The Engagement
Flash Fiction Contest5 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Well, I can't think of any other boy and girl than Ohmie and May here. The personalities are clearly the same and the happy ending is perfect. Congratulations on your second place win!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
Well, I can't think of any other boy and girl than Ohmie and May here. The personalities are clearly the same and the happy ending is perfect. Congratulations on your second place win!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from evilynne
Interesting but strange. Is this a cave age romance? I'm not sure what a cypress knee is. Overall, though, it is a cute little tale.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
Interesting but strange. Is this a cave age romance? I'm not sure what a cypress knee is. Overall, though, it is a cute little tale.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Yes caveman Ohmie. (May offers to walk with Ohmie to his cave.)
I realize that my Ohmie stories float all over history and pre-history.
A cypress knee is a knob of the root system that sprouts vertically all around the tree.
Thank you for the review.
Comment from LisaMay
This is a cool little story. I enjoyed the flirting exchange between them - your dialogue captured the boy's awkwardness and the girl's humorous taunting very well. I also learnt something. I'd never heard of a cypress knee, so I googled it and now I know what it is.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
This is a cool little story. I enjoyed the flirting exchange between them - your dialogue captured the boy's awkwardness and the girl's humorous taunting very well. I also learnt something. I'd never heard of a cypress knee, so I googled it and now I know what it is.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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They are cool. (the knees)
Thanks for the review.
Comment from Wendy G
An original and quite different story about the beginning of a relationship. You wrote it well and in an engaging fashion - what would he do next to ruin his chances? Nice twist. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
An original and quite different story about the beginning of a relationship. You wrote it well and in an engaging fashion - what would he do next to ruin his chances? Nice twist. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think this was an enjoyable story. I like how you get into the boys head and how he's trying to be tough (only to hit someone with a rock). It's a fun read. Loved the ending. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
I think this was an enjoyable story. I like how you get into the boys head and how he's trying to be tough (only to hit someone with a rock). It's a fun read. Loved the ending. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Thank you.