haiku (ocean breeze beckons)
A Haiku for the club challenge18 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the haiku club event. Good syllables count and connection between lines. It flows well. The presentation is beautiful.
Well done!
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Excellent entry for the haiku club event. Good syllables count and connection between lines. It flows well. The presentation is beautiful.
Well done!
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Idawiesenfeld
Really nice. You triggered something but don't know what. Your last line really was nicely put and beautiful. It's a very serene poem, short but effective. Congrats
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Really nice. You triggered something but don't know what. Your last line really was nicely put and beautiful. It's a very serene poem, short but effective. Congrats
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Kym.
This is a well done haiku for the club. It reminds us that we all need some tranquility it our lives. A calm ocean or lake is a good metaphor for this.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Kym.
This is a well done haiku for the club. It reminds us that we all need some tranquility it our lives. A calm ocean or lake is a good metaphor for this.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you, Joan, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are most kindly welcome, Kym.
Joan
Comment from Acacia2
I think this is a very positive poem and way to look towards the future. Makes me wonder if it's about a person dreaming about a life they know they'll never have or about a life where they have to live the perfectness of all the expectations of those around them. Good job I like writings where there could be so many possibilities.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I think this is a very positive poem and way to look towards the future. Makes me wonder if it's about a person dreaming about a life they know they'll never have or about a life where they have to live the perfectness of all the expectations of those around them. Good job I like writings where there could be so many possibilities.
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Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you
Comment from AP Apgar
I like the Haiku you wrote for the club challenge - Excellent picture supporting -very peaceful - poem flows smoothly - good syllable count - words too, paint an excellent picture - the rhythm of the waves and the breeze - ever-beckoning life to merge in harmony - nicely done
Bless - AP
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I like the Haiku you wrote for the club challenge - Excellent picture supporting -very peaceful - poem flows smoothly - good syllable count - words too, paint an excellent picture - the rhythm of the waves and the breeze - ever-beckoning life to merge in harmony - nicely done
Bless - AP
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thank you, AP. for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Mark D. R.
Very nice overall imagery for this club entry.
Methinks that ripples in your dreams will evoke new adventures, or will wake you from a deep sleep!
Do like your format in my favorite poem style.
Mark
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Very nice overall imagery for this club entry.
Methinks that ripples in your dreams will evoke new adventures, or will wake you from a deep sleep!
Do like your format in my favorite poem style.
Mark
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you, Mark, I like your version of ripples, when I think about it they could work both ways, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A tranquil life with dreams without rippled is what we all strive for and enjoying peace and quiet is often a reward we all deserve, a fine post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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A tranquil life with dreams without rippled is what we all strive for and enjoying peace and quiet is often a reward we all deserve, a fine post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
I'm all for dreams without ripples. These days life is anything but tranquil! But if at the end of the day we can picture ourselves on a beach during sunset with a cool breeze, that's enough to smooth out the ripples.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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I'm all for dreams without ripples. These days life is anything but tranquil! But if at the end of the day we can picture ourselves on a beach during sunset with a cool breeze, that's enough to smooth out the ripples.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Kahpot.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
with the ocean breeze and ripples in the water.
-You create a peaceful mood in line two
and have a very good satori line.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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-Very nice image and presentation, Kahpot.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
with the ocean breeze and ripples in the water.
-You create a peaceful mood in line two
and have a very good satori line.
-Well done.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A beautiful Haiku poem comparing ones life to a calm ocean on a lovely day. Tranquility is what we all look for. No ripples on the water of our life. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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A beautiful Haiku poem comparing ones life to a calm ocean on a lovely day. Tranquility is what we all look for. No ripples on the water of our life. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot