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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Gypsy, you've written about a tough topic--child abuse--and you have done this most tastefully. Of special note:

but evil grabbed her first
and ravished her innocent soul

(very, very sad, and tragic)

G, writing like this must happen so that people will learn/know how to recognize Evil in its greatest form.

Well done. Margaret


 Comment Written 08-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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This is such a sad topic and yet you end it beautifully with the hope that despite all that the child had suffered in the past, God can still preserve the innocence and help her to live beyond what happened in the past because of evil hearts.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
    Yes, that was my intent, I'm happy you like it. Thank you very much, big sister. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Love,

    Marival
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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All children are born innocent and without sin. It's horrible when an adult abuses a child. God will not forsake them. Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation with us.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Exceptional
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pristine porcelain skin

made to be touched

by loving hands

but darkness got there first

to ravish your innocent soul

This stanza made me sad, the whole poem is beautifully written and presented, and I was glad to hear that God had not left her forsaken,
a pleasure to read****kahpot

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
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Another fine poem, Gypsy....and the abuse of a child is something that makes me furious and something Ill never understand, be it physically or sexually, disgusting and unforgivable

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much
    I appreciate your kind review.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
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This poem seemed to let the reader follow the child's path. From the days of innocence, to the trials of unacceptable lust and betrayal. Then in the end, God takes you, accepting you and holding you safe in His arms. Beautiful intent. Gretchen

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much,
    I appreciate your time and kind review.

    gypsy hugs
Comment from karenina
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Gypsy, this is beautifully written. we can only guess at how many of these children have taken their secret to their grave--bearing shame that was never theirs. Heaven will deal with those who try to soil innocent souls. Perversion is worthy of hell and God will judge harshly!

Karenina

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Karenina! it's so good to hear from you. Thank you very much,
    I appreciate your time and kind review.

    gypsy hugs
reply by karenina on 05-Apr-2024
    So nice to read you! Always!
Comment from shelley kaye
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cool gogyohka suite of lost childhood innocence and the damage it causes...
great imagery and smooth flow throughout

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley.
    I appreciate your time and kind review.

    gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is serious and very authentic. It is a Good God that comes through, although bad people find ways to hide their vile acts from God while they hurt God's Innocent children. You are a living proof of God's Love Overcoming evil. Very well written and presented, Gypsy.

Strength to you!

Alexan xx

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, Alexan.
    I appreciate your time and kind review.

    gypsy hugs
Comment from RJ Heritage
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Very sad words that paint a terrible realistic of many children.
I do believe in an afterlife, perhaps not as most Christians do, but one through a resurrection.
Heartfelt words to read, but harder to imagine.
RJ

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, RJ
    I appreciate your time and kind review.

    gypsy hugs
reply by RJ Heritage on 04-Apr-2024