haiku (a cloud of blackbirds)
A 5-6-5 haiku-club challenge poem20 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Wow! What a presentation this is. Birds are the best when it comes to odd pictures. There are so many formations that can be made when birds are crowded together. They are an art unto themselves.
Ralf
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Wow! What a presentation this is. Birds are the best when it comes to odd pictures. There are so many formations that can be made when birds are crowded together. They are an art unto themselves.
Ralf
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you, and yes they are, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written haiku for the club entry for group of animals. I didn't know a group of blackbirds was called a cloud. Awesome photo to compliment your words as well. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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This is a nicely written haiku for the club entry for group of animals. I didn't know a group of blackbirds was called a cloud. Awesome photo to compliment your words as well. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image and
presentation, Kahpot.
-I am leaning about
various names for a
group of animals today!
-Good nature and
seasonal imagery.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the blackbirds
and the "blanketed trees."
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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-A good image and
presentation, Kahpot.
-I am leaning about
various names for a
group of animals today!
-Good nature and
seasonal imagery.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the blackbirds
and the "blanketed trees."
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, and yes I also am learning a lot about animal names, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! What a picture and he noise must be quite loud too, a blotchy, sooty cloud here and those trees must be wishing for a rest, a fun post, you complimented this scene with your words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Wow! What a picture and he noise must be quite loud too, a blotchy, sooty cloud here and those trees must be wishing for a rest, a fun post, you complimented this scene with your words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, yes I could only imagine the noise, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from sunnilicious
That was a beautifully written poem. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good visual imagery. Good alliteration with blackbirds-blanketed. Trees can be so nonchalant about everything. Great satori line. Well done. Exceptional :)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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That was a beautifully written poem. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good visual imagery. Good alliteration with blackbirds-blanketed. Trees can be so nonchalant about everything. Great satori line. Well done. Exceptional :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Wow! Thank you so very much, trees are a bit like that, your encouraging comments and the sixth star are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear kapot, not only is this a wonderful Haku, it has been a real education for me. I have seen flocks of birds before. but never a cloud of black birds that could just completely hide a grove of trees like this.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Dear kapot, not only is this a wonderful Haku, it has been a real education for me. I have seen flocks of birds before. but never a cloud of black birds that could just completely hide a grove of trees like this.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, yes I was quite taken when I saw this photo, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I am always fascinated when I watch this occurrence. It cloud appears dense, so how do they keep from flying into each other? Just a thought.
You chose the perfect illustration.
What was best was the haiku itself. It paints a very vivid picture in my mind.
Gale
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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I am always fascinated when I watch this occurrence. It cloud appears dense, so how do they keep from flying into each other? Just a thought.
You chose the perfect illustration.
What was best was the haiku itself. It paints a very vivid picture in my mind.
Gale
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, not sure how they miss one another but I am glad I'm not up there, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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I apologize for the typos in my review. Many interruptions. Wonderful haiku!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Diane,
This is a nice club event Gypsy created. There are many good entries for the same, including yours! I was not familiar with the cloud of blackbirds.
I like your twist for your last line.
My portfolio has a previous post for the collective for rattlesnakes, rhumba!
Mark
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Diane,
This is a nice club event Gypsy created. There are many good entries for the same, including yours! I was not familiar with the cloud of blackbirds.
I like your twist for your last line.
My portfolio has a previous post for the collective for rattlesnakes, rhumba!
Mark
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hello Mark, you must have girls on your mind "Diane" not sure who that is, but I will accept your wonderful review and I will look up rhumba, Kym-the male version
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Apologies Kym! Diane obviously was not on my mind, but somehow my fingers typed the same (-; But now I know your name!
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Love this and the artwork that enhances the haiku. The cloud of birds is hypnotic, so many and so beautiful. This is a great haiku with pure form and organization. You have offered us a real gem here.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Love this and the artwork that enhances the haiku. The cloud of birds is hypnotic, so many and so beautiful. This is a great haiku with pure form and organization. You have offered us a real gem here.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your excellent comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
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Thank you for a delightful poem!
Comment from June Sargent
This is a great response to the club challenge. We are learning so much about the way groups of animals are labeled -and also the art of haiku. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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This is a great response to the club challenge. We are learning so much about the way groups of animals are labeled -and also the art of haiku. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, and yes it is a great club, I am learning so much, and your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot