Autumn's Whisperings
Can you hear it calling?5 total reviews
Comment from Amanda Kirkley
I really enjoyed this! The contest requires 3 lines, so I do wonder which 2 words you keep together. Also, not sure if you meant it, but with Autumn being the name of a girl too, it leaves the poem open to an alternate interpretation.
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I really enjoyed this! The contest requires 3 lines, so I do wonder which 2 words you keep together. Also, not sure if you meant it, but with Autumn being the name of a girl too, it leaves the poem open to an alternate interpretation.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You need to be writing stories not poems. Don't get me wrong , the picture is absolutely captivating. Your writing is concise ad fluid at the same time. But the lengthy description providing a background for the poem, is almost entire of itself. If you don't already write stories, start! You oodles of talent.
Karen
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You need to be writing stories not poems. Don't get me wrong , the picture is absolutely captivating. Your writing is concise ad fluid at the same time. But the lengthy description providing a background for the poem, is almost entire of itself. If you don't already write stories, start! You oodles of talent.
Karen
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Hi poet!
Lovely, lovely, lovely! I "anticipate" you'll do well in this contest. I can actually "hear" the whispers in the air.
Nice short syllable count and requirements are met.
Thanks for entering and best wishes!
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
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Hi poet!
Lovely, lovely, lovely! I "anticipate" you'll do well in this contest. I can actually "hear" the whispers in the air.
Nice short syllable count and requirements are met.
Thanks for entering and best wishes!
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
Comment from JSD
For such a tiny poem that's one hell of a note! You've written your own piece of prose there. My favourite word use here is 'whispers', which reminds me of the leaves. I presume that was the intention. Well done and good luck.
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For such a tiny poem that's one hell of a note! You've written your own piece of prose there. My favourite word use here is 'whispers', which reminds me of the leaves. I presume that was the intention. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
Comment from RodG
Haikus don't come much shorter, but you have captured the essence of Autumn. Indeed change is anticipated though not always welcomed. I also enjoyed reading your Notes. Rod
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Haikus don't come much shorter, but you have captured the essence of Autumn. Indeed change is anticipated though not always welcomed. I also enjoyed reading your Notes. Rod
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023