Thank you!
Debi
Comment from rspoet
Hello Debi,
So Piper can play the rhythm of the bees.
"Focus on what you want them to do." I want them to go away, far away.
though this could be useful in an encounter with Burkehart, who's lingering
around somewhere in the background.
Perhaps Piper can also influence weather, make storms rise or dissipate, make crops grow or wolves forget their hunger.
And when he is a bit older, Piper could be very popular with the girls. :)
Wonderful chapter, well worth the wait.
Best wishes to you and your family.
Robert
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Hello Debi,
So Piper can play the rhythm of the bees.
"Focus on what you want them to do." I want them to go away, far away.
though this could be useful in an encounter with Burkehart, who's lingering
around somewhere in the background.
Perhaps Piper can also influence weather, make storms rise or dissipate, make crops grow or wolves forget their hunger.
And when he is a bit older, Piper could be very popular with the girls. :)
Wonderful chapter, well worth the wait.
Best wishes to you and your family.
Robert
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Hi Robert,
Your comments are delightful. I'm sure Piper will have to do a lot of experimenting to find out just what those powers include.
Thank you so much for the six star rating and those fun comments.
Debi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debi, I'm not normally into fantasy fiction, but I have to say that I liked this. It was well written with different layers and not without humour. Yes I
liked it a lot. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Hi Debi, I'm not normally into fantasy fiction, but I have to say that I liked this. It was well written with different layers and not without humour. Yes I
liked it a lot. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Hi Ulla,
I hope you and yours are safe during this crazy time.
Thank you so much for the kind comments about the writing. I means a lot that you liked it.
Debi
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Debi
I've been off-site for a while. Delighted to read some more about Piper. I think this is a particularly good chapter. Piper is fortunate to have teacher who recognizes and trusts his abilities. But I felt my palms prickle in empathy as he fought to control his anxiety and keep on playing.
Love the construction of this chapter with its layers of tension, Burghardt lurking unseen, the menacing wasps, and finally your using the POV of a single wasp to reveal the power of Piper's music.
Oh and you interjected a bit of humour as contrast.
Didn't notice any spag.
Enjoyable write
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hello Debi
I've been off-site for a while. Delighted to read some more about Piper. I think this is a particularly good chapter. Piper is fortunate to have teacher who recognizes and trusts his abilities. But I felt my palms prickle in empathy as he fought to control his anxiety and keep on playing.
Love the construction of this chapter with its layers of tension, Burghardt lurking unseen, the menacing wasps, and finally your using the POV of a single wasp to reveal the power of Piper's music.
Oh and you interjected a bit of humour as contrast.
Didn't notice any spag.
Enjoyable write
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi Julia,
Welcome back. This is my first posting in over two months so I understand. Summer has so much to do. Our apple trees gave us a great harvest and a lot of work.
I appreciate you stopping by to review.
Wow, thanks for the six stars!
I am happy to hear you got into the story. I know I would be anxious with a swarm of wasps around.
Thanks you for noting the layers of tension. I was hoping to get that across.
Thank you so much!
Debi
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You're welcome Debi. What do you do with all those apples?
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The horses get the apples that fall on the ground. Canning and juicing of course. We have a great applesauce recipe, apple butter, apple jelly, and the ever popular apple crisps and pies. Right now I've had enough of apples. Thank goodness we can not have one pear tree. Maybe that is why I like pears better. LOL
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Hmmm
I've never tasted apple jelly. My husband is British and adores apple pies. I can't eat unpeeled apples. I sneeze. Must be allergic to something in the skin. :-))
Comment from Pam (respa)
-An excellent chapter, Debi, that
is full of music, nature, and mystery.
-You do a good job as M.C. takes
Piper through the various steps in
using the music to entice the wasps to move.
-It was interesting how he wanted Piper
to make them go farther and father away,
but Piper didn't have much breath left.
-After the lesson he had some good questions,
and, of course, M.C. had good answers!
-They have an excellent relationship, and
I hope it continues. Piper needs someone like him.
-The ending is mysterious and mystical.
-It leaves us with questions, like who is the
creature with a flute, Rupert? someone else?
