Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I agree, oft times 'life tosses more at us than we can' handle, but we just have to get on with it. I like the light-hearted finish as you hope the lighting doesn't make you look pale, stale or frail. Enjoyed it JLR
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
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I agree, oft times 'life tosses more at us than we can' handle, but we just have to get on with it. I like the light-hearted finish as you hope the lighting doesn't make you look pale, stale or frail. Enjoyed it JLR
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
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Pearl, thank you
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Time Out", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece.
Penned with craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. I very much look forward to seeing your next post. To me, this is definitely a six!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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"Time Out", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece.
Penned with craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. I very much look forward to seeing your next post. To me, this is definitely a six!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Duchess, thank so kindly for your validation on this poem.
JLR,
you certainly deserved my validation on your poem.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from royowen
Boy it's amazing how much people can write in just fifteen minutes. It's true that already, people like my wife, who normally teaches in a classroom, was able to teach and embrace very enthusiastically the zooming Method, well done Jim, you've embraced other forms so well, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Boy it's amazing how much people can write in just fifteen minutes. It's true that already, people like my wife, who normally teaches in a classroom, was able to teach and embrace very enthusiastically the zooming Method, well done Jim, you've embraced other forms so well, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Roy, Your wife has my deepest regard for her profession. A few of my best mentors were educators. I appreciate your validations Roy, you have a splendid week.
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Thanks and well done Jim.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, a really enjoyable grouch LOL. I can identify with your first stanza - the rest I just enjoyed and sympathized - everyone is allowed to moan now and then, you've had your ration of this now, a happy poem next time LOL. Well written - warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Hello JLR, a really enjoyable grouch LOL. I can identify with your first stanza - the rest I just enjoyed and sympathized - everyone is allowed to moan now and then, you've had your ration of this now, a happy poem next time LOL. Well written - warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Smiling in spirit and in body,🙏👍✌️👌
Comment from Mastery
Good stuff, Jim. It's a fascinating poem to say the least. I liked this stanza in particular, I thought you should know.
"Life tosses more at us than we
can...as they say, "Say Grace over,"
but really there is so much more
in store and mostly it is all a bore."
:) Bob
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Good stuff, Jim. It's a fascinating poem to say the least. I liked this stanza in particular, I thought you should know.
"Life tosses more at us than we
can...as they say, "Say Grace over,"
but really there is so much more
in store and mostly it is all a bore."
:) Bob
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thanks much Bob, I hope your Sunday is full of new moments of wonder. Jim
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Yours too, jim. Bob
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Yours too, jim. Bob
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your free verse for the club challenge, JLR. I especially liked:
"But now, its zoom, (it's)
in a room and hoping the lighting
doesn't make me look pale or stale
or worst case frail"
It's odd all this socializing by Zoom, isn't it?
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Great job with your free verse for the club challenge, JLR. I especially liked:
"But now, its zoom, (it's)
in a room and hoping the lighting
doesn't make me look pale or stale
or worst case frail"
It's odd all this socializing by Zoom, isn't it?
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Yes, beyond belief how we have been forced to adopt to a new nornal.
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Wow, 15 minutes start to finish! Your poem is amazingly good under normal writing circumstances, but to have been written in such a short time is unbelievable. I love the last part the best because I can TOTALLY relate!
Susan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Wow, 15 minutes start to finish! Your poem is amazingly good under normal writing circumstances, but to have been written in such a short time is unbelievable. I love the last part the best because I can TOTALLY relate!
Susan
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Susan, I do thank you for the validation. If one writes everyday words play is always just under the current of that everyday life.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem in fifteen minutes and a reflection of the thoughts we have in our minds. Modern technology made it possible to connect with friends over a distance but sometimes we wish we can just disconnect.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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A very well-written free verse poem in fifteen minutes and a reflection of the thoughts we have in our minds. Modern technology made it possible to connect with friends over a distance but sometimes we wish we can just disconnect.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Sandra, do you find you are beginning to see through people's mask that we all project to the outer world much more clearly as you zoom week in and week out?
Comment from estory
I thought you really built up some great rhythmic movements in this, you had some great echoing rhyme effects. I really liked the opening, which draws us in: "Unplug, deprogram, unstress; Take a time out." That says in rhythm and rhyme what the action implies. "Jump and shout, and I might even pout," was good too and "And now its zoom, in a room" did the trick as well. estory
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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I thought you really built up some great rhythmic movements in this, you had some great echoing rhyme effects. I really liked the opening, which draws us in: "Unplug, deprogram, unstress; Take a time out." That says in rhythm and rhyme what the action implies. "Jump and shout, and I might even pout," was good too and "And now its zoom, in a room" did the trick as well. estory
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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estroy, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my free verse poem. it was a blast to write this one so fast :)
Comment from Cindy Decker
JLR, Good morning!
That's a very nice take on zoom. I, myself, prefer traveling via the Internet. But, there are those that prefer a real handshake when doing business. I like your poem because you stress the hectic nature of the Internet. I also like that you think most of our future will be boring. I can handle boring, not lonely. I'm on the Internet a lot .
Good luck with your poem. It is very thought-provoking.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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JLR, Good morning!
That's a very nice take on zoom. I, myself, prefer traveling via the Internet. But, there are those that prefer a real handshake when doing business. I like your poem because you stress the hectic nature of the Internet. I also like that you think most of our future will be boring. I can handle boring, not lonely. I'm on the Internet a lot .
Good luck with your poem. It is very thought-provoking.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thanks Cindy, adjusting to new normal...yet I do miss the hugs and handshakes.