War Free World
4 Line Poem 2 4 4 12 Syllable Dedicated to Wise Men to Act 444 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words have a strong, powerful, and excellent message. I believe we need to continue to pray for world peace and trust that
God's wisdom will surface. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and comforting with exceptional words to work
for. Great Poem!
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The author's words have a strong, powerful, and excellent message. I believe we need to continue to pray for world peace and trust that
God's wisdom will surface. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and comforting with exceptional words to work
for. Great Poem!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
Comment from E. Denison
Very nice, timely work here, Alcreator. I truly understand the limitations of the verse here, with so few syllables it can be difficult to get a message across, but I think your message is clear. I may recommend the use of a hyphen in between war and free in your third line (i.e., "war-free"), which will help ease the reader into the notion that we are looking for the absence of war, not allowing one to "make war" briefly before they spot the "free". Good job with a difficult topic. The photograph was a great paired touch as well. Thank you for sharing.
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Very nice, timely work here, Alcreator. I truly understand the limitations of the verse here, with so few syllables it can be difficult to get a message across, but I think your message is clear. I may recommend the use of a hyphen in between war and free in your third line (i.e., "war-free"), which will help ease the reader into the notion that we are looking for the absence of war, not allowing one to "make war" briefly before they spot the "free". Good job with a difficult topic. The photograph was a great paired touch as well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Peace is what all reasoning and caring people should want above all, even if they are not religious. Unfortunately, this seems far away or even impossible at the present time. Well written. Kate xx
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Peace is what all reasoning and caring people should want above all, even if they are not religious. Unfortunately, this seems far away or even impossible at the present time. Well written. Kate xx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
Comment from Moon baby
And the drum roll please, the winner is YOU!! This is very touching and I believe in the hearts of many who agree with you! Very well done in a time we all should make peace for all our number one priority! This is what God wants for us yet he gave us free will. Bless you
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And the drum roll please, the winner is YOU!! This is very touching and I believe in the hearts of many who agree with you! Very well done in a time we all should make peace for all our number one priority! This is what God wants for us yet he gave us free will. Bless you
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
Well, in the Baptist church that I grew up in, someone say "Amen." World peace would be a good thing. God gave man freedom of choice. That choice can be used to stop war. Good work. Terry.
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Well, in the Baptist church that I grew up in, someone say "Amen." World peace would be a good thing. God gave man freedom of choice. That choice can be used to stop war. Good work. Terry.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
Comment from Sally Law
Thank you for sharing, dear. I can't imagine why people want war except to overtake and possess another. It is not God's way. Sending you my best today as always, and prayers for peace soon.
Sally :))
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Thank you for sharing, dear. I can't imagine why people want war except to overtake and possess another. It is not God's way. Sending you my best today as always, and prayers for peace soon.
Sally :))
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I think it would be impossible to review the poem after all the notes. If people were to pay attention to what has been given to us already, it surely could only come from a power greater than any we know. War is an impossible state of existence and I'm surprised every day we are in one. The Ukraine's position is intolerable in a civilized world. Russia has no real claim on anyone and should stop.
xoxo Kiwi
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I think it would be impossible to review the poem after all the notes. If people were to pay attention to what has been given to us already, it surely could only come from a power greater than any we know. War is an impossible state of existence and I'm surprised every day we are in one. The Ukraine's position is intolerable in a civilized world. Russia has no real claim on anyone and should stop.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
Comment from karenina
A profound reflection, impacted as you were with the limitations of the form. Clearly, you are able to express with skill and insight, regardless of the syllabic parameters. This 2-4-4-12 reaches far beyond its brevity.
Your author's notes are thoughtful and comrehensive.
Karenina
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A profound reflection, impacted as you were with the limitations of the form. Clearly, you are able to express with skill and insight, regardless of the syllabic parameters. This 2-4-4-12 reaches far beyond its brevity.
Your author's notes are thoughtful and comrehensive.
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
This was a great entry. And now people can know why it's on the "All Time Best" list. For, you said a thousand words with very little to say. And that's hot. Keep Writing
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This was a great entry. And now people can know why it's on the "All Time Best" list. For, you said a thousand words with very little to say. And that's hot. Keep Writing
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello ALCREATOR LITT DEAR a Good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 2-4-4-12 Poem. you executed it well on the syllable count, with a hopeful message. Good job.
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Hello ALCREATOR LITT DEAR a Good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 2-4-4-12 Poem. you executed it well on the syllable count, with a hopeful message. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022