Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh, your writing is very enticing! Free verse works beautifully here...and it does seem that we are all intent on looking to see what is just over the next hill, or beyond the next copse of trees! (Sometimes we're so intent on what is to come, we miss what is right before us!)

"Overhead the broken clouds slowly
loosen the blanket of yesterday's
heat..."

Wow. I could sit and ponder the beauty of that line for hours!

Karenina

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023

Thank you!

reply by karenina on 30-Apr-2023

Smile...it's been a great afternoon!

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

that would be a nice place to walk through on a cool spring day...
another great nature poem
very imagistic with smooth flow

may i suggest using a dark green background and a light blue font? just a thought ;)


thank you for sharing
shelley ð?¦?

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you Shelley I appreciate your input, I might revisit this.

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

You have portrayed not just a beautiful landscape filled with pleasures for all our senses, but you welcome us to share in the stirrings of your soul. Wonderful verse.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Thank you Ginda Simpson!

Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell

Excellent

This is a lovely poem, as you take your reader for a walk with you on a summer day. My favorite stanza is the second one. You really brought out all the tools of the poet for this one.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Thank you again.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This free verse, Seasons of Nature III, describes an almost hallowed place where the world, as it is known as a trial, falls away, and the miracle of the lake begins.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Spot on Bill, thank you for the wise comments. Jim

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A lovely poem with very vivid and lyrical imagery, such that I could have been present in the scene. Beautifully written in free form, which suited your words.
Wendy
Typo" "beckoning me"

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Wendy thank you for your extra set of eyes. I did miss that. Jim

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Another fine entry into the NaPo contest here, J. You have written a sublime pastoral that engages a bouquet of senses.

Just one small typo here: My nostrils flair. (flare)

Wishing you all the best in the continuation of National Poetry Month.

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Gloria, thank you I missed that one!

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Oh JLR This sound delightful and enticing, I bet you have had many swims in this lake. Summer is my favourite season, so i can sunbake and warm up my soul (and even swim in my small backyard pool.

Your free verse was tidy and flowed well, and made your lake sound lovely
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Chris, thank you for taking the time to read my poem!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lovely poem rejoicing in the summer's weather and scents. I especially liked how you describe how the longer longer summer days "make time come to a complete stop."

Comment:
of the sirens beconing me, (beckoning)

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023

Thank you, my friend! I appreciate your keen eyesight. Jim

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Beautiful poem for your book, once again. I love the summer day you have depicted here. All I need is southern sweet tea or an ice cold glass of lemonade.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :)) xo

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023

I am so grateful, Sally, for your continued good support.