Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

The hard c's effect the anger and s's a sort of hissing or losing steam,the w's are wailing and the r's are growling.
This is a strong onomatopoetic cautionary tale. As usual, you put you heart & soul into your writing

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023

Thank you I am glad you liked it.

reply by Liz O'Neill on 03-Jul-2023

I did

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

I like this cuz it gave me feelings of complete and utter loss from someone who wants loved me.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Thanks again my Mia friend.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Love the picture. But this is a bleak, dark piece. I hope it's not too much like truth. Your language and imagery are powerful and effective. A striking poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023

Thank you

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

These are sad words as this person feels unloved and uncared for here. Love is tested when we are in need, I found out the hard way, a poignant write, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023

Thank you