Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Love this clever rhyming poem full of positivity at the scenes by the ocean. A fine 5-7-5 full of days beginning and ending, magical words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from George 1

Excellent

It's a little bit of a gamble to use rhyme in short, formatted poems like this, but I think yours works well. It never sounds forced. I too love to look at the ocean pretty much any time of day or night.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Nothing beats an ocean view

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

This is a lovely write for the 'love' haiku contest. You also used a beautiful picture to accompany your writing. the red color on your border was a really effective choice.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic,
imagery, and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the ocean view,
and have a good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

reply by Pam (respa) on 14-Mar-2021

You are quite welcome.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem about the love
of the ocean. Both the sight, sound, and smell of the salty surf
breaking on the shore is a delight.
Nice addition of the rhymes.
Best wishes.
Robert

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

I like your entry for this I Love writing prompt. Beautiful picture of twilight over the ocean, peaceful and a promise of a new day after the night. Very well done.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

reply by Anne Johnston on 14-Mar-2021

You are welcome

reply by Anne Johnston on 14-Mar-2021

You are welcome

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

A tight little 5-7-5 that follows on logically from the prompt. It is a view and time of day I think most people could fall in love with, and yet it does not 'need' the picture in order to understand it.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thanks for your review. Easy to fall in love with something so beautiful.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your contest entry is well presented, Mystery Author. The end rhymes are an added bonus. Your image is perfect. I wonder, though, do readers understand that your words are for something you love since nowhere is that concept mentioned except in the prompt. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thanks Jan. I have changed the first line to show the love.