Who is the other one?
-It is also odd that she is enchanted, but then
she just "continued her patrol." She was so involved
and then it's like a spell broke, and now she
simply goes about her regular duties.
-It is certainly a lot to think about.
-One small thing: I would make a new
paragraph after "a memorable warning."
-I enjoyed the story!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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-An excellent chapter, Debi, that
is full of music, nature, and mystery.
-You do a good job as M.C. takes
Piper through the various steps in
using the music to entice the wasps to move.
-It was interesting how he wanted Piper
to make them go farther and father away,
but Piper didn't have much breath left.
-After the lesson he had some good questions,
and, of course, M.C. had good answers!
-They have an excellent relationship, and
I hope it continues. Piper needs someone like him.
-The ending is mysterious and mystical.
-It leaves us with questions, like who is the
creature with a flute, Rupert? someone else?
Who is the other one?
-It is also odd that she is enchanted, but then
she just "continued her patrol." She was so involved
and then it's like a spell broke, and now she
simply goes about her regular duties.
-It is certainly a lot to think about.
-One small thing: I would make a new
paragraph after "a memorable warning."
-I enjoyed the story!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for the shiny six stars and especially for all the comments that let me know what is working and what could be improved.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and review. You made my day brighter.
Debi
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Debi. I am glad they made your day brighter. Your story brightens mine and allows me to think of possibilities!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, I like the twist of it opening and ending with the wasp in this chapter, W.J..... and what a great, LONG AWAITED addition to the story (now we just need to direct that stinger to Burkhart!)! I have so missed reading about Piper -- thanx for sharing him again! ;) Welcome back, Beautiful Lady! ;) Yvette
As wasp, however..." --> A wasp, however..."
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Oh, I like the twist of it opening and ending with the wasp in this chapter, W.J..... and what a great, LONG AWAITED addition to the story (now we just need to direct that stinger to Burkhart!)! I have so missed reading about Piper -- thanx for sharing him again! ;) Welcome back, Beautiful Lady! ;) Yvette
As wasp, however..." --> A wasp, however..."
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hi Yvette,
Thank you for the wonderful comments about Piper and the welcome back. They brightened my day. Thanks for alerting me to the SPAG. I loved the comment about the stinger being directed at Burkehart.
Debi
Comment from royowen
What an interesting conclusion to the episode, controlling the dangerous wasps with the flute, my daughter is a talented flautist, and can enchant a whole heap of people with her hypnotic ability, so yes, music can be most spellbinding, well back Debi, Beautifully written, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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What an interesting conclusion to the episode, controlling the dangerous wasps with the flute, my daughter is a talented flautist, and can enchant a whole heap of people with her hypnotic ability, so yes, music can be most spellbinding, well back Debi, Beautifully written, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and the welcome back, Roy. The past couple of months have been busy, but I think I can get back to writing now. I like that you can relate to the story because your daughter is a talented flautist. Musicians can work magic, can't they?
Debi
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They certainly can,
Comment from RShipp
"Steady, Piper," Crescendo said in a calm, soft voice. "Focus on what you want them to do, not what you fear they might do. I don't fancy being stung any more than you." (I am not sure I want the ability to 'cause behaviors' in wasps. I don't have a very level head when being swarmed?)
"Master Crescendo, may I ask why we had to start with wasps? Why not something less threatening like butterflies or even ants? At least if something went wrong we could get away from them." (I agree. A swarm of butterflies would be much nicer!!!)
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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"Steady, Piper," Crescendo said in a calm, soft voice. "Focus on what you want them to do, not what you fear they might do. I don't fancy being stung any more than you." (I am not sure I want the ability to 'cause behaviors' in wasps. I don't have a very level head when being swarmed?)
"Master Crescendo, may I ask why we had to start with wasps? Why not something less threatening like butterflies or even ants? At least if something went wrong we could get away from them." (I agree. A swarm of butterflies would be much nicer!!!)
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the great review. I am so happy you enjoyed this episode. Love your commentary on the wasps and the butterflies. I don't think I want to be around a swarm either. I'd probably run and end up with all sorts of stings.
Debi